Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (like “uh”), correct tense consistency, and give one specific supporting detail. Use one linking phrase to connect the reason.

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child because I disliked crowded places. For example, I felt uncomfortable around large groups, so I preferred playing at home instead.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear, fluent topic sentence and reduce repetition. Use linking words (for example, moreover) and give one or two specific benefits with concrete examples. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., “get even better for you”).

Ejemplo: Yes, my views have changed and I now enjoy walking in parks. For example, walking is great for my health and, moreover, well-designed parks let me meet neighbors and try outdoor exercises like jogging.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, then explain clearly with one or two specific reasons. Fix grammar (singular/plural, word order) and remove vague phrases. Use a linking word like “because” or “since” to connect causes and results.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love more parks in my city because new urban projects are creating green spaces. For instance, the current modernization around the new station includes plans for several parks, which will improve local recreation and air quality.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, give specific details about the park (name or features) and avoid hesitations. Use correct grammar and concise description, plus a reason why you want to visit. Limit to up to five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I want to visit a futuristic park in China that I read about. It features striking architecture and high-tech gardens that look like a movie set, so I’d like to see the designs in person and take photos.

× The reason is I don't like crowded areas.

✓ The reason is I didn't like crowded areas.

The question and context refer to childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense to match the time frame. Use 'didn't like' for past negative statements.

× Uh, as a kid also I didn't like taking a walk around the house or at the back.

✓ When I was a kid, I also didn't like taking walks around the house or in the backyard.

Use past tense consistently for childhood experiences. 'As a kid' is better placed at the start; 'taking walks' (plural) sounds natural for habitual action; 'at the back' is incorrect preposition and phrase—use 'in the backyard'.

× But my dad always used to force me to go back because he used to say walking is essential.

✓ But my dad always used to force me to go out because he used to say walking was essential.

Maintain past tense: 'used to force' is correct, but 'go back' is wrong meaning; 'go out' fits going to the park. Also 'walking is essential' should be 'walking was essential' to match past context.

× Now I completely change my mindset from my childhood.

✓ Now I have completely changed my mindset since childhood.

Current state should use present perfect 'have changed' because the change started in the past and affects the present; 'since childhood' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Now I do like taking a walk around the back.

✓ Now I do like taking walks in the backyard.

Use plural 'walks' for habitual action and correct preposition and noun 'in the backyard' rather than 'around the back'.

× I think it's not only, you know, good for the the health, it's also experience.

✓ I think it's not only good for your health, it is also a valuable experience.

'The the' is a typo; use 'your health' for body-related reference. 'It's also experience' is ungrammatical — use 'a valuable experience' to make it a noun phrase.

× Sometimes you could meet new people, new friends.

✓ Sometimes you can meet new people and make new friends.

Use 'can' for general possibility; combine ideas with 'and' and use 'make new friends' which is natural collocation.

× Sometimes you could get even better for you, depending on whether the park is really developed and amazing.

✓ Sometimes it can be even better for you, depending on whether the park is well developed and attractive.

The original is ungrammatical. Use 'it can be even better for you' and adjective choices 'well developed' and 'attractive' are more natural than 'really developed and amazing'.

× I would love to see a lot of park in my city that's already happening because of the modern station of my city that's taking place at the moment is helping this.

✓ I would love to see a lot of parks in my city. That's already happening because the city's modernization projects that are taking place at the moment are helping this.

Use plural 'parks'. Sentence was long and unclear—split into two. 'Modern station of my city' is incorrect; 'city's modernization projects' is clearer. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× So obviously we are about to see or witness a lot of backs that go into develop very soon.

✓ So obviously we are about to see or witness a lot of parks being developed very soon.

'backs' is a wrong word; should be 'parks'. Use passive gerund 'parks being developed' to express ongoing development. 'go into develop' is incorrect verb phrase.

× Yes, I would like to go to this futuristic park in China.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to a futuristic park in China.

Use the indefinite article 'a' because the speaker does not specify a particular park; 'this' implies known to listener which is unclear.

× I don't know where it said or the exact location, but it's in China.

✓ I don't know the exact location, but it's in China.

'Where it said' is incorrect and unnecessary. Simplify to 'I don't know the exact location'.

× So futuristic is well built.

✓ It is very futuristic and well built.

'So futuristic is well built' is ungrammatical. Use 'It is very futuristic and well built' to link adjectives to the subject.

× It looks like it is came out of from a movie scene.

✓ It looks like it came out of a movie scene.

Do not use 'is came'; use simple past 'came out of'. Also 'out of from' is redundant—use 'out of'.

× So I would like to go there, fix it, you know, one time when it's a life.

✓ So I would like to go there once in my life.

Original is disfluent and ungrammatical. 'Once in my life' is a standard phrase meaning at least one visit during lifetime; remove extraneous fillers like 'fix it' and 'you know'.