Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp (thì và cấu trúc), phát âm một vài từ và làm câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn. Nên mở đầu bằng câu trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (hoạt động bạn làm, cảm xúc) và kết luận ngắn. Tránh lặp từ (‘really’ quá nhiều) và lỗi thì (‘like’ → ‘liked’; ‘when I'm all get older’ → ‘as I’ve grown older’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I loved going to the park because I often played football and climbed trees with my friends. Those visits felt very free and fun, but as I’ve grown older I go less often.

Sugerencia: Cần ngắn gọn hóa câu, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và tránh lặp. Nên nêu rõ lý do với một hoặc hai chi tiết (ví dụ: tình huống gặp chó, cảm giác khi thấy chó). Dùng linking word để liên kết lý do (for example, because).

Ejemplo: Not really. I’m afraid of dogs, and many parks here have loose dogs, which makes me feel unsafe. For example, once a dog ran towards me and barked loudly, so I prefer to avoid parks.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (opinion, park/parks, take/takes, city/cities) và phát triển ý rõ ràng hơn. Nên đưa ra lý do cụ thể vì sao ưu tiên xây dựng tòa nhà (ví dụ: thiếu nhà ở hoặc công việc), và dùng linking words (instead, because).

Ejemplo: I wouldn’t necessarily support more parks because land is limited and our city needs more housing and offices. For example, many young people here struggle to find affordable flats, so I’d prefer new buildings.

Sugerencia: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và tự nhiên, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (‘scare’ → ‘scared of’), giảm lặp từ ‘really’. Có thể nêu điều kiện khi sẽ thay đổi ý định (ví dụ: nếu có công viên an toàn, không có chó), để câu có thêm chiều sâu.

Ejemplo: Not at the moment — I’m still afraid of dogs in parks. However, I might visit parks in the future if they were better managed and had separate dog-free areas.

× When I was a child, I really like to go into the park because it's really fun and I have time to play sports with my friends.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked going to the park because it was really fun and I had time to play sports with my friends.

The sentence mixes past time reference 'When I was a child' with present tense verbs 'like' and 'have'. Use past tense to match the time frame: 'liked' and 'had'. Also 'go into the park' is more naturally 'going to the park' when describing habitual past activities. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for actions in the past.

× But now when I'm all get older, I really don't like to go to the park.

✓ But now that I'm older, I really don't like going to the park.

The phrase 'I'm all get older' is ungrammatical. Use 'now that I'm older' to indicate change with time. For current habits, 'don't like going' is more natural than 'don't like to go'. Suggestion: simplify to 'now that I'm older' and use gerund after 'like' for general dislike.

× Now I don't like to go to the parks because the parks now have a lot of dogs and I and I'm really scared of dogs, so I really don't want to go to any parks.

✓ Now I don't like going to parks because there are a lot of dogs and I'm really scared of them, so I don't want to go to any parks.

Use 'there are' to state existence in present (There be issue as well) and plural 'parks' without article. Avoid repeating 'and I and'. Replace 'scared of dogs' with 'scared of them' to avoid repetition. Use gerund 'going' after 'like'. Suggestion: use 'there are' + plural noun and clear pronoun reference.

× Now I don't like to go to the parks because the parks now have a lot of dogs and I and I'm really scared of dogs, so I really don't want to go to any parks.

✓ Now I don't like going to parks because there are a lot of dogs and I'm really scared of them, so I don't want to go to any parks.

The original repeats 'I and I'm' and repeats 'dogs'. This is poor pronoun use. Use 'them' to refer back to 'dogs' and remove duplicate subject. Suggestion: avoid redundant pronouns and use a clear anaphoric pronoun.

× In my opinions, I don't want to see more parks in my cities because these parts takes a lot of place.

✓ In my opinion, I don't want to see more parks in my city because these parks take up a lot of space.

Use singular 'opinion' in set phrase 'In my opinion'. 'Cities' should be singular if referring to the speaker's city. 'Parts' is wrong; should be 'parks'. 'Takes' should agree with plural 'parks' so use 'take', and 'take up a lot of space' is the idiomatic expression. Suggestion: use correct set phrases and ensure noun agreement and idiomatic verbs.

× In my opinions, I don't want to see more parks in my cities because these parts takes a lot of place.

✓ In my opinion, I don't want to see more parks in my city because these parks take up a lot of space.

There are multiple agreement issues: 'opinions' should be singular; 'cities' likely should be singular to match speaker's city; 'parts' is wrong word; 'takes' disagrees with plural subject 'parks' so use 'take'. Also use idiomatic 'take up space'. Suggestion: check subject-verb agreement and word choice.

× Instead I want more buildings.

✓ Instead, I want more buildings.

This sentence is mostly correct, but add a comma after 'Instead' for clarity. Tense is present to state current preference, which is fine. Suggestion: include comma for natural pause.

× In the future I really don't want to go to any parks just like now because I really scare of dog in the parks.

✓ In the future I really don't want to go to any parks, just like now, because I'm really scared of dogs in the parks.

Use future reference correctly: speaker expresses future intention with present simple 'don't want' is acceptable, but phrase needs correction: 'I really scare of dog' is ungrammatical — use 'I'm really scared of dogs'. Plural 'dogs' fits general fear. Add commas to set off 'just like now'. Suggestion: use 'be scared of' and pluralize nouns when speaking generally.