Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be direct and use past tense consistently. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and small errors (prod → park). Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went with my parents and we would walk around the lake and have picnics, which I especially liked because we could play games and spend quality family time together.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use present simple tense where appropriate. Explain reason clearly with coherent linking words (for example, “but”, “because”, “however”). Avoid unclear phrases like “up some” or “relaxing message.” Keep it to two or three concise sentences.

Ejemplo: I like parks, but I rarely go now because I work long hours in Shenzhen. Because of my busy schedule, I usually don't have time to visit parks except on rare weekends.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific benefits. Use plural/singular correctly (parks, people) and linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid repeating words and filler sounds.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide places for people to exercise and relax. For example, a small park nearby could encourage residents to walk or do morning exercises instead of staying indoors.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use natural phrasing. If you have no specific park in mind, say so and then give a brief reason and a possible plan. Use correct grammar (e.g., “I don’t have any in mind” and “my work keeps me very busy”).

Ejemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind at the moment because my work in Shenzhen keeps me very busy. However, I plan to visit local parks when I have more free time, perhaps during holidays or weekends.

× Actually, when I was a child, I like to go to the park with my parents in their free time.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I liked to go to the park with my parents in their free time.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'liked' instead of 'like' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense for habits in the past (e.g., 'I liked to go' or 'I used to go').

× Uh, we are together, go to the prod to enjoy my family time.

✓ We would go together to the park to enjoy family time.

Original has awkward structure and wrong word 'prod' (likely 'park') and incorrect present tense 'are together'. Rephrase to a clear past habitual expression: 'We would go together' or 'We went together'. Also use 'park' and 'family time' without possessive. Suggestion: keep subject and verb together and use correct vocabulary ('park').

× Umm, up some.

✓ Um, not really.

This fragment is unclear and ungrammatical. The speaker likely means they do not go often now; a common response is 'Not really.' Suggestion: give a short clear answer that fits the question about current habit, e.g., 'Not really' or 'Not much.'

× Sorry, not because right now I'm working in the Shenzhen.

✓ Sorry, not really, because right now I'm working in Shenzhen.

'In the Shenzhen' incorrectly uses the definite article and preposition. City names do not take 'the' and 'in Shenzhen' is correct. Also add 'really' for naturalness and clarity. Suggestion: omit 'the' before city names and use 'in' + city name.

× I have a lot of work every day, I have no time and I have another relaxing message.

✓ I have a lot of work every day, so I have no time and no chance to relax.

The clause 'I have another relaxing message' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'no chance to relax' or 'no time to relax' to express inability to relax. Also connect clauses with 'so' for cause and effect. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'time to relax' or 'chance to relax.'

× Yes, I would like to see it because in the city if we have more and more park.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks because if the city has more parks, ...

'See it' is vague; better say 'see more parks.' 'More and more park' has wrong article and number: use plural 'parks' and make the clause grammatical with 'if the city has more parks.' Suggestion: match count (plural) and include 'the' with 'city' when specific ('the city').

× Uh, it, it can make the people, uh, have a place to go to exercise and relaxing.

✓ They can give people a place to exercise and relax.

Pronoun 'it, it' is unclear and repetitive; use 'they' to refer to parks (plural). Also use parallel verbs 'exercise and relax' rather than 'to exercise and relaxing.' Suggestion: keep verb forms parallel and ensure pronoun agrees with noun in number.

× Umm, not yet, because in the Shenzhen my work is very busy, so uh, is filled with my time all day.

✓ Not yet, because in Shenzhen my work is very busy, so it fills my time all day.

'Omit 'the' before city name. Use 'it fills my time' rather than 'is filled with my time.' The original is passive/awkward. Use active voice 'it fills my time.' Suggestion: use active constructions and correct preposition use with city names.

× It made me uh, have spare free time to go to city.

✓ It means I don't have any spare time to go to the city.

Original sentence is ungrammatical: 'made me have spare free time' is wrong and 'go to city' lacks 'the.' Use 'It means I don't have any spare time' to express consequence, and 'go to the city' if referring to a particular city. Suggestion: use negative form to express lack of time and include 'the' before 'city' when needed.