Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, correct verb forms and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “play on the playground” rather than “in the ground”). Add one specific detail (an activity or memory) and use a linking phrase to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often played on the playground with my sister, especially on the swings and slides, which helped us become close because we spent hours talking and laughing together.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, correct tense and phrasing, reduce disfluencies. Use linking words to show contrast (e.g., “although” or “but”) and provide a specific routine or purpose (e.g., jogging, reading) to enrich the response.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks, although I am often busy with work. I usually visit a park on weekends to jog or sit and read because it helps me relax and get some fresh air.

Sugerencia: State your opinion clearly, reduce hesitations, and organize supporting reasons with linking words (firstly, secondly, for example). Use more natural collocations (e.g., “improve air quality” and “enhance people's quality of life”). Add a brief concrete example of community benefits.

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. More parks would encourage neighbours to meet and socialise. For example, a local park with benches and walking paths would host community events and exercise groups, which would improve air quality and enhance people’s quality of life.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct grammar and conditional structure. Replace vague phrases with a clear plan and add a short reason. Limit to two or three sentences and use linking words (e.g., “however” or “so”).

Ejemplo: I haven't decided on a specific park yet, but if I get the chance I would like to visit a national park to go hiking with my family because we enjoy being outdoors and exploring nature.

× I loved to spend time with my sibling.

✓ I loved to spend time with my siblings.

The speaker likely means more than one sibling or uses 'sibling' generically; if referring to one brother or sister, use 'my sibling' is acceptable but context 'we usually play with each other' implies multiple children, so plural 'siblings' matches subject and context. Use plural when talking about more than one person.

× We usually play with each other in the ground, which, uh, allow us to build a strong relationship.

✓ We usually played with each other on the ground, which allowed us to build a strong relationship.

The surrounding context is past habitual ('when I was younger, I used to go'), so verbs should be past tense. Use 'played' and 'allowed'. Also the correct preposition for playing on an area is 'on the ground', and verb agreement: 'which allowed' agrees with singular 'which' referring to the situation.

× Yes, sometime, it usually depends on the time.

✓ Yes, sometimes; it usually depends on my schedule.

Use the adverb 'sometimes' (plural form) not 'sometime' which means 'at an unspecified time'. 'Depends on the time' is vague; 'depends on my schedule' is clearer. Punctuation and word choice improve fluency.

× Nowadays I get little bit busy with my work umm so I get uh do not have the enough time to visit.

✓ Nowadays I get a little bit busy with my work, so I do not have enough time to visit.

Missing article 'a' before 'little bit', incorrect word order 'I get uh do not have' should be 'so I do not have', and 'the enough time' should be 'enough time' without 'the'. Fixing articles and word order yields a grammatical sentence.

× But uh, I used to visit the park on the weekends or whenever I have free time in order to have a fresh.

✓ But I used to visit the park on weekends or whenever I had free time in order to get some fresh air.

Maintain past tense 'used to' with 'had' for time clause. 'On the weekends' can be 'on weekends'. 'Have a fresh' is incomplete; correct phrase is 'get some fresh air'. Also using concise phrasing improves clarity.

× I would like to uh, uh, see more parks in my city because it allows the community members to build a, a strong relationship with each other and it also, uh, helps to improve the quality of air and quality of life of the people and the society.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because they allow community members to build strong relationships with each other, and they also help improve air quality and people's quality of life.

Plural 'parks' requires plural verbs/pronouns 'they allow' and 'they help'. Use plural 'relationships'. 'Quality of air' is better phrased 'air quality'. Avoid repetitive filler words. Use 'people's quality of life' for natural phrasing.

× No I have not thought about it yet but if I ever get a chance in future then I will definitely go for National Park where I choose hiking to spend time with my family.

✓ No, I have not thought about it yet, but if I ever get a chance in the future I will definitely go to a national park to go hiking and spend time with my family.

Add comma after 'No'. Use 'in the future' with article 'the'. 'Go for National Park' is unidiomatic; use 'go to a national park'. 'Where I choose hiking' is incorrect—use 'to go hiking'. Keep future tense 'will definitely go' and correct infinitive forms. Also 'national park' is not a proper noun here, so lowercase is appropriate unless naming a specific park.