Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise, use correct tense and reduce fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Focus on past tense and clearer vocabulary.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with my friends to play games and pick flowers, which made me feel happy and relaxed.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer and compare past and present using linking words. Avoid hesitation words and correct subject-verb agreement. Mention one clear reason.

Ejemplo: I still enjoy parks, but nowadays I prefer going to cafés or amusement parks because they offer more activities and make me feel excited and relaxed.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and organize ideas. Use specific details and correct vocabulary (e.g. 'crowded' instead of 'shudu'). If mentioning examples, name them clearly and explain why you like or dislike them.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Although our city has many parks such as Ozodegan, some are too crowded and noisy, so I would welcome quieter green spaces for relaxation.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence about future intention, use 'want to go' or 'would like to visit', and reduce repetition and fillers. Give a brief reason and one specific detail.

Ejemplo: In the future I would like to visit Radio Park because it is close to a café where I can enjoy an iced caramel macchiato and tiramisu after walking around the gardens.

× Yeah, it's my favorite hobby and, uh, when I'm child I go to park and play with my friends and, uh, I like, uh, pick up the flower and I love the flower and park because it's good.

✓ Yeah, it was my favorite hobby, and when I was a child I went to the park and played with my friends. I liked picking flowers and I loved the park because it was nice.

The student describes childhood activities, so past tense is required. 'I'm child' is incorrect; use 'I was a child'. Use past tense verbs 'went' and 'played' for completed past actions. 'Pick up the flower' should be 'picking flowers' (gerund) to describe likes, and articles are needed: 'the park' or 'the flowers'. Also 'favorite hobby' in past context becomes 'was my favorite hobby'. Suggestions: use past simple for past habits (I went, I played, I liked) and use 'a' before 'child' and 'the' before specific places or plural nouns when general ('flowers').

× Maybe yeah, but now I like to go cafes, uh, because it's exciting or uh, I, I really enjoy going to amusement park because it feel me happy and relaxed.

✓ Maybe, yeah, but now I like going to cafes because it's exciting. I really enjoy going to amusement parks because they make me feel happy and relaxed.

Talking about current preferences requires present simple: 'I like going to cafes'. Use plural 'cafes' or 'a cafe'. 'Amusement park' should be plural or take an article: 'amusement parks' or 'the amusement park'. 'It feel me happy' is ungrammatical; use 'they make me feel' or 'it makes me feel' depending on singular/plural subject. Also use the gerund 'going' after 'like'. Suggestions: use 'like/love + -ing' for preferences and ensure subject-verb agreement ('it makes', 'they make').

× Yeah, we have a lots of park in my city, uh, like ready Ozodegan and another and umm, maybe park, uh, it's not good because it's popular and it's so shudu.

✓ Yeah, we have a lot of parks in my city, like Ready Ozodegan and others. Maybe some parks are not good because they're crowded and noisy.

'A lots of' is incorrect; correct form is 'a lot of' or 'lots of'. 'Park' should be plural 'parks' when talking about multiple. 'Another' should be 'others' or 'another one'. 'It's so shudu' appears to attempt 'crowded' or 'noisy'—use correct vocabulary. Also use plural verbs and pronouns for 'parks' ('they're'). Suggestions: use 'a lot of' + plural noun, 'others' for additional items, and choose correct adjectives like 'crowded' or 'noisy'.

× In future I want to going to Radio Park because it's near the cafe and I can go to cafe and uh, uh, drink uh, ice caramel macchiato and uh eat eating uh tiramisu.

✓ In the future I want to go to Radio Park because it's near a cafe and I can go to the cafe and drink an iced caramel macchiato and eat tiramisu.

After 'want to' use the base verb, not the -ing form: 'want to go' not 'want to going'. 'In future' needs the article 'the' ('in the future'). Use 'a cafe' or 'the cafe' consistently. 'Ice caramel macchiato' should be 'iced caramel macchiato' (adjective form), and 'eat eating tiramisu' should be simply 'eat tiramisu'. Suggestions: use 'want to + base verb' for future intentions, include articles where needed, and use correct adjective forms for beverages ('iced').