Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, and avoid repetition. Also correct grammar (e.g., 'every Saturday and Sunday', 'I enjoyed the park', 'we played').

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. We used to go to the park every Saturday and Sunday when I was a child, and I enjoyed playing there with my cousins and siblings. For example, we often played hide-and-seek and fed the ducks, which made those weekends very memorable.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, explain reasons briefly using linking words, and finish the sentence. Avoid hesitations and repetition. Use correct expressions: 'I work a lot' or 'I'm very busy with work and errands'.

Ejemplo: I sometimes go to parks, but not often because I work long hours and have many errands to run. Therefore, I usually visit parks only on rare days off to relax and get some fresh air.

Sugerencia: Give a clear reason and a specific benefit, use linking words and correct grammar. Replace vague phrases ('somewhat can give you') with precise expressions and complete the thought about 'go to the next'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would be beneficial because they provide relaxation and a place to rest between busy activities. For instance, parents could take children there to play, and workers could use parks to unwind during lunch breaks.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and avoid unclear phrasing. Use present or future tense consistently ('I would like to go to Disneyland'). Explain why with concrete details instead of vague statements.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to go to Disneyland. It's been my childhood dream because I love the fairy-tale atmosphere and the chance to see characters like Cinderella and Snow White. Visiting would be special because I enjoy theme park rides and immersive shows.

× we used to go to the park every Saturdays and Sundays or during our free time when I was a child and I was enjoying in the park.

✓ We used to go to the park every Saturday and Sunday or during our free time when I was a child, and I enjoyed being in the park.

'Every' with specific days takes singular noun forms 'Saturday' and 'Sunday', not plurals. 'Used to' indicates past habit, so follow with simple past 'enjoyed' rather than 'was enjoying'. 'Enjoying in the park' is incorrect; use 'enjoyed being in the park' or 'enjoyed the park'. Use: every Saturday and Sunday; enjoyed; being in/at the park.

× And we are playing because we are playing there with my cousins and my siblings and.

✓ We played there with my cousins and my siblings.

The context is past habit, so use simple past 'played' rather than present progressive 'are playing'. The original is repetitive. Remove trailing conjunction 'and'. Ensure sentence completes the idea.

× Sometimes because I already have a work and since I was so busy with my work and other errands, umm, I don't go much.

✓ Sometimes; because I already have work and I am so busy with my job and other errands, I don't go very often.

Use 'have work' or 'have a job' rather than 'have a work'. 'Since I was so busy' mixes past with present - change to present 'I am so busy' to match 'I don't go'. Use 'don't go very often' for natural phrasing. Also use a semicolon or break into two sentences for clarity.

× I go, I don't go that much in the park now, but I.

✓ I don't go to the park much now, but sometimes I do.

'Go in the park' is incorrect preposition; use 'go to the park'. Simplify to 'I don't go to the park much now' and complete the contrast with 'but sometimes I do.' Avoid fragment 'I.'.

× it would be great to have a lot of parks here in our city because our parks are somewhat can give you relaxation and can give you time to rest when you needed to go to the next.

✓ It would be great to have more parks in our city because parks can give you relaxation and time to rest when you need to continue with your activities.

Remove redundant 'our' before 'parks' for concision. 'Somewhat can give' is ungrammatical; use 'can give'. 'When you needed' mixes past; use present 'need' to match general statement. 'Go to the next' is unclear; clarify as 'continue with your activities' or similar.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to visit in the future?

Question is acceptable, but 'want to go to' is informal; 'would like to visit' fits polite future intention. 'Visit' is more natural than 'go to' in this context.

× It was my dream to go there one day and fulfill my childhood dream of making the real Princess like Cinderella, Snow White and others.

✓ It was my dream to go there one day and to fulfill my childhood wish of becoming a real princess like Cinderella, Snow White and others.

Use 'fulfill my childhood wish' rather than repeating 'dream' awkwardly. 'Making the real Princess' is incorrect; use 'becoming a real princess'. Capitalization of 'Princess' is unnecessary. Use infinitive 'to fulfill' for parallel structure.

× And I thought that.

✓ And I thought that would be wonderful.

'And I thought that.' is an unfinished sentence. Complete the idea to convey what was thought, e.g. 'that would be wonderful' or 'that I could be like them.' Ensure sentences are complete.