Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct tense and article errors, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘great-grandparents’ not ‘grand grandparents’) and minor grammar (e.g. ‘I liked going to the park’).

Ejemplo: Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child. It was right in front of my house, and I visited it every day with my great-grandparents; there were many boats on the pond, and I loved watching them.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar (use ‘go to parks’, ‘it makes me feel’), simplify and add a brief reason with linking words. Keep response to a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Avoid redundancy like ‘again a kid who is watching’.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood. For example, walking among flowers and birds makes me feel relaxed and playful, like a child again.

Sugerencia: Structure answer: state opinion, give one clear reason and a specific detail. Correct phrasing (e.g. ‘nearby area’, ‘there are no parks where I live’) and avoid informal fillers such as ‘like’. Provide exact distance phrased properly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because I enjoy spending time outdoors. At the moment there are no parks near my home, so I usually have to travel 10 to 15 kilometres to reach one.

Sugerencia: Be clearer and use correct nouns: say ‘a public botanical garden’ and use accurate descriptions (plants, paths, ponds, fountains). Mention one or two specific attractions and correct the opening period phrasing (‘open from October to November’). Keep to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the public botanical garden in the future. It has a wide variety of plants, walking paths and fountains, but it is only open from October to November.

× Yes, I like going back.

✓ Yes, I liked going back.

The question asks about childhood (past), so the student should use past tense. Use 'liked' to match the time frame; 'like' (present) is inconsistent with 'as a child'. Suggestion: Use past tense when referring to past habits or feelings.

× When I was a child, I still remember there was a park in front of my house I used to visit every day with my grand grandparents and they there are so many boats there and I love watching them.

✓ When I was a child, I remember there was a park in front of my house that I used to visit every day with my grandparents; there were many boats and I loved watching them.

Multiple issues: use of 'still remember' is awkward with past context (use 'remember'); extra word 'grand' repeated; 'they there are' is incorrect word order; plural agreement for 'boats' with past description requires 'there were'; 'I love' should be past 'I loved' to match past time. Suggestion: Simplify sentence, remove repetition, keep past tense consistent, and use correct 'there were' structure.

× Do you still like going parks now because it takes me back to my childhood and it make me feel like I'm again a kid who is watching flowers, birds and everything in the park.

✓ Do you still like going to parks now? It takes me back to my childhood and makes me feel like a child again, watching the flowers, birds and everything in the park.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'going'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it make' should be 'it makes'. 'I'm again a kid' is awkward; use 'makes me feel like a child again'. Suggestion: Add necessary prepositions, fix subject-verb agreement, and reorder phrase for natural English.

× I would love to see more parks in my nearby area or city because I love enjoying being at park.

✓ I would love to see more parks in my nearby area or city because I enjoy being in a park.

'Nearby area' is awkward but acceptable; 'being at park' is incorrect article and preposition use — you need 'a park' and 'in' is more natural. 'Love enjoying' is redundant; use 'enjoy'. Suggestion: Use 'a park' and 'in a park', remove redundancy.

× But now I live in a society so there is no park if I need.

✓ But now I live in a gated community, so there is no park near me when I need one.

'Live in a society' is non-native phrasing; 'if I need' is unclear and ungrammatical. Better to say 'gated community' or 'housing society' depending on dialect and 'when I need one' to indicate necessity. Suggestion: Use clearer noun for residential area and complete the conditional with 'when I need one'.

× If I want to visit a park then I have to go like 10 to 15 kilometres far from my home.

✓ If I want to visit a park, I have to go about 10 to 15 kilometres from my home.

Avoid filler 'like' in formal speech; 'kilometres far from' is redundant: use 'about 10 to 15 kilometres from my home'. Suggestion: Use 'about' for approximation and correct preposition 'from'.

× Yes there is a park I would love to go in the future is botanical public and it has variety of flavors and boards and fountains but it only open between October to November.

✓ Yes, there is a park I would love to visit in the future: it is a public botanical garden with a variety of flowers, boardwalks and fountains, but it is only open from October to November.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence, missing punctuation. 'Botanical public' incorrect word order; 'variety of flavors' should be 'variety of flowers'; 'boards' likely 'boardwalks' or 'benches'; use 'is only open from... to ...' and maintain verb 'is'. Suggestion: Reorder nouns ('public botanical garden'), correct vocabulary ('flowers', 'boardwalks'), and use 'open from... to...' for time ranges.