Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., 'since my childhood' and 'as a child' together) and correct verb forms (use past tense consistently for childhood).

Ejemplo: Yes — I loved going to a park near my home when I was a child. I often played football there with my friends, and when I felt sad I would sit under a tree and enjoy the fresh air because nature always cheered me up.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer into a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I don't go every weekend'), remove repetition, and use linking words such as 'however' or 'so' to improve coherence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. However, I don't have much free time, so I try to visit a park whenever I have a short break; it helps me relax and clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Give a clear main opinion and then two specific, well-phrased reasons using linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'also'). Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement: 'they provide', 'they clean') and avoid awkward phrasing.

Ejemplo: Definitely — I would like to see more parks in my city. For example, they improve air quality and provide safe spaces for exercise, and they are great places for families to walk and for children to play.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct tense and concise phrasing. Give one specific detail about the park and why it matters to you. Improve grammar ('I want to visit', 'near my heart') and clarify the final point about the park's features.

Ejemplo: Yes — I want to visit several parks, but one special park in my hometown is closest to my heart. It is a historical park with memorials dedicated to our gurus, and I would like to see the monuments and learn more about their sacrifices.

× Yes I did. There was a very lovely park nearby my home and I used to go there with my friends to play football.

✓ Yes, I did. There was a lovely park near my home and I used to go there with my friends to play football.

Problems: unnecessary 'very' (word choice/style) and 'nearby my home' is incorrect preposition use. Use 'near my home' instead of 'nearby my home'. Commas improve readability. Suggestion: use 'near' with a place and avoid redundant intensifiers like 'very' before 'lovely'.

× I have been a nature lover since my childhood so whenever I felt danced or upset, I always prefer to go to the park, sit alone and enjoy.

✓ I have been a nature lover since my childhood, so whenever I feel sad or upset, I always prefer to go to the park, sit alone, and enjoy it.

Problems: 'felt danced' is nonsensical; likely intended 'felt sad' or 'felt down' (word choice). 'Since my childhood' requires present perfect 'have been' which is correct; 'feel' should be simple present in habitual contexts. 'Enjoy' needs an object 'it'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use appropriate emotion words (sad/down) and keep tense consistent for habitual actions.

× Yes, I do like going to the parks, although in this busy life I don't have much time to go to the park, but I don't every weekend, whenever I have a little time, I prefer to go to the park to enjoy the beauty of the nature.

✓ Yes, I do like going to parks, but in this busy life I don't have much time to go every weekend. Whenever I have a little time, I prefer to go to the park to enjoy the beauty of nature.

Problems: mixed conjunctions 'although' and 'but' cause redundancy; 'the parks' and 'the nature' articles are incorrect here. 'Don't every weekend' is incomplete. Split into two sentences for clarity and use 'nature' without 'the'. Suggestion: choose one conjunction, correct article use, and break long sentences into shorter ones.

× It helps me to keep calm, relaxed in this busy life, the beauty.

✓ It helps me to stay calm and relaxed in this busy life because of the park's beauty.

Problems: sentence is fragmented and ends with an isolated noun 'the beauty'. Use 'stay calm and relaxed' (idiomatic) and connect reason with 'because' or rephrase to show cause. Suggestion: combine ideas and provide a clear subject for 'beauty'.

× Definitely I would love to see more parks in my city. Parks are the good place to relax to come and it provide a lot more benefits.

✓ Definitely, I would love to see more parks in my city. Parks are a good place to relax, and they provide many benefits.

Problems: 'the good place' should be 'a good place' (article), 'to relax to come' is word order/structure error, 'it provide' is subject-verb agreement and pronoun error (should be 'they provide'), and 'a lot more benefits' is awkward; use 'many benefits'. Suggestion: fix article, use plural pronoun for 'parks', correct verb agreement, and simplify quantifier.

× For example, it clean the air, it's a good place to walk, good place to exercise, also a good place to play with the kids.

✓ For example, they clean the air; they are a good place to walk, a good place to exercise, and a good place to play with the kids.

Problems: 'it clean' is wrong subject and verb form; use plural 'they clean' or 'parks clean'. Maintain parallel structure and include verb 'are' for each description or group them correctly. Suggestion: ensure subject matches plural verb and keep parallel list structure.

× Yes, there are several parks there which I wanted to visit in my near future, but one of them is really near to my heart.

✓ Yes, there are several parks that I want to visit in the near future, but one of them is really close to my heart.

Problems: 'there which I wanted' mixes tense and relative pronoun; use 'that I want to visit' (present desire for future visits). 'Near to my heart' is non-idiomatic; use 'close to my heart'. Also 'near future' needs article 'the' and 'wanted' should be 'want' to match current intention. Suggestion: use correct relative pronoun, match tenses, and choose idiomatic expressions.

× That is a park in my hometown. It's a historical park and it has been built in such a way that it clearly declared the importance and sacrifice of our gurus.

✓ That is a park in my hometown. It's a historical park and it was built in such a way that it clearly demonstrates the importance and sacrifice of our gurus.

Problems: 'has been built' suggests recent passive with present relevance but context implies a past construction, so 'was built' is more natural. 'Declared' is wrong tense/verb choice for ongoing meaning; use 'demonstrates' or 'shows'. Also 'a historical park' is acceptable but consider 'an historic park' depending on pronunciation; keep 'a' as used. Suggestion: choose past simple for completed past actions and a present verb for the park's current function.