Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap daha kısa, doğrudan ve dilbilgisi açısından doğru olmalı. Konu cümlesinde geçmiş zaman kullanın, gereksiz tekrarları ve konuşma dolgu kelimelerini çıkarın. Destekleyici cümlede spesifik bir neden veya anı verin ve bağlaçlarla akışı sağlayın (ör. "because", "so"). Örnek: geçmişte parklarda ne yaptığınızdan veya hangi duyguyu yaşadığınızdan bahsedin.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they helped me relax. For example, I used to spend hours reading under a big tree, which made me feel calm and carefree.

Sugerencia: Cevapta zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (şimdi için present tense). "as a kid" gibi uygunsuz ifadeleri çıkarın. Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi kurun, sonra bir veya iki spesifik neden verin. Tekrarlayan kelimeleri azaltın ve bağlaçlarla mantık bağlayın.

Ejemplo: Not really. I don't enjoy parks much now because I prefer quiet places and feel uncomfortable in large crowds. For instance, busy weekends at the park make me anxious, so I usually avoid them.

Sugerencia: Cümledeki tekrarları ve yanlış kelime seçimlerini düzeltin (ör. "chill wipes" yanlıştır). Daha spesifik olun: hangi tür parklar gerekli, nedenler ve sonuçlar verin. Bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because my neighborhood is crowded and dominated by shopping malls. Having more green spaces would give residents places to relax and exercise, improving overall wellbeing.

Sugerencia: Daha düzgün cümle yapısı kullanın ve tekrarları kaldırın. Park adını ve yerini net söyleyin, sonra neden gitmek istediğinizi kısa ve açık şekilde belirtin. "Less anxiety free" gibi karışık ifadeler yerine net duygu ifadesi kullanın.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Huda Vendigar in Busta city because it is surrounded by large green areas. I think spending time there would help me feel calmer and reduce stress.

× Yes, I really like going to the parks as a child because it makes me feel relaxed and I feel comfortable when I'm around of people, so that makes me feel really less concerned about my anxiety and stuff.

✓ Yes, I really liked going to parks as a child because it made me feel relaxed and I felt comfortable when I was around people, so I felt less concerned about my anxiety and similar issues.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past time reference 'as a child'. Use past tense consistently: 'liked', 'made', 'felt', 'was'. Remove the incorrect preposition 'around of people' and use 'around people'. 'Really less concerned' is awkward; use 'felt less concerned'. Suggestions: keep verb tenses consistent with the time frame, remove redundant words, and use natural collocations (e.g., 'around people', 'less concerned about my anxiety').

× Not really. I really don't like going to parks as a kid now because as time passes I think my opinion about people and surrounding around people has changed. I really don't like being in a group of large people, so that's not my cup of tea now.

✓ Not really. I don't like going to parks anymore because, as time has passed, my opinion about people and being around them has changed. I don't like being in large groups, so that's not my cup of tea.

The original mixes present and past references awkwardly ('as a kid now', 'as time passes'). Use 'anymore' for change from past to present. Use present perfect 'has passed' or present simple 'has changed' to indicate change over time. 'Surrounding around people' is redundant; use 'being around them'. 'A group of large people' is incorrect—use 'large groups'. Remove repetitive 'really' and 'now' for clarity. Suggestions: choose words that match the intended meaning and avoid redundancy.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because in my neighborhood we have lots of people and lots of malls, but we don't have enough green space and as as people we need green space for relaxing and chill wipes.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because in my neighborhood we have many people and many malls, but we don't have enough green space and, as people, we need green spaces for relaxing and chilling.

Use 'many' with countable nouns ('people', 'malls') instead of 'lots of' for more formal speech; 'lots of' is acceptable but repetitive here. 'Green space' can be singular or plural; 'green spaces' fits context. 'As as people' is a typo; use 'as people'. 'Chill wipes' is incorrect—likely intended 'chilling' or 'relaxing'. Suggestions: correct typos, choose appropriate prepositions and noun forms, and use accurate vocabulary ('chilling').

× Yes I do want to go some parks in the future. For example there is a park called Huda Vendigar in Busta city that surround that places surrounded by so much a green green areas and that makes people less anxiety free. Yes.

✓ Yes, I do want to go to some parks in the future. For example, there is a park called Huda Vendigar in Busta City that is surrounded by large green areas, and that helps reduce people's anxiety.

Missing preposition: use 'go to some parks'. 'That surround that places surrounded by so much a green green areas' is ungrammatical—use passive 'is surrounded by' and correct word order 'large green areas'. 'Less anxiety free' is incorrect and contradictory; use 'helps reduce people's anxiety' or 'makes people less anxious'. Capitalize proper noun 'City' if part of the name. Suggestions: add necessary prepositions, simplify structure, and use correct adjective/noun order and collocations.