Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition, filler words (umm, I would), and contradictory phrasing. Use linking words (but, however, because) to make the response coherent and keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I liked visiting parks sometimes as a child, but I wasn’t a big fan of going often because summer parks had many insects. For example, mosquitoes and flies would swarm around us, which made outdoor play uncomfortable.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and briefly, then give a specific reason. Avoid repeating previous phrases exactly; instead, refer back succinctly. Use one linking word to connect your opinion and reason, and correct small grammar issues (e.g., ‘mosquitoes or beetles’ → ‘mosquitoes and beetles’).

Ejemplo: I don’t really prefer going to parks now because there are often mosquitoes and beetles. As a result, I find it irritating when insects land on me during walks.

Sugerencia: This answer is clear and positive. To improve, make it slightly more specific by stating why you’d like more parks and giving an example of what you would do there. Use a linking word to connect the general statement and the reason.

Ejemplo: Yes — living in Switzerland, I’d love more parks because the landscapes are beautiful and they encourage outdoor activities. For example, I would visit local parks to have picnics and go short hikes.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid saying you don’t know names — instead name the activity and connect it to parks or nature. Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g., 'via Ferrata' singular/plural; avoid doubling ‘you can’). Provide a brief reason or example of what attracts you to that activity.

Ejemplo: I haven’t looked up many park names, but I’m interested in doing more via ferrata routes. They combine hiking and climbing, and I enjoy them because they offer dramatic scenery and a sense of adventure.

× I would, I would say I did like to go to the park, but no, I was not really a big fan of going to the park because, umm, usually when you go to a park, it's, it's summertime.

✓ I would say I liked going to the park, but I was not really a big fan of it because usually when you go to a park it's summertime.

The sentence mixes 'would' and past forms awkwardly. Use simple past 'liked' to describe a childhood preference. Remove redundant phrases ('I would, I would say', duplicate 'going to the park') to make the sentence clearer and match past-time context. Suggest: use consistent past tense and avoid repetition.

× It has to be a sun, it has to be summer.

✓ It has to be sunny; it has to be summer.

'A sun' is incorrect because 'sunny' is the adjective describing weather; 'sun' as a noun with 'a' is not appropriate here. Use the adjective 'sunny' to describe conditions. Alternatively, say 'the sun has to be out.' Suggest: use adjectives for weather descriptions or 'the sun' without 'a'.

× And in summer there's so many bugs flying outside or.

✓ And in summer there are so many bugs flying around outside.

Use 'there are' for plural 'bugs' (subject-verb agreement). 'So many' is acceptable but 'there's' is singular contraction; replace with 'there are'. Also 'flying outside or' is incomplete; use 'flying around outside.' Suggest: ensure verb agrees with plural nouns and finish the phrase.

× I still don't really prefer to go out in the parks because, as I said, there's mosquitoes or beetles flying around it it.

✓ I still don't really like going to parks because, as I said, there are mosquitoes and beetles flying around.

Use 'like going to' instead of 'prefer to go out in the parks' which is awkward here. 'There are' must be used for plural 'mosquitoes'. 'Around it it' is erroneous repetition; remove it. Use 'and' instead of 'or' when listing typical insects. Suggest: use natural collocations ('like going to parks') and correct subject-verb agreement and prepositions.

× I don't like the feeling that it attaches to you.

✓ I don't like the feeling that they give you.

'It attaches to you' is unclear: 'they' (mosquitoes and beetles) is plural, so use 'they give you' or 'they leave on you' depending on meaning. Use a verb that collocates with insects ('bite' or 'land on') for clarity. Suggest: reference the insects with a plural pronoun and use a clearer verb (e.g., 'bite' or 'land on').

× Well now I'm living in Switzerland so the landscapes are amazing here.

✓ Well, I'm living in Switzerland now, so the landscapes here are amazing.

Word order and adverb placement are slightly awkward. Place 'now' after the verb or at sentence end for natural English. The original tense is acceptable (present continuous for current situation) but better placement improves fluency. Suggest: place temporal adverbs in natural positions.

× I would definitely like to explore more parks or any nature settings.

✓ I would definitely like to explore more parks or any natural settings.

'Nature settings' is awkward; use 'natural settings.' The verb phrase 'would like to explore' is correct but 'any nature settings' should be adjectival 'natural.' Suggest: use correct adjective form 'natural'.

× I haven't looked up for a lot of parks recently so I'm not really sure of the names,

✓ I haven't looked up many parks recently, so I'm not really sure of the names.

'Looked up for' is incorrect: 'looked up' (phrasal verb) does not take 'for' when meaning 'searched online' and 'looked for' (search) does not combine with 'up.' Use 'looked up' or 'looked for' appropriately. Also use 'many' with countable 'parks' instead of 'a lot of' in this construction for formality. Suggest: choose the correct phrasal verb ('looked up' or 'looked for') and correct preposition; use 'many' for countable plural.

× but I would like to do more via Ferrata's.

✓ but I would like to do more via ferratas.

Do not use an apostrophe to form a plural ('Ferrata's' is incorrect). Also 'Via Ferrata' is often treated as a proper noun; lowercasing and pluralizing as 'via ferratas' or 'via ferrate' (Italian plural) is acceptable. Ensure plural form without apostrophe. Suggest: remove apostrophe for plurals and check conventional pluralization.

× It's not really a park, but it's activities that you can do as a hike and you can you can enjoy a lot of sceneries there.

✓ It's not really a park, but it's a type of activity you can do while hiking, and you can enjoy a lot of scenery there.

The original has repetition ('you can you can'), incorrect article use ('it's activities' should be 'it's an activity' or 'they're activities'), and 'sceneries' is incorrect pluralization — 'scenery' is uncountable. Rephrase for clarity: 'a type of activity you can do while hiking' and 'a lot of scenery.' Suggest: remove repetition, use singular or uncountable nouns correctly, and restructure the sentence for clarity.