Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문장 구조와 시제 사용을 더 정확히 하고 불필요한 끄덕거림(음성적 채움어)을 줄이세요. 주어진 질문에는 주제 문장(예: 'No, I didn't.')과 이유를 명확히 제시하면 됩니다. 또한 단수·복수와 관사 사용에 주의하세요(예: 'a park' 또는 'parks'). 예시나 구체적 경험(몇 살 때, 어디에서 겪었는지)을 한두 문장으로 추가하면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

Ejemplo: No, I didn't enjoy going to parks as a child. The main reason was that I was afraid of insects because parks have many trees and plants, and I often saw bugs like ladybugs and butterflies. For example, when I was six, a bee flew near my face and that scared me.

Sugerencia: 전환 표현과 시제 일치를 명확히 사용하세요. 'as I answered before' 대신 더 자연스러운 연결어(However, Nowadays)를 쓰고, 관사와 복수 표기에 주의하세요. 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고 빈도 표현을 정확히 사용하면 점수가 올라갑니다(예: 'almost every day'). 불필요한 망설임을 줄이세요.

Ejemplo: Actually, I do like going to parks now. Nowadays I find parks very relaxing because the fresh air and greenery help me unwind, so I visit a nearby park almost every day with a friend.

Sugerencia: 중복 표현을 피하고 비교·수식 표현을 정확히 사용하세요. 'the most biggest'는 잘못된 표현이고, 주어와 동사의 수일치를 확인하세요('it doesn't have parks'). 또한 'rose' 대신 'rows of buildings' 또는 'many buildings'처럼 문맥에 맞는 어휘를 사용하세요. 이유(예: 주민들이 쉴 공간이 부족하다)를 구체적으로 제시하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. I live in southern Seoul, which is one of the largest areas in my country and has many tall buildings but few green spaces. Therefore, I think more parks are necessary so residents can have places to relax and exercise.

Sugerencia: 비격식 표현('wanna') 대신 표준 표현('want to')을 사용하고, 불확실할 때도 간결하게 말하세요. 영화에서 봤다는 이유를 조금 더 구체적으로 설명하면 좋습니다(예: 산책로, 호수, 공연 등). 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 불필요한 반복과 망설임을 줄이세요.

Ejemplo: I'd like to visit Central Park in New York in the future. I've seen it in many films and it looks beautiful, with large walking paths, a lake and plenty of open space where people relax and enjoy outdoor activities.

× I didn't like going to park as a child.

✓ I didn't like going to the park as a child.

You must use the definite article 'the' before singular noun 'park' when referring to parks in general in this context. Use 'the park' or 'parks' depending on singular/plural. Suggestion: say 'the park' for a general childhood activity or 'going to parks' for plural.

× Uh, it's because bugs, you know, in parks, uh, there are many trees or umm, many plants and it has many bugs in it, uh, such as ladybug or butterfly.

✓ Uh, it's because there are bugs, you know, in parks; there are many trees and many plants, and they have many bugs in them, such as ladybugs or butterflies.

Problems include word order and agreement: use 'there are' to introduce existence, plural nouns 'ladybugs'/'butterflies', and refer back with 'they' or 'them' for parks/plants. Also avoid 'it has' when referring to plural 'parks'. Suggestion: reorder to 'there are many trees and plants, and they have many bugs, such as ladybugs and butterflies.'

× I even, uh, didn't, don't like them.

✓ I even didn't like them then, and I don't like them now.

Mixing past and present negatives without clear time reference causes confusion. Use a consistent tense and clarify time: 'didn't like them' for past, 'don't like them' for present. Suggestion: separate ideas or use 'then' and 'now' to show contrast.

× Well, uh, as I answered before, I didn't like going to park.

✓ Well, uh, as I answered before, I didn't like going to the park.

Same article issue as earlier: use 'the park' for general reference to going to a park as a child. Alternatively, use 'going to parks' for plural generalization. Suggestion: choose 'the park' or 'parks' based on intended meaning.

× However I like going to park now because uh, uh, it makes me relaxed, uh, so I go to the parks almost everyday with my friend.

✓ However, I like going to the park now because it makes me relaxed, so I go to the parks almost every day with my friend.

Article error with 'the park' and adverb spelling 'every day' (two words). 'Makes me relaxed' is acceptable but more natural is 'relaxes me'. Suggestion: use 'relaxes me' and 'every day' and be consistent with singular/plural: 'the park' for general activity; 'parks' if plural.

× Of course, of course, I like to see more parks in my city and I live in South Seoul, which is the most biggest city in my country and it has rose or many buildings, but it don't doesn't have parks.

✓ Of course, of course, I would like to see more parks in my city. I live in South Seoul, which is the biggest city in my country, and it has roses and many buildings, but it doesn't have parks.

Multiple issues: 'most biggest' is redundant — use 'biggest'. 'Rose' should be plural 'roses' or 'rose gardens'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it doesn't have' is correct for singular 'it'. Use 'would like' for polite desire. Suggestion: simplify phrases and ensure singular/plural forms and correct auxiliary 'doesn't'.

× I wanna go to the, uh, park in the New York, which is, I'm not uh, sure which the, which is the name of it, but I remember is Central Park.

✓ I want to go to the park in New York; I'm not sure of its name, but I remember it is Central Park.

Avoid informal 'wanna' in formal speech. Article error: 'the New York' is incorrect — use 'New York' without 'the'. The clause 'I'm not sure which the, which is the name of it' is ungrammatical; use 'I'm not sure of its name.' Also include 'it is Central Park' for clarity. Suggestion: practice concise clauses: 'I'm not sure of its name, but I think it's Central Park.'

× I saw it in many movies so.

✓ I saw it in many movies.

The sentence ends with an unnecessary 'so' which is informal and incomplete. Simply say 'I saw it in many movies.' Suggestion: remove trailing 'so' or complete the thought, e.g., 'so I want to visit it.'