Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize ideas: start with a topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear or incomplete phrases and check tense consistency (use past tense when talking about childhood).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. There was a beautiful park near my home where I often played football with friends and explored the plants and birds. Because I’ve always been a nature lover, visiting the park cheered me up when I felt upset.

Sugerencia: Use a clear topic sentence, maintain correct verb forms, and avoid unfinished sentences. Add one concrete example of when you go and why, using linking words (however, therefore, for example).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, although I don’t have much free time because I work full-time. However, whenever I have a day off I go to a nearby park to relax and enjoy the quiet; for example, I often read a book on the grass or take a short walk to clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and use precise descriptions. Use linking words to contrast and give one clear example of a park you would like (location, features, reason). Check subject-verb agreement.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because green space improves quality of life. Although there are already several good parks, I rarely visit them due to my busy schedule. For example, I would love a park by the lake with walking paths and benches, since it would offer peaceful views and a place to exercise.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid vague phrasing and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details about the park (why it matters, its features, when you plan to go). Finish your sentence completely.

Ejemplo: Yes, I plan to visit several parks soon, but one in particular is special to me. It is a newly built historical park in my hometown that showcases restored monuments and old trees; I hope to go next summer to learn more about local history and take photos.

× Yes, I did like to go to park when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I did like to go to the park when I was a child.

Article error (should be 'the park') and idiomatic collocation: 'go to park' is incorrect; use 'go to the park'. Use of 'did like to' is acceptable for emphasis in past, but the main error is missing article. Suggestion: include definite article before 'park' when referring to a specific or familiar place.

× There is a very beautiful park near my home and I used to go there with my friends to play football and explore the nature.

✓ There was a very beautiful park near my home and I used to go there with my friends to play football and explore nature.

Tense issue combined with article usage: The student speaks about childhood (past), so 'There is' should be 'There was'. Also 'explore the nature' is unnatural; use 'explore nature' without the article. Suggestion: match tense to time frame and drop 'the' before uncountable noun 'nature'.

× I'm a nature lover since childhood so whenever even I feel upset during my nature as you.

✓ I've been a nature lover since childhood, so whenever I feel upset I go to nature to calm down.

Incorrect tense and sentence structure: 'I'm a nature lover since childhood' should use present perfect continuous or present perfect ('I've been') to indicate duration from past to present. The clause 'whenever even I feel upset during my nature as you' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely intended meaning is going to nature when upset. Suggestion: use 'I've been a nature lover since childhood' and restructure the second clause to 'whenever I feel upset I go to nature to calm down.'

× Yes, I do like going to park whenever I get a free time as now I'm working full time so I don't get much time to go to the park, but whenever I get a time I go there and enjoy the nature, enjoy the peace.

✓ Yes, I do like going to the park whenever I get free time. Now I'm working full time so I don't have much time to go to the park, but whenever I get time I go there and enjoy nature and the peace.

Multiple article and noun errors: 'going to park' should be 'going to the park'; 'a free time' and 'a time' are incorrect—use 'free time' and 'time' without 'a'; 'enjoy the nature' should be 'enjoy nature' or 'enjoy the peace'. Also sentence run-on; split into clearer sentences. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles and break into shorter sentences for clarity.

× Moreover, whenever I wanna.

✓ Moreover, whenever I want to, I visit the park to relax.

Incomplete sentence (sentence fragment) and informal contraction: 'wanna' is informal and the clause lacks completion. Suggestion: use full form 'want to' and complete the thought with an action, e.g., 'I visit the park to relax.'

× Yes, I do like to see more parks in my city.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city.

Modal verb usage and register: 'do like to see' is grammatically possible but unnatural for expressing desire; 'would like to' is the appropriate polite modal for preference. Suggestion: use 'would like to' when expressing desire or preference for future/possible changes.

× There is there are a lot many good parks in my city, so because of busy schedule I can't go there very often.

✓ There are many good parks in my city, but because of my busy schedule I can't go there very often.

Redundancy and agreement errors: 'There is there are' is redundant; use 'There are'. 'a lot many' is incorrect—use 'many' or 'a lot of'. Also add possessive 'my' before 'busy schedule' and replace 'so because' with 'but because' to contrast. Suggestion: simplify to 'There are many good parks...' and include 'my busy schedule.'

× But there is one park where I wanted to visit in my city.

✓ But there is one park I want to visit in my city.

Tense mismatch: 'wanted to visit' places desire in the past, but the speaker likely means current desire, so use present 'want to visit'. Also 'where I wanted to visit' is redundant; use 'park I want to visit.' Suggestion: use present tense for current desires.

× That park is near the lake and have a very good view of nature there too.

✓ That park is near the lake and has a very good view of nature too.

Subject-verb agreement: 'That park' is singular and requires the verb 'has', not 'have'. Also 'there too' is redundant; move 'too' after 'nature'. Suggestion: match verb form to singular subject and simplify phrase placement.

× Yes, there are uh, many parks where I wanted to go in the near future, but there is one park that is very near to my heart, although I didn't visit there, but still I wanted to visit there.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I want to go to in the near future, but there is one park that is very near to my heart. Although I haven't visited it yet, I still want to visit it.

Tense and preposition errors: 'wanted to go in the near future' mixes past tense with a future time; use present 'want to go'. 'Didn't visit there' is incorrect—use present perfect 'haven't visited it yet' to indicate up to now. Also 'visit there' should be 'visit it' or 'visit there' with preposition 'to'. Suggestion: use present tense for future plans and present perfect for experiences up to now, and use correct pronoun and preposition ('visit it' or 'go there').

× It's a historical park newly built in my hometown and it.

✓ It's a historical park that was newly built in my hometown, and I would like to visit it.

Incomplete sentence and tense: The clause ends abruptly with 'and it.' Also 'newly built' should be linked with past passive 'was newly built'. Suggestion: complete the sentence by adding the intended follow-up, using passive voice for construction ('was newly built') and stating desire clearly.