Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific detail or short example. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "and", "also", "because"). Aim for 2–3 sentences, each grammatically correct.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went with my mother and remember swinging on the swings and riding the merry-go-round, because the grass felt soft under my feet and it made me feel free.

Sugerencia: Clarify the main idea and use clearer linking language. Reduce repetition and make the comparison more direct. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use vocabulary like "remind", "nostalgic", or "relate to" for precision.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they remind me of my childhood when I used to play there. Also, I like watching people of different ages exercising or doing yoga, which makes the park feel like a place for all generations.

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly first, then give a clear reason. Avoid hesitations and small errors ("parts" → "parks"). If you prefer schools to parks, explain briefly why and acknowledge the original topic. Use 2 sentences max.

Ejemplo: I think more parks would be nice, but I would prefer more schools because they help children get a better education and promote long-term development. However, parks are also important for recreation and community health.

Sugerencia: Be careful mixing fantasy with reality—answer naturally and briefly. Start with a direct sentence, then give a short reason. Use present/future tense correctly and avoid awkward phrasing like "it fantasized me."

Ejemplo: In the future I would love to visit a famous theme park like the one from the Jurassic Park movies, because I was fascinated by dinosaurs as a child. Visiting a dinosaur-themed park would be exciting and nostalgic for me.

× Yeah, I do like to going to park.

✓ Yeah, I do like going to the park.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund 'going' rather than the infinitive 'to going'. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'park' for a specific place. Suggestion: use 'like going to the park'.

× As a child I I had memories with my mother going to park and there I used to swing those I used to swing and play in merry go round.

✓ As a child I had memories of going to the park with my mother; I used to swing and play on the merry-go-round.

Problems: repeated 'I', wrong preposition 'with' for 'memories of', missing article before 'park', redundant phrase 'those I used to swing'. Use 'memories of' + gerund, 'go to the park', 'play on the merry-go-round'. Suggestion: simplify and remove repetitions.

× The grasses on my feet felt so nice to me.

✓ The grass under my feet felt so nice to me.

'Grass' is generally uncountable singular when referring to the surface, so use 'grass' not 'grasses'. Also 'on my feet' is odd; 'under my feet' or 'against my feet' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'the grass under my feet'.

× Yeah, I still like going to the parks where I can see my old self there in the form of kids playing in the ground and and I can see my growing self there when I see old people doing their yoga and physical activities.

✓ Yeah, I still like going to parks where I can see my younger self in the kids playing on the ground, and my older self in the elderly doing yoga and other physical activities.

Redundancy 'there' and 'and and'. Use 'parks' without 'the' for general places. 'My old self' is better as 'my younger self' when referring to kids. Use 'on the ground' not 'in the ground'. 'Old people' is better phrased as 'the elderly' or 'older people'. Suggestion: remove repetition and choose clearer descriptors.

× I would say instead of parts, I would rather prefer uh more schools around my city because it promotes development and uh kids.

✓ I would say instead of parks, I would prefer more schools in my city because they promote development and give children better opportunities.

'parts' is a typo for 'parks'. 'Would rather prefer' is redundant; use either 'would rather' or 'would prefer'. 'Around my city' is less natural than 'in my city'. 'It promotes' should agree in number with 'schools' so use 'they promote'. 'Kids' can be formalized to 'children'. Suggestion: correct typo, avoid redundancy, ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Uh could get a better future like I got.

✓ They could have a better future like the one I had.

The original mixes modal and tense incorrectly. Use 'could have' for potential, and 'like the one I had' to refer to your past experience. Suggestion: restructure to 'They could have a better future like the one I had.'

× It was my dream to go to Jurassic Park as we watched movies on television, so it fantasized me a lot to see dinosaurs and living creatures around me.

✓ It was my dream to go to Jurassic Park when we watched the movies on television, so I often fantasized about seeing dinosaurs and other living creatures around me.

Use 'when' not 'as' for habitual past context. 'The movies' is more natural for a known film series. 'It fantasized me' is incorrect; the subject 'I' fantasized, and the verb 'fantasize' requires 'about'. Also use 'often fantasized' for frequency. Suggestion: say 'I often fantasized about seeing...'.

× So I would love to go to Jurassic Park in future.

✓ So I would love to go to Jurassic Park in the future.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'future' in this fixed expression 'in the future'. Suggestion: use 'in the future' or 'one day'.