Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitation and repetition, use past-tense consistently, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Be more specific about what you liked (activities, sounds, people) and use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so').

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played games and had picnics there with a close childhood friend, and my parents took me every weekend. Because the parks were quiet with trees and birds, I felt relaxed and refreshed.

Sugerencia: Avoid long hesitations and unclear phrases; use simple, correct grammar to explain reasons. Start with a direct response, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: Not much, unfortunately. I rarely go to parks these days because I am very busy with my studies and have a lot of homework, so I usually spend most of my time in my room.

Sugerencia: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific benefits and a linking phrase. Use accurate nouns and plural forms ('parks', 'people') and concise sentences to avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. More parks would improve the quality of city life because they give people a place to walk and exercise, especially in the mornings. In addition, parks create green space that helps reduce pollution and makes neighborhoods more pleasant.

Sugerencia: Avoid vague phrases and contradictory tense. If you cannot name a specific park, say so briefly, then describe the kind of park you'd like to visit and give reasons. Avoid odd expressions ('relax and die'); choose appropriate verbs like 'relax' or 'unwind'.

Ejemplo: I can't think of a particular park right now, but when I lived in China I noticed many small parks near my apartment. In the future I would like to visit nearby parks with ponds and walking paths because I enjoy relaxing walks and watching birds.

× Umm I love going to park when I was young and I remember, I remember I, I have a childhood friend that always meet me umm in the park.

✓ Umm, I loved going to parks when I was young and I remember I had a childhood friend who always met me in the park.

Tense consistency and verb forms: The sentence mixes present tense 'love' with 'when I was young' which requires past tense 'loved'. 'Have a childhood friend' should be past 'had'. 'That' referring to a person should be 'who'. 'Meet' should be past 'met' to match 'always' in past. Also use plural 'parks' or 'the park' consistently. Suggestion: keep past tense for activities that happened in childhood and use 'who' for people.'

× So my parents always bring me to there and I love the atmosphere they gave to me.

✓ So my parents always brought me there and I loved the atmosphere they gave me.

Preposition and verb form errors: 'bring me to there' is incorrect; use 'brought me there'. Maintain past tense 'brought' and 'loved' to match childhood. 'Gave to me' is wordy and ungrammatical; use 'gave me'. Suggestion: use 'brought me there' and 'gave me' and match past tense.'

× Uh, which can refer refresh myself.

✓ It helped me feel refreshed.

Fragment and word choice: 'which can refer refresh myself' is ungrammatical and unclear. The speaker likely means the park helped them refresh. Use a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'It helped me feel refreshed.' Suggestion: express cause-effect clearly with correct verbs and reflexive pronoun avoided here.'

× Umm, to be honest, I don't have that many chance to go past right now as I am umm, like I have a lot of to study weight and a lot of homework to deal with and I'm like putting myself the whole day in a room in my room.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I don't have many chances to go out right now because I have a lot of studying to do and a lot of homework, and I spend the whole day in my room.

Count noun and verb tense: 'that many chance' should be 'many chances' (plural). 'Go past' is incorrect preposition; likely 'go out'. 'A lot of to study weight' is incorrect phrase; use 'a lot of studying to do'. 'Putting myself the whole day in a room in my room' is ungrammatical; use 'I spend the whole day in my room.' Suggestion: use correct collocations ('go out', 'a lot of studying') and pluralize 'chances'.'

× So I don't really have extra time to go parts to relax.

✓ So I don't really have extra time to go to parks to relax.

Preposition and word choice: 'go parts' is a misspelling/incorrect word; should be 'go to parks'. Include preposition 'to' before place and correct noun 'parks'. Suggestion: 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' depending on context.'

× Of course, definitely parts can improve the quality of our city and our own just by there are many other people who like to walk in the park and also especially in the morning, they do like to do exercises and if there is no place to, uh, they can they provide them to do.

✓ Of course, definitely parks can improve the quality of our city and our lives because many people like to walk in the park, especially in the morning when they exercise, and if there were no places like that, they would not have a place to do so.

Plural and sentence structure: 'parts' should be 'parks'. 'Our own' is unclear; likely 'our lives'. Sentence is run-on and needs restructuring. Use conditional 'if there were no places like that' and 'a place to do so' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify into shorter clauses and use correct plural 'parks' and expressions like 'our lives'.'

× Umm, to be honest, there's nothing coming up in my mind, but uh, when I was studying abroad in China, I found that there are lots of parks in, uh, beside the place where I live.

✓ Umm, to be honest, nothing comes to mind, but when I was studying abroad in China, I found that there were lots of parks near where I lived.

Tense and 'there be' usage: 'there's nothing coming up in my mind' is awkward; use 'nothing comes to mind'. For past context 'when I was studying abroad' use past 'there were' and 'near where I lived' instead of 'beside the place where I live'. Suggestion: match tenses and use natural phrases like 'comes to mind' and 'near where I lived'.'

× So if I have to change, I, I would go to many park beside me and I would try to relax and die.

✓ So if I had to move, I would go to the many parks near me and try to relax and unwind.

Word choice and pluralization: 'have to change' likely means 'have to move'. 'Many park' should be 'many parks'. 'Beside me' should be 'near me'. 'Relax and die' is incorrect and likely a misuse of 'die' for 'rest' or 'unwind'; use 'unwind' or 'relax'. Also conditional tense should be 'if I had to move' or 'if I were to move'. Suggestion: use correct conditional form and safer verbs like 'unwind'.'