Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và rõ ràng: trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và cụm từ lộn xộn (ví dụ “I went to go”). Sử dụng tối đa 3-4 câu, thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: tần suất, hoạt động và cảm xúc). Kết hợp liên từ để mạch lạc (e.g. “and”, “so”, “because”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often visited them at weekends and played games like hide-and-seek with my family, which was great fun. Those visits made me very happy because we spent quality time together. I would love to take my family back there now.

Sugerencia: Làm câu trả lời súc tích và chính xác: bắt đầu với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh những cụm từ mơ hồ (“laid back attitude” không cần thiết nếu không giải thích). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ hoạt động bạn làm khi ở công viên). Sửa ngữ pháp như “reminds me of happy moments” và “I can walk around the park.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of happy family times. I feel relaxed and refreshed when I visit, and I often walk or sit and read under the trees. The fresh air and quiet atmosphere really help me unwind.

Sugerencia: Trả lời trực tiếp và logic: bắt đầu với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (“Yes, I would like more parks”). Giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể và thực tế (ví dụ lợi ích về sức khỏe, không gian cho trẻ em). Tránh diễn đạt vụng về như “expand more lands” — có thể nói “create more parks” hoặc “allocate more land for parks.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we currently have only a few. More parks would give residents places to exercise, relax and for children to play, which would improve public health and community life.

Sugerencia: Rõ ràng và chính xác: tách hai ý (yoga classes và công viên) và giải thích mãnh mẽ. Sửa lỗi từ vựng/ý (không dùng “hostility” nếu ý là thân thiện). Giữ tối đa 3 câu, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về công viên bạn muốn đến và lý do.

Ejemplo: In the future I would like to attend yoga classes in a park to keep fit. I also plan to join a local community group that meets at a nearby park because the people there are friendly and it’s a great way to meet neighbours. That combination would help both my health and social life.

× Of course, when I was a child, I went to the park frequently at the weekend.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I used to go to the park frequently on weekends.

The original sentence uses simple past 'went' which is acceptable but 'used to' better expresses habitual past actions; also 'at the weekend' is more British; 'on weekends' is more natural here. Suggest using 'used to' for recurring past habits and 'on weekends' for regular occurrences.

× Moreover, I also played games with my family, which is called hide and seek.

✓ Moreover, I also played games with my family, which are called hide-and-seek.

The phrase 'which is called' treats 'games' (plural) as singular. Use plural verb 'are' and hyphenate 'hide-and-seek' as a compound noun. Ensure verb agrees with the plural noun.

× It was so fun and I went to go.

✓ It was so much fun and I wanted to go.

'It was so fun' is informal; 'so much fun' is more natural. 'I went to go' is ungrammatical—likely intended 'I wanted to go' or 'I used to go'. Use clear verb phrases to express desire or repeated action.

× I want to go to the park again with my family.

✓ I want to go to the park again with my family.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present-future desire; no change required.

× Yes, going to park reminds me of happy moment with my family.

✓ Yes, going to the park reminds me of happy moments with my family.

Missing definite article before 'park' required: 'the park'. 'Moment' should be plural 'moments' to match general memories. Use 'reminds me of' correctly with plural noun.

× Therefore I enjoy it.

✓ Therefore, I enjoy it.

Add a comma after introductory adverb 'Therefore' for correct punctuation; sentence itself is grammatically correct.

× I feel satisfied whenever I go to the park.

✓ I feel satisfied whenever I go to the park.

This sentence is correct in present simple to describe habitual feelings; no change required.

× Also, I have a laid back attitude.

✓ Also, I have a laid-back attitude.

Use a hyphen for the compound adjective 'laid-back' before a noun. Otherwise sentence is fine.

× I can breathe in fresh air and get around the park.

✓ I can breathe fresh air and walk around the park.

'Breathe in fresh air' is acceptable but 'breathe fresh air' is more natural. 'Get around the park' is awkward; use 'walk around the park' to express moving around the area.

× MMM, I feel interested in this question because in my city there are a few parks.

✓ Hmm, I am interested in this question because there are only a few parks in my city.

'Feel interested' is acceptable but 'I am interested' is more natural. 'In my city there are a few parks' is ambiguous—'a few' can mean several; use 'only a few' if intended scarcity. Place phrase order to be more natural.

× As a result, I want to expand more lands in order to build more parks in my city, and many people can have opportunities to go to the park every day like me.

✓ As a result, I would like to expand land to build more parks in my city so that many people will have the opportunity to go to the park every day like I do.

Use 'would like' for polite desire. 'Expand more lands' is ungrammatical—'expand land' or 'create more land/allocate more land' is correct. Use 'so that' for purpose and 'will have the opportunity' matches future possibility. 'Like me' should be 'like I do' for correct pronoun use.

× I think in the future I'll prefer going to yoga classes to keep fit.

✓ I think in the future I'll prefer going to yoga classes to keep fit.

This sentence is grammatically correct; 'I'll prefer' expresses future preference and matches context.

× However I still enjoy going to HO team in park in the future because people there are hostility and I can exchange pleasantries with each other.

✓ However, I would still enjoy going to the HO team in the park in the future because the people there are friendly and I can exchange pleasantries with them.

Add comma after 'However'. 'Going to HO team in park' needs articles: 'the HO team in the park'. 'People there are hostility' is wrong word choice; use adjective 'friendly' instead of noun 'hostility'. 'Exchange pleasantries with each other' is redundant—use 'with them'. Ensure pronouns and articles agree.