Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và tính mạch lạc: trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh từ thừa và sửa động từ thì. Nên dùng các cụm từ mô tả cụ thể (ví dụ: chơi trò chơi, chạy nhảy, dã ngoại) và nối các ý bằng từ liên kết đơn giản như “because”, “and”, “also”. Giữ độ dài trong tối đa 4-5 câu.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were fun and spacious. I usually played games with my friends and sometimes had picnics with my family. Those moments are unforgettable because we always ran around and laughed. They gave me many happy memories.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện thì và cấu trúc câu: trả lời thẳng vào câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề về tình trạng hiện tại, dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành hoặc hiện tại đơn phù hợp. Nêu lý do ngắn gọn và tần suất cụ thể (e.g., once or twice a month). Dùng liên từ như “because” và “so” để nối ý rõ ràng.

Ejemplo: Not really — I don't visit parks often now because I am busy with work and homework. I usually go for exercise there once or twice a month. When I do go, I enjoy walking and getting fresh air. It helps me relax after a stressful week.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện từ vựng chính xác và mạch lạc: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu ý kiến rõ ràng (Yes/No + lý do). Tránh dùng từ sai (ví dụ “entertaining facility” có thể là “recreational facilities”), và đưa ví dụ cụ thể (children, elderly). Sử dụng liên từ (for example, such as, because) để liên kết lí lẽ.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because many people, especially children and the elderly, lack recreational spaces. Parks provide places to exercise, relax, and socialize. For example, a new park could include playgrounds and walking paths for families. This would improve residents' health and well-being.

Sugerencia: Cải thiện lựa chọn từ và diễn đạt cảm xúc: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes, I want to visit...), dùng từ đúng (e.g., “beautiful” or the park’s name, not “horrible”), mô tả chi tiết cụ thể (large green spaces, many trees, peaceful atmosphere) và giải thích lý do ngắn gọn. Giữ câu ngắn gọn và mạch lạc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the Central Park in my city because it is famous and very spacious. It has many trees and quiet areas where I can relax and clear my mind. I think spending an afternoon there would help me feel refreshed and reduce stress.

× I would say I ran into playing a pop because it's so fantastic.

✓ I would say I used to enjoy going to the park because it was so wonderful.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and word order. 'Ran into playing a pop' is nonstandard and unclear. Use 'used to enjoy' to indicate a past habitual action and 'going to the park' as the activity. 'So fantastic' is changed to 'so wonderful' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: learn common collocations (enjoy + gerund, go to the park) and use 'used to' for past habits.

× Also it's have me and why And I also can play with my friend is with uh, entertainment activity is my unforgettable memory with me.

✓ Also I went there with my family and I could play with my friend; those entertaining activities are unforgettable memories for me.

Multiple pronoun and structure errors: 'it's have me and why' is incorrect; use 'I went there with my family'. 'I also can play' should be 'I could play' for past ability. 'is with uh, entertainment activity is my unforgettable memory with me' should be rephrased to 'those entertaining activities are unforgettable memories for me.' Suggestion: keep subject pronouns clear, match verb tense, and use plural for 'memories' when referring to multiple events.

× Honestly and now I been tired with jobs such as delight and homework at school.

✓ Honestly, lately I have been tired because of work and school homework.

'I been tired' lacks auxiliary 'have' for present perfect continuous. 'Such as delight' is incorrect word choice; use 'work' or 'job'. Suggestion: use 'have been' for recent states and 'because of' to indicate cause.

× So at now I'm not spend more time in a park but I I also remain do exercise one or two time in a month and go to park to do some exercise.

✓ So right now I don't spend much time in parks, but I still exercise once or twice a month and go to the park to do some exercise.

Errors: 'at now' should be 'right now'; negation form 'I'm not spend' should be 'I don't spend'; 'a park' vs 'parks' and article use corrected: 'in parks' or 'in the park' depending on meaning. 'I also remain do exercise' is unnatural; use 'I still exercise'. 'one or two time' should be 'once or twice a month.' Suggestion: use correct negation and frequency expressions, and consistent article use.

× Honestly, I would say I think we should have a more park in city because at now children or some people don't have that entertaining facility for them like or really straight at at that.

✓ Honestly, I think we should have more parks in the city because right now children and some people do not have enough recreational facilities.

Errors: 'a more park' should be plural 'more parks'; 'in city' needs the article 'the city'; 'at now' should be 'right now'; 'entertaining facility' better as 'recreational facilities'; remove redundant words. Suggestion: use plural when increasing count and include 'the' with specific locations.

× So I think part it is which is the place for day and white and really straight after exhausting.

✓ So I think parks are places to relax during the day and to recover after feeling exhausted.

Original is ungrammatical and unclear: 'part it is which is the place for day and white' and 'really straight after exhausting' are wrong. Rephrase to express purpose: 'places to relax' and 'recover after feeling exhausted.' Suggestion: focus on clear subject-verb structure and common verbs like 'relax' and 'recover.'

× I would say I think I want to come the horrible park at city center because it's there is very famous in my city and also with the, uh, large space in there and with the lots of tree make my spirit be unwise and clear my head.

✓ I would say I want to visit the park in the city center because it is very famous, it has a large open space and many trees that lift my spirits and clear my head.

Errors: 'come the horrible park' should be 'visit the park'; 'horrible' is wrong word choice, likely meant 'popular' or no adjective; 'at city center' needs 'in the city center'; 'it's there is' redundant; 'with the lots of tree' should be 'many trees'; 'make my spirit be unwise' incorrect—use 'lift my spirits.' Suggestion: choose correct verbs (visit), articles ('the city center'), and idiomatic phrases ('lift my spirits', 'clear my head').