Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with grammar and word choice; give one clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using correct tense and singular/plural forms. Avoid redundancy and keep answer under five sentences. For example, correct minor errors (“a very good childhood memories” → “very good childhood memories”) and be precise about activities and routine.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks with my family when I was a child. We often ate freshly cooked ramen by the riverside and played ball games on the grass. Those outings are some of my fondest childhood memories because we spent quality time together and I felt very relaxed.

Sugerencia: Clarify who you go with and use correct grammar and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples and a linking phrase. Correct awkward phrases (“rather than families”, “After be I became an adult”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy visiting parks, but now I go with either my family or close friends. For example, after I became an adult, my best friend and I tried kayaking and boating at the Han River Park, which was exciting and refreshing.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more concise and correct phrase usage. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct article and verb forms (“provide” → “provides”, “by Riverside” → “by the riverside”). Give a short reason why you want to visit.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer peaceful places to relax. For instance, I’ve heard that Yoyo Park provides beautiful riverside scenery, so I’d like to visit it to take photos and unwind.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and correct grammar and articles. Use one clear topic sentence and then a specific supporting detail with a linking word. Fix phrases like “in an Australia” and remove repeated words (“again” twice).

Ejemplo: If I have the chance to return to Melbourne, I would love to visit Melbourne National Park with my family. I went there while I was an exchange student in Australia, and I want to show them the scenic trails and lookouts I enjoyed.

× We used to have some freshly cooked ramen by the Riverside and also played some games on the grass.

✓ We used to have some freshly cooked ramen by the riverside and also play some games on the grass.

The sentence mixes 'used to' with a past simple verb 'played'. After 'used to' you should use the base form of the verb for parallel actions (used to have ... and play). Use 'play' to maintain parallel structure and correct past habitual meaning.

× It was a very good childhood memories.

✓ They were very good childhood memories.

The noun 'memories' is plural so it needs the plural pronoun and verb. 'It was' is singular; change to 'They were' to agree with plural 'memories'. Alternatively, make 'memory' singular: 'It was a very good childhood memory.'

× I still love going to parks with my family rather than families.

✓ I still love going to parks with my family rather than alone.

'Rather than families' is incorrect because 'families' does not contrast logically with 'my family'. Use a contrasting idea such as 'alone' or 'with friends'. Adjust the pronoun/phrase to express the intended contrast.

× After be I became an adult, I have one best friend who loves to try various outdoor activities, so we tried kayaking and boating at the Han River Parks together.

✓ After I became an adult, I made a best friend who loves to try various outdoor activities, so we tried kayaking and boating together at the Han River Park.

'After be I became an adult' is ungrammatical; correct word order is 'After I became an adult'. Use 'made a best friend' or 'I have a best friend' depending on meaning; past sequence here fits 'I made a best friend'. 'Han River Parks' is odd—use singular 'Han River Park' if referring to one park. Also move 'together' to natural position and maintain consistent tense (past simple 'tried').

× Yes, I would welcome the chance to visit some parks that I've never visited before around my city especially I heard Yoyo Park provide a very good scenery by Riverside, so I want to see it myself.

✓ Yes, I would welcome the chance to visit parks in my city that I have never seen before. I have heard Yoyo Park offers very nice riverside scenery, so I want to see it myself.

Split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'have never seen before' or 'have never visited before' for present perfect. 'Provide a very good scenery by Riverside' is incorrect: 'offers very nice riverside scenery' is natural. 'Would welcome' is fine as modal; ensure verb forms match.

× If I have the chance to revisit Melbourne again, I would love to go to the Melbourne National Park again with my family.

✓ If I have the chance to revisit Melbourne, I would love to go to Melbourne National Park with my family.

Use concise phrasing: 'revisit Melbourne again' is redundant (revisit already implies again), and repeating 'again' is unnecessary. Conditional form 'If I have the chance' + 'I would love' is acceptable for hypothetical future; ensure proper noun usage 'Melbourne National Park' without 'the' is typical but 'the' can be used depending on the park's official name.

× Umm, I used to go there when I was an exchange student in an Australia and I want to show some scenery.

✓ I used to go there when I was an exchange student in Australia, and I wanted to see the scenery again.

Do not use 'an' before 'Australia' (a country name does not take an article). Maintain tense consistency: if talking about past habit 'used to go' and past state 'I was', then follow-up should reflect past intention or current desire. 'I want to show some scenery' is unclear—likely meant to see the scenery again or show it to my family. Adjust to clear meaning and proper verb tense.