Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid filler phrases like “some or the other,” and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to play on the swings and join group games with neighborhood children, which made park visits exciting and social.

Sugerencia: Make the response clearer and more fluent. Begin with a direct answer, reduce hesitations (uh), and use a linking word to explain why you prefer parks now. Provide one concrete activity you do there.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After studying or working for long hours, I prefer going there because the fresh air and a short walk help me relax and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetitive phrases and be more specific about the characteristics you mean. Start with a clear statement, then give one or two concrete reasons using linking words like “for example” or “because.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer peaceful green spaces and exercise areas. For example, a park with walking paths and benches provides a quiet place for people to relax or meet friends.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid unnecessary hesitations. If you can’t remember the name, state the feature confidently and explain why that feature interests you. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to visit a famous park in Singapore that uses artificial plants and sustainable design. I am interested because its innovative approach to sustainability shows how urban green spaces can conserve water and reduce maintenance while still looking attractive.

× Obviously I did love going to the parks as a child because other than being at home, there was some or the other fun activity in the park.

✓ Obviously I did love going to parks as a child because, other than being at home, there was one or another fun activity in the park.

The sentence uses 'the parks' and 'the park' inconsistently. Use 'going to parks' (general) or 'going to the park' (specific). Also 'some or the other' is nonstandard; use 'one or another' or 'one thing or another'. I changed the article usage to make the meaning general and corrected the phrase to be idiomatic. Additionally I added a comma for clarity.

× Other than just studying and working for hours in front of the screen, I would prefer going to the park, uh, even now and have some fresh air.

✓ Other than just studying and working for hours in front of the screen, I prefer going to the park even now to get some fresh air.

The original mixes conditional 'would prefer' with a present-time statement; since the question asks about current preference, simple present 'prefer' is more appropriate. Removed filler 'uh' and changed 'and have some fresh air' to 'to get some fresh air' to correct verb form and purpose structure.

× I would really love to explore new parks because each park has some of the some of the other characteristics which could be a relaxing factor for each and everyone of us.

✓ I would really love to explore new parks because each park has some different characteristics that could be relaxing for each and every one of us.

The phrase 'some of the some of the other' is redundant; replace with 'some different'. 'Which could be a relaxing factor' is wordy and awkward; use 'that could be relaxing'. Also 'each and everyone of us' is incorrect; correct form is 'each and every one of us'. Adjusted articles and relative clause for clarity and grammaticality.

× Definitely, I would really love to visit the park, which is located in Singapore. I don't remember the name as of now, but uh, just to give you a brief, it is made of artificial plants and it highly contributes to the sustainability.

✓ Definitely, I would really love to visit a park in Singapore. I don't remember its name right now, but to give you a brief description, it is made of artificial plants and it contributes significantly to sustainability.

Using 'the park' implies a specific known park; since the speaker does not remember the name, use 'a park in Singapore'. 'Which is located in Singapore' is redundant with 'the park' and awkward; simplified. Replaced 'as of now' with 'right now' and removed filler 'uh'. 'It highly contributes to the sustainability' is awkward; use 'contributes significantly to sustainability' and use 'its name' instead of repeating 'the name'.