Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more accurate with tense and word choice, shorten and clarify sentences, and include specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases like “you know” and awkward phrases such as “it just so happened.”

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved going to the park as a child. I used to visit the neighborhood park every afternoon after school, where I played tag and climbed trees with my friends. Those afternoons were exciting because we would race each other and imagine adventures.

Sugerencia: Give a clear, concise answer about your current habits, use correct grammar (present simple/continuous), and provide a specific example or frequency. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid confusing phrases.

Ejemplo: Not usually, but I still enjoy going to parks occasionally with my cousin. For example, we go once or twice a month to walk and chat, and those visits are always relaxing and memorable.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and use correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘parks’ not ‘book’ or ‘block’). Explain reasons with specific benefits and link them coherently. Keep to two to three sentences and avoid fillers.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would mean easier access to fresh air and green space in the afternoons. For instance, if there were more small parks near my apartment, I could take short walks after work to relax and exercise.

Sugerencia: Be precise about the place and why you want to go there. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, mention a clear reason or specific attraction, and state who you would go with. Limit to three sentences maximum and remove hesitations like “you know.”

Ejemplo: I would like to visit Disneyland in the future because I’ve seen exciting videos of the rides and parades on social media. I plan to go with my family so we can enjoy the attractions together and make lasting memories.

× Yes, if my memory serves me right, I love going to the park.

✓ Yes, if my memory serves me right, I loved going to the park.

The question asks about past habit as a child, so past tense 'loved' is required instead of present 'love'. Use past tense to match time reference. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs when describing past habits (I loved, I used to love).

× When I was a child, I made it a habit to try visit a block in the afternoon on weekdays.

✓ When I was a child, I made it a habit to try to visit a park in the afternoons on weekdays.

After 'try' use the infinitive 'to visit', not the base form alone. 'Block' is incorrect word choice; 'park' fits context. Use plural 'afternoons' for repeated actions. Suggestion: use 'try to + verb' and correct nouns for context.

× It just so happened to be fun and exciting to play with your friends in the park, you know?

✓ It was fun and exciting to play with my friends in the park.

Mixing second-person 'your' with first-person narration is inconsistent. Also 'just so happened to be' is unnecessary. Use past tense 'was' and consistent pronoun 'my'.

× So now I don't really into the park, however I am all about going to the park with my cousin.

✓ So now I don't really go to the park, but I do enjoy going to the park with my cousin.

'Don't really into' is ungrammatical; after 'do' use base verb 'go'. Use 'but' instead of 'however' for smoother coordination and add 'do enjoy' for emphasis.

× So playing right now, it just so happened to be memorable to play with your colleagues and life and play a lot of.

✓ Playing now is memorable because I play with my cousins and enjoy it a lot.

Original sentence is fragmented, has inconsistent pronouns and redundant phrases. Recast sentence with clear subject 'Playing now' and proper objects 'my cousins'. Remove 'just so happened' and 'life'.

× Yeah, of course I would love to see more book all built in my city.

✓ Yeah, of course I would love to see more parks built in my city.

'book all' is nonsensical; likely intended 'parks'. Use correct noun and passive structure 'built in my city'.

× So basically in the afternoon I can easily get fresh air to walk in the park.

✓ So basically in the afternoons I can easily get fresh air by walking in the park.

Use plural 'afternoons' for habitual action. Use 'by walking' to express purpose/means. Tense remains present for general ability.

× You know, it just so happened to be relaxed and calm in the beautiful block.

✓ You know, it's usually peaceful and calm in the beautiful park.

'Relaxed' describes people, not places; 'peaceful' or 'calm' is better for places. 'Block' is wrong noun—use 'park'. Use present habitual 'is usually'.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

Question is fine but 'would like' is more polite and natural for future preference. No grammatical error but improvement suggested.

× I really want to go to Disneyland in the future.

✓ I really want to go to Disneyland in the future.

Sentence is correct; present participle not required. Keep as is to express future intention.

× You know, I just ran run into some view or somebody listed it on Tiktok and each also happened to be fun and exciting in this day.

✓ You know, I recently saw some videos where somebody mentioned it on TikTok, and it seemed fun and exciting.

Original mixes tenses and has repeated words 'ran run' and 'each'. Use 'recently saw' and 'seemed' to report past observation. Use 'videos' and 'mentioned on TikTok' for clarity.

× You know, I would love to visit listening in the future with my family or with my friends.

✓ You know, I would love to visit Disneyland in the future with my family or my friends.

'listening' is a misspelling of 'Disneyland' or 'visiting'; context suggests 'Disneyland'. Use consistent pronouns 'my family or my friends'. Ensure correct noun.