Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense (e.g., “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), avoid filler words (uh, umm), and finish with one or two specific supporting details (what you did there, who you went with, how it made you feel). Limit to up to 4–5 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played games and made new friends there because many families in my neighborhood gathered at the park. The fresh, windy weather also helped me relax and enjoy being outdoors.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with present preference and give clear reason(s). Use correct tense and singular/plural forms and avoid repeating ideas. Use one linking word (however, although, because). Provide a brief specific example of what you enjoy about parks now or why you cannot go often.

Ejemplo: I still enjoy parks, but I don’t go often because I live on the outskirts of Bangkok and public transport to the nearest park is limited. When I do visit, I appreciate the peaceful atmosphere and I usually sit by a pond to relax.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion sentence and then two specific reasons linked logically. Use plural/singular agreement and avoid vague phrases. Mention concrete benefits (health, community events, children’s play areas) and use linking words (because, so, therefore).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are few parks near my home, so it’s difficult to visit them. More parks would encourage exercise, provide safe play areas for children, and create spaces for neighbors to meet and socialize.

Sugerencia: Be specific about a place and explain why with concrete details. Avoid fillers and correct grammar (Switzerland has, scenery not sceneries). Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so that). Mention a particular park or natural feature and what you would do there.

Ejemplo: I would love to visit parks in Switzerland in the future because the weather is pleasant and the mountain scenery is beautiful. For example, I hope to visit a lakeside park near Interlaken to go hiking and enjoy panoramic views of the Alps.

× As a child, I love to go to the park since it can provide many, uh, opportunities for me to hang out with new people and also, umm, just relax since the weather at the park is normally very windy within my neighborhood since there are.

✓ As a child, I loved going to the park because it provided many opportunities for me to hang out with new people and relax, since the weather at the parks in my neighborhood was usually quite windy.

The student is describing past habitual actions, so present tense 'love' and 'can provide' are incorrect; they should be in the past tense (loved, provided, was). Also corrected pluralization and word order for clarity. Suggestion: use past simple for repeated past actions (I loved, it provided, was usually).

× Not anymore since my house is pretty far away from the park because I lived in the outskirts of Bangkok which make it harder to have a transportation for traveling to the park.

✓ Not anymore, since my house is pretty far from the park; I live on the outskirts of Bangkok, which makes it harder to get transportation to the park.

Mixed past and present tense: 'lived' should be present 'live' to match 'Not anymore' and 'is'. Subject-verb agreement: 'which make' should be 'which makes' because the relative clause refers to 'living on the outskirts' (singular situation). 'Have a transportation' is unnatural; use 'get transportation' or 'access to public transport'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (present) and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× However, I love going to the park because of their the relaxation within the park and also the atmosphere.

✓ However, I love going to the park because of the relaxation and the pleasant atmosphere there.

Incorrect and redundant pronouns/articles: 'their the' is incorrect. 'Their' wrongly refers to 'park' (singular) and conflicts with 'the'; use 'there' for location or restructure to 'the relaxation'. Suggestion: avoid redundant determiners and use correct pronoun 'there' for location, or rephrase to 'the relaxation and atmosphere'.

× For me, I would love to see more parks since in my neighborhood there isn't that much park that is close to my house which make it hard for me to travel to the park and also having various park can also boost the relationships within people.

✓ For me, I would love to see more parks, since in my neighborhood there aren't many parks close to my house, which makes it hard for me to travel to them. Also, having various parks can help strengthen relationships among people.

Article and count noun errors: 'isn't that much park' is ungrammatical—use 'aren't many parks' for countable plural. Subject-verb agreement: 'which make' should be 'which makes'. 'Having various park' should be 'various parks'. 'Boost the relationships within people' is awkward; use 'strengthen relationships among people'. Suggestion: use plural forms for countable nouns and correct verb agreement.

× I really want to go to the park, uh, outside of my country, umm, for example, uh, Switzerland, because Switzerland have a very good weather, uh, within the country and I would love to try to go there just to experience the nature and also the scene sceneries within the park.

✓ I really want to visit parks outside my country, for example in Switzerland, because Switzerland has very good weather, and I would love to go there to experience the nature and the scenery in its parks.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Switzerland have' should be 'Switzerland has' (singular subject). Article and vocabulary errors: 'a very good weather' should be 'very good weather' (uncountable) and 'scene sceneries' is incorrect; use 'scenery'. Repetition and wordiness reduced. Suggestion: use correct verb form for country names, treat 'weather' as uncountable, and use 'scenery' for views.