Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, reduce redundancy, add one specific detail (a game or memory), and use linking words correctly (e.g., “because” and “so”). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid tense errors.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they were a place to meet neighborhood friends and play games like hide-and-seek. They also helped me relax and forget about schoolwork, so I looked forward to visiting them on weekends.

Sugerencia: Use correct tense and remove filler words. Begin with a clear present-tense topic sentence, then add one specific reason or example and a linking word (e.g., “also” or “because”). Correct collocations (“bond with neighbors”, “visit the parks”). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks in Edam because they help me relax and break my daily routine. I also meet neighbors there and chat, which helps me feel more connected to the community.

Sugerencia: Give a direct, natural response and avoid awkward phrasing. Use comparatives correctly (“cleaner air”, “feel calmer”), and add a specific benefit or example (e.g., more playgrounds or walking paths). Keep it concise and use linking words like “because” or “so”.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green spaces help me relax and recharge. More parks would also reduce noise and improve air quality, and they could include playgrounds and walking paths for families.

Sugerencia: Be specific and concise: state the park and one clear reason. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (“that numerous of parks”). Use correct prepositions and collocations (“near the beach”, “watch the sunset”). One or two sentences are enough.

Ejemplo: Yes — I would like to visit Juhu Park in Mumbai, which is near the beach. I want to enjoy its relaxed atmosphere and watch the sunset over the sea.

× Well, I love to visit the parks in my childhood because it provides a chance to meet my neighbor friends and I used to play with them the outdoor activities.

✓ Well, I loved visiting parks in my childhood because they provided a chance to meet my neighbors, and I used to play outdoor activities with them.

The sentence refers to childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense: 'love to visit' -> 'loved visiting'. 'Parks' is plural, so 'it provides' should be 'they provided'. 'Neighbor friends' is unnatural; use 'neighbors'. Word order for 'play the outdoor activities' is incorrect; use 'play outdoor activities with them'. Also corrected article and noun order.

× Moreover, it helps me to escape from my school, homework and some stress.

✓ Moreover, it helped me to escape from school, homework, and stress.

This sentence refers to past childhood, so verbs should be past tense: 'helps' -> 'helped'. 'My school' is unnecessary; use 'school'. 'Some stress' is awkward; 'stress' is sufficient.

× In the present area, Edam, I also love to visiting the parks because it provide it helps me to relax and even, uh, escape from my daily routine.

✓ Here in Edam, I also love visiting parks because they help me to relax and even escape from my daily routine.

Use 'visiting' (gerund) without 'to': 'love visiting'. Subject 'parks' is plural so verb should be 'help' not 'provide it helps'. Removed redundant 'it' and combined clauses for clarity. 'In the present area' is unnatural; use 'Here in Edam'.

× Moreover, it provides an opportunity to meet the people from my neighborhood and bond the connection.

✓ Moreover, they provide an opportunity to meet people from my neighborhood and build connections.

'Parks' plural requires 'they provide' instead of 'it provides'. 'The people' can be simplified to 'people'. 'Bond the connection' is incorrect collocation; use 'build connections' or 'bond with people'.

× Really. Yes, I love to see the more parks into my city because being into the greener spaces helps me to relax and recharge and feel more calmer.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because being in greener spaces helps me relax, recharge, and feel calmer.

'Love to see the more parks into my city' is ungrammatical: use 'would like to see more parks in my city'. 'Being into the greener spaces' should be 'being in greener spaces'. 'Help me to relax' -> 'helps me relax'. 'Feel more calmer' is incorrect; use 'feel calmer' (comparative 'more' redundant with '-er').

× Moreover, it helps to reduce the noise pollution and make the air more cleaner.

✓ Moreover, they help reduce noise pollution and make the air cleaner.

Match plural subject 'parks' with 'they help'. 'The noise pollution' -> 'noise pollution' is more natural. 'More cleaner' is incorrect; use 'cleaner' (comparative without 'more').

× Well, that numerous of parks where I want to visit, but the one park that I really want to visit is the Juru Park in Mumbai, uh, which is closer to the beach.

✓ There are numerous parks I want to visit, but the one I really want to visit is Juhu Park in Mumbai, which is close to the beach.

Original lacks correct structure: use 'There are numerous parks I want to visit'. 'That numerous of parks' is incorrect quantifier use. 'Juru Park' likely intended 'Juhu Park' (proper noun corrected). Use 'which is close to the beach' rather than 'closer' unless comparing.

× So I want to enjoy the atmosphere of that place and see the sunset view.

✓ So I want to enjoy the atmosphere of that place and see the sunset.

Sentence is mostly correct; minor change: 'see the sunset' is more natural than 'see the sunset view'. Kept verb 'want to' appropriate for future desire. No tense change needed.