Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and grammar (use past tense consistently), and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my father often took me there and bought me ice cream and balloons, which made those visits very fun. In contrast, my mother was stricter, so we rarely went with her.

Sugerencia: Improve coherence by linking ideas and eliminating repetition. Use a brief topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words and one specific example of activity. Fix small grammar errors and avoid repeating phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but now mainly to exercise. For instance, I usually jog on the park path or use outdoor equipment, and if the weather is bad I exercise at home instead.

Sugerencia: Make the response clearer and more concise. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons and a brief comparison. Correct grammar and avoid confusing phrasing about location.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks. I live in a small barangay in the province, so there is only one park available; as a result, it can get crowded and lacks facilities that a city park would have.

Sugerencia: Be specific and confident. State the park's name (e.g. Merlion Park) and give a reason why you want to visit. Use linking words to organize the idea and avoid hedging phrases like "I'm not sure" repeatedly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Merlion Park in Singapore because of the famous Merlion statue that spouts water. I would love to see it in person and take photos by the waterfront.

× Yes, as a child I like going to the park, especially when I am with my dad because my dad loves to treat me ice cream, buy me balloons, compared to my mother who was very strict to me that time. But the park memory, I love it.

✓ Yes, as a child I liked going to the park, especially when I was with my dad because he loved to buy me ice cream and balloons, while my mother was very strict at that time. I have fond memories of the park.

The sentence mixes present tense with past events; since the speaker refers to childhood, past tense should be used (liked, was, loved, was). 'Treat me ice cream' is incorrect verb usage; use 'buy me ice cream'. 'Compared to my mother who was very strict to me that time' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'while my mother was very strict at that time'. 'The park memory, I love it' is unnatural; replace with 'I have fond memories of the park'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for past events, use correct verb collocations (buy someone something), and use natural phrases for memories.

× Yes, I still do love going to the park, but with a different purpose.

✓ Yes, I still love going to the park, but for a different purpose.

Redundant auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary with 'still love' in present simple. 'With a different purpose' is acceptable but 'for a different purpose' is more natural. Suggest removing unnecessary 'do' and use 'for' to indicate purpose.

× Every time I want to to move my body, the first instinct is to go to the park, then having exercise inside my room.

✓ Every time I want to move my body, my first instinct is to go to the park, then exercise inside my room.

Double 'to' is a typo. 'Having exercise' is not natural; use the verb 'exercise' instead. Also sequence and subject clarity improved by 'my first instinct is to...' Suggest remove extra 'to' and use 'exercise' as a verb.

× So right now going to the park is for recreation.

✓ So right now, going to the park is for recreation.

Sentence is acceptable but requires a comma after 'So right now' for clarity. Tense is present and fits context. Suggest adding comma.

× I would love to but right now I'm staying in a small barangay or a small province and it's not in the city so we only have one park and in this park here where I go for a walk, go for exercise and I haven't see any park so far my.

✓ I would love to, but right now I live in a small barangay in a province, not in the city, so we only have one park where I go for walks and exercise. I haven't seen any other parks so far.

Original sentence is run-on and ungrammatical. 'I'm staying' can be acceptable but 'I live' is clearer for a current residence. 'A small barangay or a small province' is redundant and inaccurate; barangay is within a province, so clarify. 'Go for a walk, go for exercise' should be 'go for walks and exercise'. 'I haven't see' is wrong verb form; use present perfect 'I haven't seen'. 'So far my' is unfinished; remove 'my'. Suggestions: split into shorter clauses, use correct verb forms, avoid redundancy, and use present perfect for experiences up to now.

× Yes, I think the park, the lion park in Singapore, I'm not sure what you call that park, but there's a statue of a lion and water on it, showering water on it.

✓ Yes, I think of the Lion Park in Singapore — I'm not sure what it is called, but there is a statue of a lion with water flowing over it like a fountain.

Mix of tenses and awkward phrasing. 'I think the park, the lion park in Singapore' is unclear; use 'I think of the Lion Park in Singapore'. 'I'm not sure what you call that park' is acceptable but can be smoother as 'I'm not sure what it is called'. 'There's a statue of a lion and water on it, showering water on it' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'a statue of a lion with water flowing over it' or 'like a fountain'. Suggestions: streamline the phrase, avoid repetition, and use present simple for general facts.

× I'm not sure how to explain it, but hopefully in the future I can visit Singapore and take a photo with it.

✓ I'm not sure how to explain it, but hopefully in the future I will be able to visit Singapore and take a photo with it.

'I can visit' is acceptable but 'I will be able to visit' is more natural when expressing a future hope. Use future modal construction to indicate a future possibility or intention. Suggest using 'will be able to' or 'can' depending on register; 'will be able to' is clearer for hopes.