Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và chọn từ đúng; trả lời trực tiếp, ngắn gọn và rõ ràng; dùng liên từ để nối ý; thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ trò chơi, tần suất). Ví dụ cụ thể: nói rõ bạn đi bao nhiêu lần một tuần, tên trò chơi và cảm xúc.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents usually took me to the park three times a week after school, where I often played hide-and-seek and climbed on the swings. These activities were exciting and helped me make close friends. As a result, I have many fond childhood memories of the park.

Sugerencia: Sửa từ vựng bị dùng sai (pub → park) và cấu trúc câu; trả lời trực tiếp với một chủ đề câu, dùng liên từ để giải thích; cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về cách công viên giúp giảm stress (ví dụ: đi bộ, đọc sách). Tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt mơ hồ.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Whenever I feel stressed from lessons, I go for a short walk in the park to relax and clear my mind. Walking among trees and sitting on a bench helps me reduce anxiety and recharge, so I try to visit a park at least twice a week.

Sugerencia: Nói rõ quan điểm và lí do cụ thể; tránh lặp từ và hoàn chỉnh cấu trúc; mô tả cụ thể loại hoạt động và lợi ích của công viên mới (ví dụ: khu chơi trẻ em, đường đi bộ, vườn hoa). Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc hơn.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, especially in new residential areas. New parks could offer playgrounds for children, walking paths for exercise, and gardens for relaxation, which would improve residents' health and the neighbourhood's appearance.

Sugerencia: Làm rõ ý (house parks → countryside or backyard parks) và dùng thì phù hợp; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về địa điểm bạn muốn tới và hoạt động bạn sẽ làm (ví dụ: ngắm sao, cắm trại). Dùng câu mô tả ngắn gọn và liên kết lí do cảm xúc với hoạt động.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit rural parks or small country parks in the future, where there is little light pollution and I can see the stars clearly at night. I would enjoy stargazing there and perhaps camping for a peaceful, relaxing experience.

× That's very much in my try.

✓ That's very true for me.

The student used incorrect words and sentence structure. Use 'very true for me' to express agreement. Suggestion: use common expressions like 'That's true for me' or 'I agree'.

× My parents often take me to the pods after school.

✓ My parents often took me to the parks after school.

'Pods' is incorrect; should be 'parks'. Also maintain past tense 'took' because question asks about childhood. Suggestion: use correct noun 'park' (singular) or 'parks' (plural) and past tense for past habits.

× I often play hide and seek with my friends or play something in the playground and I think it's very interesting and makes me more friendly with my friends.

✓ I often played hide-and-seek with my friends or played on the playground, and I think it was very fun and helped me become more friendly with others.

When talking about past habits, use past tense 'played'. 'Hide and seek' is hyphenated in this context. 'Play something' is vague; use 'played on the playground'. 'Makes me more friendly with my friends' should be 'helped me become more friendly with others.' Suggestion: use past tense and clearer phrasing.

× Oh yes, I love going to the pub very much because when I feel stressed or anxiety in my lesson at school, I often go to park to feel more comfortable and reduce strength.

✓ Oh yes, I love going to the park because when I feel stressed or anxious during lessons at school, I often go to the park to feel more comfortable and relieve stress.

Use 'park' not 'pub' (different meaning). Use adjective 'anxious' for 'anxiety'. 'During lessons' is better than 'in my lesson'. 'Relieve stress' is correct instead of 'reduce strength'. Suggestion: choose the correct nouns and collocations: 'relieve stress', 'feel anxious'.

× I think in going to the park can help me make well friend with more anyone and can uh feel at.

✓ I think going to the park can help me make friends and feel better around people.

Remove unnecessary 'in' before 'going'. 'Make well friend with more anyone' is ungrammatical; use 'make friends' or 'make more friends'. 'Can uh feel at' is meaningless; use 'feel better'. Suggestion: simplify structure: 'going to the park can help me make friends and feel better'.

× Oh yes, I like to see more parks in my city especially its in development.

✓ Oh yes, I would like to see more parks in my city, especially as it develops.

Use conditional 'would like' for preferences. 'Its in development' is ungrammatical; use 'as it develops' or 'during development'. Suggestion: use 'would like to see' and correct clause 'as it develops'.

× There is a big big park with many beautiful views or people can do different activity in here.

✓ There is a big park with many beautiful views where people can do different activities.

Avoid repeating 'big big'. Use relative clause 'where people can' instead of 'or people can'. Use plural 'activities'. Remove 'in here' which is redundant. Suggestion: use 'where' for location clauses and plural for countable nouns.

× Oh yes, in the future all I want to think about house parks because in here I can see many star on sky in night.

✓ Oh yes, in the future I would like to visit country parks because there I can see many stars in the night sky.

'All I want to think about house parks' is incorrect; use 'I would like to visit country parks' or 'rural parks'. 'In here' should be 'there'. Use plural 'stars' and correct order 'night sky'. Suggestion: use 'would like to' for future wishes and correct noun phrases.

× I love this view because when I see this I think I feel more comfortable and relax.

✓ I love this view because when I see it I feel more comfortable and relaxed.

Use pronoun 'it' to refer to 'this view'. 'I think I feel' is redundant; say 'I feel'. Use adjective 'relaxed' rather than base verb 'relax'. Suggestion: use concise phrasing and correct adjective forms.