Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise, use correct tense and clear grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid unclear fragments (e.g. “CR really climb”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they offered many activities. For example, I used to climb trees and play on swings, which helped me relax and have fun with friends.

Sugerencia: Use correct verb forms and keep sentences under five. Provide a clear main idea and one specific reason with a linking word. Correct the phrase about stress (it ‘reduces’ stress).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks when I have time. However, I’m usually busy with work and study, so I only go occasionally because being in the park reduces my stress and helps me clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer then one or two specific benefits using linking words. Avoid repetition (don’t repeat ‘because’). Use natural phrases like ‘encourage people’ and ‘disconnect from phones’.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help reduce stress and encourage people to exercise. Also, parks provide a place to disconnect from phones and spend time outdoors with family.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give specific details about the park using clear linking words. Correct grammar (use ‘it has’/‘there are’ and ‘good air’ → ‘fresh air’). Mention why you want to visit it and when you might go.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Arena Hills, which is near my home in Australia. It has many walking paths and beautiful scenery, and I prefer it because the air is fresh and it’s peaceful for walking or photography.

× Yes I do, I love going to the parks as I was child because parks have a lot of things to do there which make me relax the environment around it. CR really climb.

✓ Yes, I did. I loved going to parks as a child because parks had a lot of things to do that helped me relax and I enjoyed the environment around them.

The student mixes present and past tenses: 'do' and 'love' (present) with 'as I was child' which requires past tense. Use past simple for past habits: 'did'/'loved'. 'as a child' is correct phrasing. 'parks have' should be past 'parks had'. 'which make me relax the environment around it' is ungrammatical and unclear; change to 'that helped me relax and I enjoyed the environment around them' to fix relative clause, verb tense, and pronoun agreement. Also remove unclear fragment 'CR really climb'.

× Yes I do when I have time but normally I don't really have time to go to the parks because I always busy with work and study but if I have a chance I always choose to go into the park because it's make me relax and stress me out. Oh no sorry it's make me.

✓ Yes, I do when I have time, but normally I don't have time to go to parks because I am always busy with work and study. If I have the chance, I choose to go to a park because it helps me relax, not stress me out.

Use consistent present tense forms: 'I don't have' instead of 'I don't really have' (optional adverb placement), and 'I am always busy' instead of 'I always busy' which lacks the verb 'am' (be-verb). 'go to parks' is more natural than 'go to the parks' in general. 'go into the park' -> 'go to a park'. 'it's make me relax' must be 'it helps me relax' (subject-verb agreement and correct verb). 'stress me out' is opposite meaning; student likely meant 'not stress me out', so correct the contradiction. Remove repeated fragment 'Oh no sorry it's make me.'

× Of course I would love to see more parks in my city because I would recommend people around me to go to the park because really reduce the stress and you can use your full time without your phone there and it's useful.

✓ Of course I would love to see more parks in my city because I would recommend that people around me visit them. Parks really reduce stress, and you can spend your free time there without using your phone, which is useful.

Pronoun and reference issues: 'recommend people around me to go to the park' is awkward; 'recommend that people around me visit them' uses a proper reporting structure and matches plural 'parks' with 'them'. 'really reduce the stress' should be 'really reduce stress' (no definite article). 'use your full time' is unnatural; 'spend your free time' is correct. 'it's useful' is vague; change to 'which is useful' to link to previous clause. Ensure consistent plural agreement between 'parks' and 'them'.

× Yes, currently I'm living in Australia and it's really good, have many paths that good environment and beautiful. I love to go near to my place called Arena Hills and it's really good air in environment around there.

✓ Yes, currently I'm living in Australia and it's really nice. There are many paths with a good environment and beautiful scenery. I love going to a place near my home called Arena Hills because the air and the surroundings there are really pleasant.

Sentence fragments and tense/details: 'it's really good, have many paths that good environment and beautiful' is ungrammatical. Use 'There are' to introduce existence of paths (There be issue). 'have' requires a subject; change to 'There are many paths with a good environment and beautiful scenery.' 'I love to go near to my place' -> 'I love going to a place near my home' for natural phrasing. 'it's really good air in environment around there' needs rephrasing to 'the air and the surroundings there are really pleasant' to correct word order, article usage, and noun phrases.