Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar, avoid fillers (umm) and complete your final thought. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct tense and subject-verb agreement.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they had many rides and large play areas. However, the parks near my hometown were not very accessible, so my family often had to travel three to five hours to visit a good park.

Sugerencia: Good clear idea and contrast. Improve by removing repetition and fillers, use a linking phrase to contrast, and correct awkward phrasing (“walking over myself”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences with specific details about frequency or routine.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but now I go mainly to exercise. For example, I usually run there three times a week or take a quiet walk to relax, and I prefer being alone so I can think without distractions.

Sugerencia: Be more precise and avoid repetition and fillers. Use plural agreement and link ideas smoothly (e.g., “such as” then list examples). Limit to 2–3 sentences and give specific, realistic suggestions for facilities.

Ejemplo: Yes, absolutely. I would like more parks that offer diverse facilities, such as outdoor gym equipment, a dedicated area for rollerblading or skating, and marked running paths to encourage exercise.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid hesitation. Clarify preferences and give a specific example of a park you might want to visit in future, or describe what features would attract you. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct redundancy.

Ejemplo: At the moment I don't have a specific park in mind because my interests are limited to running and quiet activities. However, I would consider visiting a park in the future if it had a peaceful writing nook, well-maintained running trails, or sheltered areas where I could sit and write.

× Oh yes, I love going to the park when I was a child because there's a lot of umm, rides, there's a lot of play area there.

✓ Oh yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child because there were a lot of rides and a large play area there.

Tense consistency: the clause 'when I was a child' places the action in the past, so the verb 'love' should be past 'loved' and 'there's' (there is) should be past 'there were'. Also use plural 'rides' with 'a lot of' is fine; combine ideas with 'and a large play area' for clarity.

× But then the parks in my city is not very accessible.

✓ But then the parks in my city are not very accessible.

Subject-verb agreement: 'parks' is plural so the verb must be 'are' not 'is'. Ensure plural subjects pair with plural verbs.

× We have to travel for like 3 to 5 hours just to.

✓ We have to travel for about three to five hours just to get there.

Incomplete sentence: 'just to' is a sentence fragment; it requires an infinitive verb (e.g., 'get there'). Also use 'about' instead of colloquial 'like' and write numbers in words for formality.

× Yeah, I still like going to parks, but for a different reason.

✓ Yeah, I still like going to parks, but for different reasons.

Number/nuance: If you mean multiple activities (running, walking) give plural 'reasons'. The original is not strictly ungrammatical but adjusting makes it match later enumeration.

× Instead of playing umm, I go there to run or take a walk, and I just like to to be alone, just walking over myself without talking to anyone.

✓ Instead of playing, I go there to run or take a walk, and I just like to be alone, just walking by myself without talking to anyone.

Redundant 'to to' removed. 'Walking over myself' is incorrect collocation; correct phrase is 'walking by myself' meaning alone. Also remove filler 'umm' and ensure parallel structure ('to run or take a walk').

× I would love to see more parts in my city that has a different different umm things or activities to offer such as open gym equipment or if they also have like an area for just roller blades or roller skates or just an area for running.

✓ I would love to see more parks in my city that have different things or activities to offer, such as outdoor gym equipment, an area for rollerblading or roller skating, or a running area.

Multiple issues: 'parts' should be 'parks' (word choice), 'has' should be 'have' to agree with plural 'parks' (subject-verb agreement), 'different different' is a repetition, and 'roller blades' should be 'rollerblading' or 'roller skates' with consistent phrasing. Also improve parallel structure and clarity, replace 'open gym equipment' with 'outdoor gym equipment.' Remove filler 'umm' and 'like.'

× Umm, right now I don't have any parks that I would love to go to in the future because, umm, my activities are very limited.

✓ Right now I don't have any parks that I would like to go to in the future because my activities are very limited.

Style and modal verb: 'would love to go to in the future' is overly strong and slightly awkward with 'right now' — 'would like to go to in the future' fits better. Remove filler 'umm' and maintain present preference.

× I only enjoy writing or I only enjoy running and walking.

✓ I only enjoy writing, running, and walking.

Redundant repetition removed for conciseness and correct parallel listing of activities using commas and 'and' for the final item.

× So if there is a park that offers something different, maybe that's something.

✓ So if there is a park that offers something different, maybe I would go there.

Vague and incomplete: 'maybe that's something' is vague and ungrammatical. Clarify intended meaning — here, expressing a possible future action — using 'maybe I would go there' or 'that would interest me.'