Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "so").

Ejemplo: Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because they were close to my home and full of trees and birds. For example, I often visited Pike Park with my family where I fed ducks and climbed small trees.

Sugerencia: Make the answer grammatically correct and clearer: state directly that you still go, give one reason, and use a linking phrase (e.g., "because", "so") to explain how parks help you. Avoid repetition and tense errors.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax after a long day. For instance, I often take a short walk in a nearby park to reduce stress and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason: choose either yes or no, then explain briefly using linking words like "because" or "however". Avoid vague phrases and filler sounds.

Ejemplo: I would like to see more parks in the city because many areas are filled with high-rise apartments and lack green space. However, it can be difficult to create new parks because land is expensive in the city.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a specific suggestion or plan: name the type of park or location you'd like to visit, and explain why using clear linking words. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and avoid long uncertain phrasing.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit more green spaces in the city in the future, especially small neighborhood parks near high-density apartments. These parks would give residents a place to relax and socialize when they have limited outdoor space at home.

× When I was a child, I often went to parks because, umm, it's I, I want to get along with animals, trees and I came around the parks by Pike.

✓ When I was a child, I often went to parks because I wanted to be close to animals and trees, and I used to visit the parks near Pike.

The sentence contains incorrect pronoun use and awkward phrasing. 'it's I, I want' is ungrammatical; replace with 'I wanted' to match past context. 'get along with animals, trees' is unnatural; use 'be close to' or 'get close to'. 'I came around the parks by Pike' is awkward—use 'I used to visit the parks near Pike'. Use consistent past tense verbs for actions in childhood.

× Now when I go grow up, I still go like going to the parks because a long day.

✓ Now that I am grown up, I still like going to parks because after a long day I feel relaxed.

The original mixes tenses and has incorrect verb forms: 'go grow up' is wrong; use 'am grown up' or 'have grown up'. 'I still go like going to the parks' mixes 'go' and 'like going'—use 'still like going to parks'. 'because a long day' lacks a verb and clear meaning; clarify with 'because after a long day I feel relaxed'. Ensure present state ('am grown up') and habitual action ('still like') are correct.

× I I, I, I feel so stressed and going to par going to the past.

✓ I feel very stressed, so I go to parks to relax.

This sentence has repetition and fragmented structure. Remove disfluencies ('I I, I, I') and combine ideas into a clear cause-effect structure: 'I feel very stressed, so I go to parks to relax.' Use present simple for habitual action and 'to relax' to express purpose.

× MMM I'm not sure. I think the city is not. It's not much, uh, more parks because it's a large for a building or apartment and it's so not convenient.

✓ I'm not sure. I think the city does not have many parks because land is mainly used for buildings and apartments, so it is not convenient.

The original is disfluent and uses incorrect structure: 'the city is not' is incomplete. Replace with 'the city does not have many parks'. 'It's a large for a building or apartment' is ungrammatical; express the idea that space is used for buildings: 'land is mainly used for buildings and apartments'. Use 'does not have many' for quantifier and correct verb agreement.

× Yes MMM I think more back in the city in the future be uh will green space at the future high density apartment probing residents have limited other areas so add additional parks could relax.

✓ Yes. I think the city should add more green spaces in the future because high-density apartment living gives residents limited outdoor areas, so additional parks would help them relax.

The original sentence mixes words and has incorrect tense and modal use. 'be uh will green space at the future' is ungrammatical—use 'should add more green spaces in the future' or 'the city should create more green spaces'. 'probing' is incorrect; likely meant 'providing' or 'because'. Use conditional 'would help' to indicate potential benefit. Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct modal for recommendation ('should').