Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct tense and word choice, avoid repetitions, and keep to 2–3 short sentences. Use a linking phrase to contrast past and present.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played games there with my friends, such as hide-and-seek, which was great fun. However, these days I usually prefer going to the gym for exercise.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, use correct prepositions and concise reasons. Include one specific detail about why the gym suits you, and use a linking word to explain.

Ejemplo: Not really. At the moment I prefer the gym because I can follow a regular workout routine and use equipment that helps me build strength.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, correct grammar, and provide clear, specific benefits of more parks. Use linking words to list reasons and avoid unclear phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would be useful because they provide space for walking and relaxation, improve air quality by reducing pollution, and encourage people to be more active.

Sugerencia: Be specific and accurate. State the park name clearly, its location, and why you want to visit. Use correct sentence structure and keep it to one or two sentences.

Ejemplo: If I have the chance, I would like to visit Victoria Park in the center of Hong Kong because it is large, has beautiful gardens, and often hosts cultural events.

× I used to like going to parks when I was younger because I like to play the slice with my friends.

✓ I used to like going to parks when I was younger because I liked to play on the swings with my friends.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly and uses a wrong noun 'slice.' Use past tense 'liked' to match 'used to' which describes past habitual action. Replace the incorrect noun 'slice' with 'swings' and add the preposition 'on' for the correct collocation 'play on the swings.' Suggestion: keep verbs describing past habits in the past (used to/liked) and check noun collocations.

× However now I prefer like going the gym.

✓ However, now I prefer going to the gym.

The phrase contains an unnecessary word 'like' and misses the preposition 'to' after 'going.' Remove 'like' because 'prefer' + gerund or 'prefer to' are correct patterns; use 'going to the gym' or 'to go to the gym.' Also add a comma after 'However' for clarity.

× Not really, currently I prefer going to the gym to parks because I want to stay fit and become a healthy person.

✓ Not really. Currently, I prefer going to the gym rather than to parks because I want to stay fit and become a healthier person.

Use 'rather than' to compare preferences and include 'to' with 'parks' for parallel structure. 'Become a healthy person' is awkward; 'become a healthier person' is a clearer comparative goal. Add punctuation: separate into two clauses for clarity.

× I think the main reason is I like more parks in my city because they are good for help especially in courage park walking and reduce pollution.

✓ I think the main reason is that I would like more parks in my city because they help people, especially by encouraging park walking and reducing pollution.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect word choices: 'I like more parks' should be 'I would like more parks' to express desire. 'Good for help' is incorrect; use 'they help people.' 'Courage park walking' is incorrect phrase; intended meaning is 'encouraging park walking.' Use gerunds 'encouraging' and 'reducing' for parallelism. Add 'that' after 'reason is' for clarity.

× In the near future, if I have an opportunity, I definitely would want to go to Bengal is located in the center of city Hong Kong.

✓ In the near future, if I have the opportunity, I would definitely like to visit Bengal, which is located in the center of Hong Kong city.

The clause 'Bengal is located...' was fused into the main clause incorrectly. Use 'the opportunity' (definite) and 'would like to' for polite future desire. Insert a relative clause 'which is located...' to describe Bengal. Also reorder 'Hong Kong city' to 'Hong Kong' or 'the city of Hong Kong.' Ensure proper punctuation and article use.