Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations and repetitions; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use past tense consistently and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “fun” instead of “funny” for this context).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. For example, my parents and I often spent weekend afternoons there, playing games and having picnics. Because there were many parks near our home, I usually met neighborhood friends, which made those visits very enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence in present tense, then add clear, specific reasons using linking words. Use correct collocations (e.g., “sit on benches,” “get fresh air,” “breathe fresh air”) and avoid short fragmented phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go there to study because walking or sitting on benches helps me concentrate, and I also like it because I can get fresh air and relax after a busy day.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct opinion sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers and be more precise (e.g., “green spaces,” “exercise,” “socializing”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because more green spaces provide places for exercise and socializing. For instance, additional parks would give children safe areas to play and adults places to walk or do outdoor sports.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer naming the park, then add one or two specific reasons why you want to visit, using linking words. Correct proper nouns and avoid repetition. Use natural phrasing to explain where you saw it or why it appeals to you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Central Park in New York in the future. I am drawn to it because I have seen it in my favorite TV series and it looks beautiful and diverse, with large lawns, lakes, and many activities to try.

× I enjoy, I enjoyed, uh, doing it with my parents.

✓ I enjoyed doing it with my parents.

The sentence mixes present tense 'enjoy' and past tense 'enjoyed'; the question asked about childhood, so past tense should be used consistently. Use 'enjoyed' only to match the past time frame.

× We always, uh, spend our, our free time, uh, by going, uh, in parks.

✓ We always spent our free time going to parks.

Describing past habitual action requires past tense 'spent' rather than present 'spend'. Also the preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'parks' here; use 'to parks'. Remove unnecessary filler words.

× so it was really funny.

✓ so it was really fun.

Funny means causing laughter; 'fun' describes enjoyment. For experiences, use the adjective 'fun'.

× As for present time, I still like going to parks.

✓ At present, I still like going to parks.

Use the idiomatic phrase 'At present' instead of 'As for present time'. The rest is fine in present tense.

× I enjoy going to parks because I can study when I walk or when I sit on bunches.

✓ I enjoy going to parks because I can study when I walk or when I sit on benches.

The noun 'bunches' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'benches'. No change in verb form is needed.

× Also, I like this time of activity because I can fresh.

✓ Also, I like this kind of activity because I can feel refreshed.

'Fresh' is an adjective that cannot stand alone after 'can' in this sense. Use a verb phrase 'feel refreshed' or 'get fresh air'. This corrects word form and meaning.

× I can breath fresh.

✓ I can breathe fresh air.

'Breath' is a noun; the verb form is 'breathe'. Also add 'air' to complete the expression 'fresh air'.

× I want to go to the great park in the New York and it is a central Central Park and it is a really fascinating park for me.

✓ I want to go to the great park in New York, which is Central Park, and it is a really fascinating place for me.

Do not use 'the' before 'New York' in this context; use 'in New York'. 'Central Central Park' is redundant; the park's name is 'Central Park'. Also 'park' repeated is awkward—use 'place' or repeat 'park' once. Use relative clause 'which is' for clarity.

× I, I saw it when I, when I was watching my favorite series, Uh, and I think it's really good.

✓ I saw it when I was watching my favorite series, and I think it's really great.

Reduce fillers and keep tense consistent: 'saw it when I was watching' is correct past continuous for the viewing context. 'Really good' is acceptable but 'really great' is a slightly stronger collocation; main point is punctuation and removal of hesitations.