Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Focus on clear, grammatical sentences and reduce hesitation. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (activities, who you went with, feelings). Keep it within 3–4 short sentences and avoid filler sounds like "uh" and "umm."

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my parents and my friends, and we used to play games and have picnics. Those visits made me feel happy and relaxed because I could run around and enjoy nature.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a clear present-tense sentence, then briefly explain when and with whom you go. Use linking words like "however" or "but" to contrast busyness and free time. Eliminate repetitions and fillers.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Although I am often busy with work and study, I visit a park in my free time with my parents or sometimes with friends to relax and spend quality time together.

Sugerencia: Be specific about opinion and give reasons. Name a park clearly and explain why you like it using clear linking words such as "because" or "so". Keep sentences concise and avoid hesitations.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city. For example, I enjoy Camilla Kodbari Park because it is very beautiful and peaceful. When I visit, I feel relaxed and comfortable, so more parks like this would benefit the community.

Sugerencia: Give a clear plan or wish with specific details about the park and why you want to visit. Use correct tense for future (e.g., "I would like to visit" or "I plan to visit"). Remove fillers and repetitions and provide one or two supporting details about activities you hope to do there.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Potonga National Park in the future. I have heard it is very beautiful and I hope to go there with my friends to hike, see wildlife, and enjoy the scenery.

× When I was a child, I like uh, too much, uh, visiting a perk.

✓ When I was a child, I liked visiting parks a lot.

The sentence refers to a past time 'When I was a child', so the verb should be in the past tense 'liked' rather than present 'like'. Also 'perk' is a mispronunciation/spelling; use plural 'parks' if speaking generally and 'a lot' is a natural adverbial. Suggestion: use past simple for habits in the past and correct spelling.'

× Umm, my parents, uh, uh, I uh, together, umm, and my parents visited the this, uh, uh, going to visited this place.

✓ My parents and I went there together and visited that place.

This sentence is disfluent and has redundant words. Use simple past 'went' and 'visited' for completed past actions. Remove repeated fillers and choose one demonstrative ('that place') rather than 'the this'. Suggestion: form a clear subject + past verb structure: 'My parents and I went there together.'

× I I all enjoyed very much this place and also I with my friends, I spending.

✓ I really enjoyed that place, and I spent time there with my friends.

Mixed tenses and missing verb forms cause confusion. Use past simple 'enjoyed' and 'spent' for past activities. The phrase 'I spending' is incorrect; use 'I spent time' or 'I used to spend time'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and proper verb forms.

× Yes, I going to uh, I like going to park.

✓ Yes, I like going to the park.

The clause 'I going to' is incomplete and incorrect. For general present habits, use simple present 'I like'. English requires the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to parks in general or a specific park. Suggestion: use 'I like going to the park.' or 'I like going to parks.' depending on meaning.

× Umm, I still now umm, I busy with my uh, work, uh, study, uh, in my free time, I uh, I visited the park with my par parents, uh, and uh, sometimes with my friends.

✓ I am still busy with work and study now, but in my free time I visit the park with my parents and sometimes with my friends.

The sentence mixes tenses: 'I busy' lacks the verb 'am' for present continuous and 'visited' is past; should be present 'visit' for habitual actions. Use 'am busy' or 'I am busy with work and study now' and present simple 'I visit the park' for regular activities. Also correct 'par parents' to 'parents'. Suggestion: keep present tense for current routines and include the appropriate 'be' verb.

× We are spending quality time uh, that's it.

✓ We spend quality time together.

For habitual or repeated actions use simple present 'spend' rather than 'are spending' unless describing an action happening right now. 'That's it' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'We spend quality time together.' for a general statement.

× Yes, I like uh, Camilla Kodbari Moiramothi, uh, uh, park.

✓ Yes, I like Camilla Kodbari Moiramothi Park.

The original has extra filler words and inconsistent capitalization/capitalization of the park name. Remove 'uh' and include 'Park' as part of the proper name. Also do not use commas around the name. Suggestion: present proper nouns clearly without fillers.

× It is so uh, delightful park and uh very beautiful.

✓ It is a delightful and very beautiful park.

Word order and article usage are incorrect. Use the indefinite article 'a' before the countable noun 'park'. Adjectives should be ordered and connected properly: 'a delightful and very beautiful park.' Suggestion: include 'a' and place adjectives before the noun.

× Uh, when uh, uh, I visited that place, my mind is very relaxed and comfortable.

✓ When I visited that place, my mind was very relaxed and comfortable.

The sentence describes a past experience, so both verbs should be in past tense: 'visited' (already past) and 'was' instead of present 'is'. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent within the time frame.

× Uh, I umm, I, when I uh, from my free time, I go into this.

✓ When I have free time, I go there.

The original has incorrect phrasing 'from my free time' and 'go into this'. Use 'when I have free time' and 'go there' for clarity. Maintain present tense for habitual actions. Suggestion: use natural time clause 'When I have free time'.

× Yes, I going to umm uh totogram first like Potonga.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Totogram first, like Potonga.

'I going to' is incorrect; use 'I want to go' or 'I am going to go' depending on intent. Proper nouns should be capitalized. If expressing desire, use 'want to go'. Suggestion: choose correct auxiliary/modal for intention.

× This is very beautiful and amazing uh right, umm amazing places

✓ It is a very beautiful and amazing place.

Number agreement and article use: 'places' should be singular if referring to one location and include 'a' before 'very beautiful'. Remove fillers and redundant 'amazing'. Suggestion: keep adjective usage concise and match noun number.

× Uh, I went there with my friend friends uh, I wish one day I I went there this place uh and uh enjoy Perimus.

✓ I went there with my friends. I hope one day I can go there again and enjoy the place.

Mixed tenses and incorrect modal: 'I wish one day I I went there' is incorrect. For a future hope use 'I hope I can go there one day' or 'I wish I could go there one day.' 'Enjoy Perimus' is unclear; interpreted as 'enjoy the place.' Use present perfect or modal for future possibility. Suggestion: separate into two sentences, use 'went' for past and 'hope/can go' for future desire.