Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and relevant with a personal memory, but reduce hesitations (uh, umm, you know), avoid redundancy, and tighten sentences. Use one strong topic sentence followed by 1–2 specific supporting details connected with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'and').

Ejemplo: Yes — I loved going to the park as a child. Every Friday my mother, sister and I would walk to the neighborhood park, where we played on the swings and slides and ran races with our friends, which made those afternoons very memorable.

Sugerencia: Good direct response and reasons given, but avoid repeating phrases and be more concise. Use linking words to structure reasons (e.g., 'because' and 'however') and give a brief specific example of what makes them feel unsafe or noisy.

Ejemplo: Not really. I avoid parks now because many are crowded and noisy, and I have seen litter and groups behaving loudly, which makes me feel unsafe; however, I still enjoy a short walk in a quiet green area.

Sugerencia: The response is hesitant and somewhat repetitive. Give a clear position (yes or no or depends) and support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'for example'). Avoid repetition and finish the thought coherently.

Ejemplo: I would be open to more parks, because green areas improve the city's appearance and help people relax; for example, a small park with benches and trees would provide a pleasant place for office workers to take breaks.

Sugerencia: The answer shows enthusiasm but is disorganized with hesitations and uncertain language. Choose one clear example and describe why you want to visit it with specific details. Use linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'for example') and avoid filler phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes — I'd love to visit a theme park with attractions like life-size dinosaur exhibits because I'm interested in natural history; for example, a park with realistic models and information boards would be both fun and educational.

× Every Friday me and my mother and my sister would go to our neighborhood park and uh, our friends would be there.

✓ Every Friday my mother, my sister and I would go to our neighborhood park, and our friends would be there.

Pronoun order and case: 'me' is an object pronoun and should not be used as the subject. Use 'I' and place it last in a list of people. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' for clarity.

× We would play and umm, do some, you know, running and maybe playing on slides and swings.

✓ We would play, do some running, and maybe go on the slides and swings.

Combine parallel activities with consistent verb forms. 'Do some running' is fine, but 'playing on slides' should be parallel: use 'go on the slides' or 'play on the slides'. Remove filler words for clarity.

× No, no no actually I don't really like going to parks anymore because I think parks nowadays are unsafe, plus they are very crowded and noisy.

✓ No, actually I don't really like going to parks anymore because I think parks nowadays are unsafe; they are often very crowded and noisy.

Style and punctuation: reduce repetition of 'no' and use a semicolon or reword to connect related clauses. 'Plus' is informal; 'they are often' is clearer and more formal.

× It's good to walk around the green area but I don't really enjoy staying in a park or spending time in a park.

✓ It's nice to walk around green areas, but I don't really enjoy staying in a park or spending time there.

Use plural 'green areas' for general statements and replace the repeated noun with the pronoun 'there' to avoid repetition. 'Nice' is more natural here than 'good.'

× Actually, I'm not sure if I want to see more parks in my city. I I just think that green areas are OK. They make the city beautiful and they you feel fresh and relax when you look at look at trees or maybe you see.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure if I want to see more parks in my city. I just think that green areas are OK. They make the city beautiful, and you feel refreshed and relaxed when you look at the trees or the scenery.

Remove duplicate 'I' and repeated phrases. Correct verb forms: 'feel fresh' is unnatural; use 'feel refreshed.' Use parallel adjectives 'refreshed and relaxed.' Fix repetition 'look at look at' and complete the thought by specifying 'trees or the scenery.'

× Yeah, maybe I really want to see a park like Touristic Park where you can go and see. Dinosaurs.

✓ Yeah, maybe I would really like to visit a theme park, like a tourist park, where you can see dinosaurs.

'Touristic Park' is not a natural English phrase; use 'tourist park' or 'theme park.' Combine the broken sentence 'where you can go and see. Dinosaurs.' into one complete sentence. Use 'would like to visit' for polite future desire.

× They were dinosaurs, right?

✓ Those are dinosaurs, right?

Context: when referring to exhibits in a park (e.g., models), present tense 'are' is appropriate. Use 'those' to point to the dinosaurs. 'Were' implies past existence, which is incorrect for displays.

× I don't know yeah, I I think a very nice or maybe I like Disneyland.

✓ I don't know. Yeah, I think it's very nice; I maybe like Disneyland.

Remove the duplicate 'I' and rephrase for clarity. Add 'it's' to provide a subject for 'very nice.' The phrase 'I maybe like Disneyland' is informal; consider 'I might like Disneyland' or 'I really like Disneyland.'

× I don't know if you can call it a park, but I really enjoy going.

✓ I don't know if you can call it a park, but I really enjoy going there.

Add the pronoun 'there' to indicate the place and complete the sentence. This avoids leaving the verb 'going' without an object.