Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap doğrudan ve samimi, ancak dil bilgisi hataları, anlamsal belirsizlikler ("swallowing my ice cream" kullanımı) ve aşırı uzun tek cümle var. Daha kısa, net bir konu cümlesi kurun, ardından 1–2 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (for example, and, so) kullanarak ifadeleri düzenleyin ve geçmiş zaman fiil formlarını doğru kullanın.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my father often took me there, and I remember swinging on the swings and eating ice cream while laughing a lot.

Sugerencia: Cevap açık ama negatif başlangıç yerine daha doğal bir yapı kullanılabilir. "Instead of" kullanımında nesne eksik ve listeleme dağınık. Cümleleri bölün, bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin ve daha doğal ifadeler tercih edin.

Ejemplo: Not as much. As an adult I have more responsibilities now, such as preparing for exams and managing my relationships, so I rarely have time for leisure activities like going to parks.

Sugerencia: Cevap hem dilbilgisi hem de mantık açısından zayıf: "big issues" ve "about my exams" uyumsuz, zaman ifadeleri hatalı. Soruya genel şehir bakış açısından yanıt verin, gerekirse kişisel durumunuzu kısaca belirtin. Basit, doğru zaman ve çoğul/tekil uyumuna dikkat edin.

Ejemplo: Not really. At the moment I am focused on preparing for important exams, so I don't have time to campaign for more parks in the city. Maybe in the future I would support it.

Sugerencia: Cevap uygun olmayan ifadeler içeriyor (Disneyland bir park türü ama "share my Instagram followers" ve "be center" anlamsal sorunlu ve gösteriş odaklı). Soru gelecekte ziyaret etmek istediğiniz parkları sorduğu için, somut nedenler ve duygular ekleyin. Gereksiz sosyal medya referanslarından kaçının ve dilbilgisine dikkat edin.

Ejemplo: Maybe Disneyland, because it has many attractions and shows that I would enjoy. I think it would be a fun experience and a good chance to relax and take photos.

× Yes, because when I remember about my childhood memories we generally would go to park with my father swallowing my ice cream and swinging and also laugh at everything.

✓ Yes, because when I remember my childhood memories we generally would go to the park with my father, eating ice cream, swinging, and laughing at everything.

The phrase 'remember about' is incorrect; use 'remember' without 'about'. 'Go to park' needs the definite article 'the' for a specific park. 'Swallowing my ice cream' is awkward and incorrect in this context; 'eating ice cream' is natural. Parallel verbs should be in the same form: 'eating, swinging, and laughing'. Use commas to separate activities.

× No, because I'm an adult right now and instead of going park and having fun, I have other responsibilities to do such as my exams and my relationships and my thinking about life.

✓ No, because I'm an adult now, and instead of going to the park and having fun, I have other responsibilities such as my exams, my relationships, and thinking about life.

Use 'now' instead of 'right now' for conciseness is optional; main errors: 'going park' needs 'going to the park'. 'Responsibilities to do' is redundant; 'responsibilities such as' is correct. 'My thinking about life' is unnatural; 'thinking about life' or 'thinking about my life' works better. Use commas to separate items in a list.

× No, I have no desire to see more parks in my city because I have a big issues to solve in my life about my exams.

✓ No, I have no desire to see more parks in my city because I have big issues to solve in my life regarding my exams.

'A big issues' mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'issues'. Remove 'a' and use 'big issues' or change to singular 'a big issue'. 'About my exams' is better expressed as 'regarding my exams' or 'related to my exams'.

× I every day wake up and then continue my day with practicing.

✓ Every day I wake up and then continue my day by practicing.

Word order: 'Every day I wake up' is the natural placement. 'With practicing' is incorrect; use 'by practicing' to indicate the method. Also prefer 'practice' as a verb: 'continue my day by practicing'.

× Maybe I can say Disneyland because Disneyland is well known and also including so much things.

✓ Maybe I would say Disneyland because Disneyland is well known and includes so many things.

'Well known' should be hyphenated in compound modifier before noun, but as predicate 'well known' is acceptable; more importantly 'including so much things' is incorrect: 'includes so many things' is grammatically correct ('much' with uncountable, 'many' with countable plural 'things'). Also 'Maybe I can say' -> 'Maybe I would say' or 'Maybe I would choose' is more natural.

× And if I go there, I would share my Instagram followers and I can center.

✓ If I go there, I would share it with my Instagram followers, and I could be the center of attention.

'Share my Instagram followers' is incorrect: you share content with followers, not followers themselves. 'I can center' is incomplete; correct phrase is 'be the center of attention' or 'be the center'. Use consistent modal verbs: 'would' and 'could' depending on certainty; here 'would' or 'could' is fine. Combine into a single coherent sentence.

× I can be center of the attention.

✓ I can be the center of attention.

Include the definite article 'the' and use the idiomatic phrase 'center of attention' (not 'the attention').