Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence about whether you liked parks, then add one or two specific supporting details (activities, people, times). Avoid rhetorical questions and repetition. Use correct tense and simple cohesive linking words such as "also" or "because."

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I often played on the swings and met my friends there after school, so I would wait for the bell to ring each day. Also, my family took me to the park on weekends, which made those days special.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct answer, then contrast past and present using linking words like "when I was younger" and "now". Be specific about what you enjoy now (e.g., walking, birdwatching) and avoid vague or unclear phrases like "not the ugliness."

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. When I was younger I went mostly to play on the swings and chat with friends, but now I visit parks to relax, walk along the paths and watch birds because I appreciate the natural atmosphere.

Sugerencia: Give a concise opinion followed by two clear reasons. Use linking words ("because," "so," "for example") and avoid repetition. Be specific about benefits (mental health, cleaner air, community spaces) and provide a short example or consequence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they reduce stress and improve air quality. For example, parents can take their children to play safely, and neighbourhood parks create community spaces where people can exercise and relax.

Sugerencia: Answer clearly which kinds of parks you want to visit and why, using specific details (e.g., botanical gardens, national parks). Keep it to one topic sentence plus one or two supporting sentences, and correct unclear phrases like "to get my child" or "to get my memories."

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit national parks and botanical gardens in the future because I enjoy seeing different plants and birds. I also plan to visit local parks with friends and colleagues to relax, have picnics and watch children play.

× Yes, I would love to go to visit a park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I loved visiting parks when I was a child.

The original mixes conditional/modal 'would' with past time 'when I was a child' and uses an awkward 'go to visit'. Use simple past 'loved' for habitual past and the gerund 'visiting' after verbs describing preferences. Suggestion: use 'loved visiting parks' for natural past habitual expression.

× Why would another kid not like to go to park as well as another kid?

✓ Why would any child not like going to a park like other children?

Awkward repetition and incorrect article use ('to park'). 'Another kid' repeated is unclear. Use 'any child' and gerund 'going' for general preference, and include the article 'a' before 'park' or use plural 'parks'. Suggest: 'Why would any child not like going to a park like other children?'

× I would like to go to park when I was in school.

✓ I liked going to the park when I was in school.

Tense inconsistency: 'would like' (present conditional) doesn't match 'when I was in school' (past). Use past 'liked' for habitual past. Also include definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to a specific park visited regularly.

× I'll be waiting for my end bell to ring so I will visit the park.

✓ I used to wait for the end bell to ring so I could visit the park.

Original mixes future 'I'll be waiting' with past context 'when I was in school'. The sentence should be in past habitual tense. Use 'used to' or simple past and modal 'could' for ability/possibility. Also keep 'the park' with article.

× But in my house they take me on the weekends so I will wait for the weekends.

✓ At my house, my family took me on weekends, so I looked forward to the weekend.

Pronoun 'they' is vague; specify 'my family'. Tense should be past 'took' for childhood. 'Wait for the weekends' is unnatural; use 'looked forward to the weekend'. Also omit article in 'on weekends' or use 'on the weekends' depending on variety; here 'on weekends' is natural.

× When will it come?

✓ When would the weekend come?

In context the student asks about when the weekend would arrive in the past habitual frame; original 'When will it come?' is a present/future question and mismatches. Use 'When would the weekend come?' or more naturally 'When would the weekend come?' to reflect past expectation.

× Yes, even now also I love to visit the park, but not the ugliness when I was a child, when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, even now I still love visiting parks, but I no longer like the ugliness the parks had when I was a child.

Redundant adverbs 'even now also' should be 'even now' or 'still'. Use gerund 'visiting' after 'love'. Clarify comparison by stating 'no longer like the ugliness the parks had' and maintain tense consistency.

× So when I was a kid, I used to visit park to play in swings and meet my friends and gossip together.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to visit the park to play on the swings, meet my friends, and gossip together.

Include article 'the' before 'park' for a specific place. Use 'on the swings' (preposition) and parallel gerunds 'play, meet, and gossip'. The list needs commas and 'and' for clarity.

× But now I would like to visit park to enjoy the nature.

✓ But now I like to visit parks to enjoy nature.

Use present simple 'I like' for current habitual preference. Use plural 'parks' or 'the park' and omit 'the' before 'nature'—'enjoy nature' is correct. 'Would like to' implies a conditional or future desire; simpler present is natural.

× Yes definitely park should be everywhere in the cities so it brings calm to the nature while when adults go to work and when they come stressed out to home when they visit park with their family, kids to improve the ecosystem.

✓ Yes, parks should be everywhere in cities because they bring calm to nature; when adults return from work stressed, visiting parks with their families and children helps improve the urban environment.

Many article errors: use plural 'parks' and 'cities' without 'the'. 'Calm to the nature' is incorrect—use 'calm to nature' or 'calmness to the city'. 'Come stressed out to home' is ungrammatical: use 'return from work stressed'. Improve sentence structure: break into two clauses and use 'visiting parks with their families and children'.

× Also the parks are important to build in the cities.

✓ Parks are important to build in cities.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before 'parks' and 'the cities'. Shorten to 'Parks are important to build in cities' or better 'It is important to build parks in cities.' The latter is more natural.

× Also yes I think parks should be built all across the city.

✓ Yes, I think parks should be built across the city.

Redundant 'Also yes' can be simplified to 'Yes'. 'All across the city' is acceptable but can be shortened to 'across the city' for conciseness.

× Yes, I would love to visit any parks in the future to move, to get my child, to get my kid, to get my memories from child.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit parks in the future to relive my childhood memories and to take my child there.

Original contains unclear verbs 'to move, to get my child' and repetition. Use clear verb 'relive my childhood memories' and 'take my child there'. Maintain infinitive form for purpose and ensure meaning is coherent.

× Now I would like to visit park with my friends, with my colleagues, so I can have a quality time and peaceful time.

✓ Now I like to visit the park with my friends or colleagues to have quality, peaceful time.

Use 'the park' or 'parks' consistently. 'Would like' implies future or conditional; present preference 'I like' fits. 'A quality time' is unnatural—use 'quality, peaceful time' or 'a peaceful, quality time' but better 'quality, peaceful time' without 'a'.

× Enjoying the nature with the birds, crisping, children's playing.

✓ I enjoy nature with the birds, the fresh air, and children playing.

Fragment lacking subject and verb; convert to full sentence 'I enjoy'. 'Crisping' is incorrect choice—likely meant 'the crisp air' or 'chirping' (birds). Clarify list with parallel nouns: 'birds, fresh air, and children playing.'

× I would love to watch.

✓ I would love to watch them play.

Incomplete sentence: 'watch' needs an object. In context, 'watch them play' (children or birds) completes the idea.