Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make your response a clear short statement, fix grammar (past tense), avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. Because my hometown was small and had only one park, I had to travel into the city to visit it, and I always enjoyed playing on the swings and feeding the ducks there.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct statement, reduce fillers, use linking words to connect ideas, and give a specific routine or benefit. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks and I try to walk there every day. Because being outdoors is good for both my body and mind, I usually take my child with me so we can exercise and relax together.

Sugerencia: Give a concise opinion first, avoid hesitations, and explain clearly why more parks would help (or why current parks are enough). Provide one clear specific example and use linking words.

Ejemplo: I think more parks would be beneficial, although my area in Ramdan already has several. For example, if there were more green spaces in new neighborhoods, families who live farther from the center could enjoy walking and outdoor activities without traveling far.

Sugerencia: Give a clear plan and specific reasons why you want to visit that park. Remove hesitations and correct unclear phrases (e.g. 'prays' → 'praised' or 'told me'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include one concrete activity you expect to do.

Ejemplo: Yes, I plan to visit a park on the Alberta side that my cousin recommended. He praised the variety of activities there, such as cycling trails and a playground, so I want to go and try the trails and join a family picnic.

× Yes I did. When I was child.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'. This is an article error that affects noun phrase correctness and is tied to correct past-tense narrative. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase complete: 'When I was a child'. Also add a comma after 'Yes'.

× I love to go to park because there was 1 park in my city because my city was not much developed at that time and I had to go to city to visit park and I always.

✓ I loved going to the park because there was only one park in my city; my city was not very developed at that time, so I always had to go to the city to visit the park.

Multiple issues: tense consistency and verb form. The student is speaking about childhood (past), so use past tense 'loved' and the gerund 'going' after 'loved'. Use articles 'the' before 'park' and 'the park' and 'the city', and 'only' instead of '1'. Replace 'not much developed' with 'not very developed' for correct adverb use. Combine clauses for clarity.

× I prefer to go walk every day because uh umm whenever I go to park, I can have exposure of outside which is really good for body and mind.

✓ I prefer to go for a walk every day because whenever I go to the park, I can get some exposure to the outdoors, which is really good for the body and mind.

Use 'prefer to go for a walk' or 'prefer walking' for natural expression. Add article 'the' before 'park'. Use 'get exposure to the outdoors' instead of 'have exposure of outside'. Add definite article 'the' before 'body and mind'.

× Umm, I go back with my child every day.

✓ I go back with my child every day.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but note tense and habitual action are correct. Remove filler 'Umm'. No change needed except optional punctuation.

× I live in Ramdan which has many parks uh in each area.

✓ I live in Ramdan, which has many parks in each area.

Add comma after 'Ramdan' to join clauses. 'In each area' is acceptable; remove filler 'uh'.

× In near my home there are two parks.

✓ Near my home there are two parks.

Incorrect preposition 'In near'. Use 'Near my home' or 'In the area near my home'.

× Uh, I can go to any park and sometime I prefer to do bit more work.

✓ I can go to any park, and sometimes I prefer to do a bit more exercise.

Use 'sometimes' (adverb) not 'sometime'. Add article 'a' before 'bit'. 'Work' is unclear; likely 'exercise' or 'walk more' fits context.

× I visit one park and then go to next park where I see CP.

✓ I visit one park and then go to the next park where I see people exercising (CP unclear).

Add article 'the' before 'next park'. 'CP' is unclear; replace with clarification like 'people exercising' or define 'CP'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Yes, definitely. I've heard a park which is in uh, Alberta side and I would definitely go there.

✓ Yes, definitely. I've heard of a park on the Alberta side, and I would definitely go there.

Use 'heard of' not 'heard' when referring to knowing about something. Use preposition 'on the Alberta side'. Keep conditional 'would' is fine for willingness.

× I'm planning to visit my one of my cousins who lives there and he prays a lot about that part because there are a lot of activities.

✓ I'm planning to visit one of my cousins who lives there; he raves a lot about that place because there are many activities.

Remove the redundant 'my'. 'Prays a lot about that part' is incorrect word choice; likely 'raves' or 'talks a lot' fits. Use 'place' instead of 'part'. Use 'many' for countable 'activities'.

× So I'm planning to visit there.

✓ So I'm planning to visit there.

This sentence is acceptable, but more natural is 'So I'm planning to visit it' or 'So I'm planning to visit there' is colloquial but acceptable. No strict grammar change needed.