Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clear and concise: start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, plurals) and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

Ejemplo: Not really. I rarely went to parks as a child because my parents were usually busy, so I played at nearby playgrounds with friends instead. As a result, I don't have many memories of visiting parks.

Sugerencia: Open with a clear opinion, then give concise reasons and a specific contrast. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., 'there are many mountains', 'low mountains', 'flat streets'). Use linking phrases like 'however' and 'because' to make the contrast explicit.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now. When I lived in Korea I grew up near mountains, so walking was often steep and difficult; however, in Russia the parks and streets are mostly flat, which makes it much easier and more pleasant to go out for walks.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and politely, then give one clear reason with correct grammar. Avoid repeating words and finish the thought. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly.

Ejemplo: No, I wouldn't. I prefer city architecture to green spaces because I enjoy looking at beautiful buildings and urban design, so I wouldn't support building more parks in my city.

Sugerencia: This answer is generally good: clear opinion, specific details and activities. Improve by correcting small language issues, keeping sentence length natural (max 4-5 sentences), and using precise vocabulary ('oasis' lowercase, 'surrounded by' rather than 'makes'). Add one linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York to relax and escape the busy city. It is a peaceful oasis surrounded by impressive architecture and urban life. I would enjoy a long walk or a picnic there, and I might stroll toward the Empire State Building afterward to take some photos.

× Honestly, I just when I was a child, I barely went to park because my parents were busy and so I just played playground or I just finished it to my friends. So yeah, I have not much memories of it.

✓ Honestly, when I was a child, I rarely went to parks because my parents were busy, so I just played on the playground or I just played with my friends. So yeah, I do not have many memories of it.

Multiple sentence structure issues: misplaced word 'just', wrong verb forms, missing prepositions and incorrect quantifier. 'just when I was a child' should be 'when I was a child'. 'barely went to park' needs plural and article: 'rarely went to parks'. 'played playground' requires preposition 'played on the playground'. 'finished it to my friends' is unclear; likely meant 'played with my friends'. 'I have not much memories' uses wrong quantifier and tense; correct is 'I do not have many memories'. Suggestions: reorder clauses for clarity, use correct prepositions, use plural for countable nouns, and choose proper quantifiers for memories.

× Now I'm a park person because when I was in Korea I grew up there.

✓ Now I'm a park person because I grew up in Korea.

The clause 'when I was in Korea I grew up there' is wordy and slightly contradictory: 'when I was in Korea' plus 'grew up there' is redundant. Simplify to 'I grew up in Korea'. Use present tense 'I'm' correctly with past 'grew up' for background information. Suggestion: remove unnecessary 'when' and 'there' for conciseness.

× But in Korea there's so many mountains, even if it's just a low mountains, it is hard to climb it.

✓ But in Korea there are so many mountains; even if one is a low mountain, it is hard to climb.

Incorrect subject-verb agreement and article use: 'there's' is singular contraction but refers to plural 'many mountains' so use 'there are'. 'a low mountains' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'a low mountain' or 'one is a low mountain'. Avoid redundant 'it' at the end. Suggestion: match singular/plural forms and use appropriate articles.

× But now I'm in Russia, so every road or park is flat, so I like to go out there.

✓ But now I'm in Russia, so every road and park are flat, so I like to go out there.

When using 'every' with two nouns joined by 'and', the verb should be plural or rephrase. 'Every road and park' refers to multiple items, so use 'are flat'. Alternatively keep 'every' with single noun ('every road or park is flat') but that sounds awkward. Suggestion: use 'and' with plural verb or rephrase as 'the roads and parks are flat'.

× No I don't because I like seeing beautiful and nice buildings than walking in the park, so I don't support to build park in my city so that I can enjoy the.

✓ No, I don't, because I prefer seeing beautiful buildings to walking in parks, so I do not support building parks in my city.

Incorrect comparison structure and verb forms: use 'prefer X to Y' rather than 'like X than Y'. 'Beautiful and nice' is redundant; use one adjective. 'I don't support to build park' is incorrect; after 'support' use gerund 'building' and plural 'parks'. The sentence ends with incomplete phrase 'so that I can enjoy the.' Remove or complete it; here it's unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B', use gerund after 'support', and ensure noun number agreement.

× I would love to visit Central Park in New York to relax and escape the busy city.

✓ I would love to visit Central Park in New York to relax and escape the busy city.

Sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses conditional 'would love to' to express a future desire. No change needed.

× It's an open Oasis where modern architecture makes expensive green space.

✓ It's an open oasis where modern architecture creates precious green space.

Awkward collocation 'makes expensive green space' is incorrect: 'expensive' is inappropriate to describe green space here. Use 'creates' rather than 'makes' for formal style and 'precious' or 'valuable' instead of 'expensive'. Also 'Oasis' should be lowercase 'oasis' unless capitalized for a reason. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjective and verb collocation.

× I'd enjoy a long walk or a picnic there and then stroll through the park on my way to the Empire State Building to take some photos.

✓ I'd enjoy a long walk or a picnic there, and then stroll through the park on my way to the Empire State Building to take some photos.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs a comma before 'and then' for clarity in a compound sentence. Suggestion: add comma to separate coordinated clauses.