Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (past tense for childhood) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “and” or “because” briefly to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. There was a park called Agenda near my house, and I often went there with my grandmother because it had swings and lots of other children to play with.

Sugerencia: Give a direct, concise answer in present tense and use one or two specific reasons. Improve grammar and reduce filler words. Use linking word “because” once to connect reason.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Since I moved to Canada, I often visit parks on my days off because they offer fresh air and a peaceful place to relax and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use varied vocabulary to avoid repetition. Provide two specific benefits and use linking words (“because”, “so that”) correctly. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and fix grammar and plural forms.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they would be accessible to more residents. For example, small parks in every neighborhood would give people places to exercise, take morning walks, and relax outdoors.

Sugerencia: This answer is unclear and incomplete. Give a direct response about a specific park or type of park you want to visit, and explain why briefly. Use a topic sentence and one supporting detail.

Ejemplo: Yes, in the future I would like to visit Stanley Park in Vancouver because I have heard it has beautiful coastal trails and large green spaces for picnics.

× Yes, I do like to go in parks.

✓ Yes, I do like to go to parks.

Use 'to' with the verb 'go' when indicating destination. 'Go in parks' is incorrect; say 'go to parks.' Suggestion: use 'go to' + place (e.g., 'go to the park').

× When I was in my childhood in my neighborhood, there were one park named as a agenda.

✓ When I was a child in my neighborhood, there was one park named Agenda.

'There were one park' is incorrect number agreement and structure. Use 'there was' for a single park (singular). 'In my childhood' is unnatural; use 'when I was a child.' 'Named as a agenda' is wrong: use 'named Agenda' and the article 'a' before 'agenda' is unnecessary for a proper name. Suggestion: 'When I was a child in my neighborhood, there was one park named Agenda.'

× I used to go with my grandmother there when I go there, and I always saw lots of children's over there.

✓ I used to go there with my grandmother, and I always saw lots of children there.

Mixed tenses: 'used to' indicates past habit, so 'when I go there' should be 'when I went there' or removed. 'Children's' is possessive; the plural noun is 'children.' 'Over there' is redundant with 'there.' Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use plural noun 'children.'

× Like I moved to Canada and I used to go in parks when I have a holiday and day off from my job because I think whenever we go in parks we enjoy fresh air and we refresh our mind over there.

✓ I moved to Canada, and I go to parks when I have a holiday or a day off from my job because whenever we go to parks we enjoy fresh air and refresh our minds there.

Avoid 'like' as filler; remove or replace with a comma. 'Used to' implies past habit; if still true use 'go.' Use 'to' with 'go' (go to parks). Use 'when I have' (present) to match current habit. Use 'a day off' with article. 'Refresh our mind' needs plural 'minds' when speaking generally. 'Over there' is unnecessary; 'there' suffices. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and correct prepositions/articles and pluralize 'minds.'

× I think uh, there should be more parks in my city because there should be lots of park in every corner of my city so that every people, uh, like all the people of my city where, where they are living, they can go over there and enjoy in parks, they can fresh their mind over there, they can go for morning walks, etc.

✓ I think there should be more parks in my city because there should be lots of parks in every corner so that all the people living there can go and enjoy the parks, refresh their minds, and go for morning walks.

'Lots of park' is incorrect; use plural 'parks.' 'Every people' is wrong; use 'all the people' or 'everyone.' 'Enjoy in parks' should be 'enjoy the parks' or 'enjoy being in parks.' 'They can fresh their mind' is incorrect—use 'refresh their minds.' Remove filler words and redundant phrases for clarity. Suggestion: use correct plural quantifiers, 'everyone' or 'all the people,' and parallel verbs in the list.