Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the tense consistent, avoid redundancy, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give a concrete example and a linking phrase. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because the air felt fresher and I could play with other kids. For example, I often played tag and had picnics with my neighbors on weekends, which helped me make close friends.

Sugerencia: Fix grammar and word choice, use singular/plural correctly, and use linking words to organize ideas. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then briefly contrast past and present with a specific observation.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to parks even more now. Unlike when I was a child, I appreciate watching families and friends relax there, and I often go to read or exercise while observing people spending quality time together.

Sugerencia: Correct article use and plural forms, be specific about why more parks would help and give an example of benefit. Use a linking phrase to connect reason and consequence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for people to relax and reduce stress. For instance, having additional small parks near residential areas would make it easier for people to exercise or take short breaks during the day.

Sugerencia: Answer the question directly and fully — don’t just say ‘no’. Explain your preference and give a specific suggestion, using correct subject-verb agreement and a linking phrase for clarity.

Ejemplo: I don't have a particular park in mind; instead, I would prefer the city to build more local parks. If the municipality creates several neighborhood parks, residents will have convenient places to relax and children will have safe outdoor spaces to play.

× Yes, I like going to parks since I can breathe the fresh air and play with other kids.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because I could breathe the fresh air and play with other kids.

The question asks about childhood (past). The original uses present tense 'like' and 'can,' which mismatch the time frame. Change to past simple 'liked' and 'could' to match 'as a child.' Also use 'because' as a clearer conjunction than 'since' to express reason.

× As an adult I enjoy a parks more, seeing a lot of people enjoying their free time, bonding with it with each other and playing happily.

✓ As an adult, I enjoy parks more, seeing many people enjoying their free time, bonding with each other and playing happily.

Use no article before the plural noun 'parks' (remove 'a'). Replace 'a lot of people' with 'many people' for style. Remove the extra 'it' in 'bonding with it with each other.' Add a comma after the introductory phrase 'As an adult.'

× Actually, I would love to see a lot parks in my city so people can go there and relax in this stressful time.

✓ Actually, I would love to see a lot of parks in my city so people can go there and relax in this stressful time.

The phrase 'a lot parks' is missing the preposition 'of'—correct form is 'a lot of parks.' This fixes the noun phrase. The rest of the sentence is acceptable though 'in this stressful time' could be improved to 'during stressful times' for naturalness.

× No, it would be much better if my city builds their own parks.

✓ No, it would be much better if my city built its own parks.

The conditional structure 'would be ... if' requires the past subjunctive 'built' for the hypothetical. Also 'city' is a singular noun, so the possessive pronoun should be singular 'its' rather than plural 'their.'