Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and structured: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove filler words (umm, uh) and avoid repeating the same idea. Aim for 2–4 sentences in natural spoken style.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often met my friends there and we played games like tag and used the swings, which made me feel free and relaxed. Those visits created many happy memories for me.

Sugerencia: Clarify and use natural expressions: give a direct topic sentence then one specific reason with a linking word. Replace awkward phrases (e.g., "make my brain empty") with clearer English and reduce repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit them after work because they help me relax and clear my mind, and I sometimes sit and think or take a short walk to unwind.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid vague phrases: state your opinion briefly, then give one or two concrete benefits with linking words. Remove fillers like "you know" and avoid repeating similar ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would provide residents with places to exercise, meet friends and enjoy green space. For example, a new park could include walking paths and benches for people to relax and socialize.

Sugerencia: Improve coherence and accuracy: begin with a clear statement answering the question, then give specific details (location, features) with linking words. Fix unfinished sentences and unclear numbers; be precise and concise. Avoid vague phrases like "for what?"

Ejemplo: Yes. There is a beautiful park not far from my home that I would like to visit. It is famous for its large number of trees — around 72,000 — and has extensive walking trails and flower gardens, which makes it very attractive for a day out.

× This was one of my favorite activity to do during those times, especially because I could meet my friends often and we would play different sorts of games there.

✓ This was one of my favorite activities to do during those times, especially because I could meet my friends often and we would play different sorts of games there.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires a plural noun after it (activities) because 'one of' refers to one item from a group. Use the plural form 'activities' to agree with 'one of my favorite'. Suggestion: use 'activities' when following 'one of my favorite' or rephrase to 'a favorite activity'.

× Umm, one of my favorite being the swinging ones because they used to make me feel very free and relaxed.

✓ Umm, one of my favorites was the swings because they used to make me feel very free and relaxed.

The original uses a noun phrase with an incorrect present participle structure ('one of my favorite being'). For past habitual preference, use past tense 'was' and a suitable noun form: 'one of my favorites was the swings' or 'one of my favorite activities was swinging'. Suggestion: match tense and use 'was' or 'was the' plus noun or gerund.

× I had a lot of memories in those parks.

✓ I had a lot of memories from those parks.

Use 'memories from' or 'memories of' to indicate origin or association. 'In' sounds awkward here. Suggestion: use 'memories from those parks' or 'many memories of those parks'.

× Yes, yes, it's still like going to parks.

✓ Yes, yes, I still like going to parks.

The phrase 'it's still like going to parks' is ungrammatical and likely intended to be 'I still like'. Use the simple present 'I like' to express a current habitual preference. Suggestion: use 'I still like going to parks.'

× Even though I have grown up as an adult, I believe that parks are not just for kids, but for people who work a lot daily and need a refreshment, need a break from their daily lives.

✓ Even though I have grown up, I believe that parks are not just for kids, but for people who work a lot and need a refreshment or a break from their daily lives.

'Grown up as an adult' is redundant; 'grown up' suffices. 'Work a lot daily' is awkward—use 'work a lot' or 'work daily'. Repetition 'need a refreshment, need a break' can be linked with 'or' and articles added. Suggestion: simplify redundancy and smooth wording.

× And I still go to parks to make my brain empty for a while and think about everything and just to relax.

✓ And I still go to parks to clear my mind for a while, think about things, and just relax.

'Make my brain empty' is non-idiomatic; use the gerund 'to clear my mind'. Parallel structure requires matching forms: 'to clear..., think..., and relax.' Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions and parallel verb forms.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I believe that these parks are for recreational purposes and give people a chance to relax and sometimes hang out with their friends.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because I believe that parks are for recreational purposes and give people a chance to relax and sometimes hang out with friends.

Using 'these parks' is slightly awkward when speaking generally; 'parks' without a determiner works. 'Their friends' unnecessary—'hang out with friends' is more natural. Suggestion: use general plural nouns without demonstratives when speaking broadly.

× It's because we can not only just sit there and relax, but you know, enjoy a bit of scenery, a bit of nature around and there's just fun.

✓ It's because we can not only sit there and relax, but also enjoy a bit of scenery and nature, and have fun.

'Can not only just' is redundant; use 'not only... but also'. 'A bit of nature around' is awkward—simplify to 'nature'. End clause 'there's just fun' is informal; 'have fun' is grammatical. Suggestion: use the correlative 'not only... but also' and concise phrasing.

× Yes, there is a park I know which is quite but not that far from my home and it's one of the most beautiful parks in my city according to everybody and even to me because I have searched about it.

✓ Yes, there is a park I know which is quiet but not very far from my home, and it's one of the most beautiful parks in my city according to everyone and me because I have read about it.

Several issues: 'quite' needs an adjective 'quiet' not 'quite' alone; 'not that far' can be 'not very far'. 'Everybody and even to me' is awkward—use 'everyone and me'. 'Searched about it' is incorrect; use 'read about it' or 'researched it'. Suggestion: choose correct adjectives and verbs, and natural phrasing after 'according to'.

× And this one of this park is special because it has at least 72,000 trees planted there and for what? One of the.

✓ This park is special because it has at least 72,000 trees planted there.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases ('this one of this park', 'and for what? One of the.'). Remove fragments and produce a clear declarative sentence. Suggestion: avoid leaving rhetorical fragments; complete the thought clearly.