Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammatical accuracy and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers like "uh" and complete sentences (use past tense for childhood).

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they helped me relax after long school days. For example, I used to play on the swings and read under a tree, which reduced my stress from heavy academic pressure.

Sugerencia: Be concise and avoid repetition. Use correct verb forms and link ideas with connectors. Provide one or two concrete reasons and a brief example. Keep under five sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relieve stress and improve concentration. For instance, I often take a 30-minute walk in the park before studying, which makes me calmer and more productive.

Sugerencia: Clarify and organize your reasons using linking words. Use specific examples and correct phrasing (e.g., ‘help people exercise’). Limit to two supporting points and avoid vague expressions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they provide safe places for people to exercise and for children to play. For example, busy parents could take their kids to nearby parks for regular outdoor activity instead of staying indoors.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and then a clear supporting detail. Fix tense and phrasing, avoid contradictions (e.g., say whether you have parks you'd like to visit). Mention a specific park or type of park you want to visit in the future.

Ejemplo: I don't travel to many parks outside my city, but in the future I'd like to visit a large botanical garden nearby. I would go there with my family to enjoy the different plant collections and peaceful walking paths.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child because it just kind of to relieve stress, uh, because I always had a pressure of academics, studies and.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because it helped to relieve stress, since I always felt pressure from academics and studies.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses; the question asks about childhood so past tense should be used (liked, helped). 'park' needs plural 'parks' or 'the park'; use 'parks' to match general meaning. Also use 'felt pressure from' rather than 'had a pressure of'. Simplify redundant phrases.

× Yes, I still like to go, uh, parks because it relieve my stress and it helped me to stay focused and calm my body and relax and be more focused in studies and education and cultural activities, creativity and I like to.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to parks because they relieve my stress and help me stay calm and focused for my studies and creative activities.

Use present simple for current habits (like, relieve, help). 'parks' requires plural agreement with 'they'. Remove redundant 'to' after 'go' and unnecessary repetition. Use 'help me stay calm and focused' for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it helps many people to come their body and in today's generation many parents are busy in their jobs and they are not giving their kids the time and which the kids want so park.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they help people get exercise, and today many parents are busy with their jobs and cannot give their children the time they need, so parks are important.

Use plural agreement 'parks' and refer to them with 'they'. Replace incorrect phrase 'come their body' with 'get exercise'. Use 'busy with their jobs' rather than 'busy in their jobs'. Use 'children' instead of 'kids' in formal correction; fix relative clause 'the time they need'.

× Actually, I don't go much past around my city and country.

✓ Actually, I don't travel much outside my city and country.

Use present simple for habitual actions. 'go much past around' is incorrect; use 'travel much outside' to express not going beyond local area. 'city and country' clarified to 'city or country' but 'outside my city and country' fits intended meaning.

× I usually want where I usually goes like in my area.

✓ I usually go to places in my area.

Subject-verb agreement: 'I' with 'go' not 'goes'. Remove redundant 'usually' and awkward structure 'want where I usually goes like'. Simplify to 'I usually go to places in my area.'

× And I like prefer going there with my friends, with my family.

✓ And I prefer going there with my friends or my family.

'like prefer' is redundant; choose 'prefer'. Use 'with' once and 'or' to indicate either companions. Keep parallel structure.

× I keep enjoying their surroundings. So yeah.

✓ I enjoy the surroundings there, so I keep going.

'Keep enjoying their surroundings' is awkward and 'their' is unclear. Rephrase to 'enjoy the surroundings there' and explain result 'so I keep going' to make a complete, natural sentence.