Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 문법과 표현 수정이 필요합니다. 현재 문장은 시제·전치사·어순 오류가 있으며, 이유 설명이 모호합니다. 자연스럽게 말하려면 주제문을 간단히 말한 뒤, 이유를 연결어(so, because, as 등)로 명확하게 설명하세요. 예문 수는 1~3문장으로 제한하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

Ejemplo: I didn’t like going to parks when I was a child because I preferred staying at home. Also, it was usually very sunny and uncomfortable to be outside, so I avoided parks.

Sugerencia: 문법(조동사, 부정어, 빈도표현)과 어휘 선택(‘cleaner air’ 문맥) 수정이 필요합니다. 긍정과 부정이 혼재되어 의미가 혼란스럽습니다. 주제문을 명확히 하고 연결어(because, but, however)로 이유와 예외를 간결하게 덧붙이세요.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy going to parks now because the air is cleaner and there are many trees. However, I rarely visit them due to my heavy workload and school projects.

Sugerencia: 문장 구조가 단순 반복되고 어색한 동사 형태가 있습니다. 질문에 직접 답한 후 이유나 구체적 기대를 덧붙여 답변을 풍부하게 하세요. 연결어(and, because, so)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 연결하면 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide places for people to relax and exercise.

Sugerencia: 문법(소유격, 동사 형태, 부정문)과 어휘(‘perks’→parks) 오류가 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 특정한 장소를 하나 언급하고 이유나 계획(when/how)으로 구체화하세요. 문장은 1~3개로 간결하게 유지하세요.

Ejemplo: Yes. There is a beautiful park near my home that I haven’t visited yet, so I plan to go there next weekend to relax and take photos.

× I didn't like going to parks as I was a child because I preferred from staying at home and it is very sunny day and it is uncomfortable to be outside.

✓ I didn't like going to parks when I was a child because I preferred staying at home; it was very sunny and uncomfortable to be outside.

The sentence has several past-tense and phrasing errors. Use 'when I was a child' instead of 'as I was a child' for natural timing. 'Preferred from staying' is incorrect; use 'preferred staying' or 'preferred to stay'. 'It is very sunny day' should be past tense and include an article: 'it was very sunny'. Combine clauses with a semicolon or conjunction and use 'uncomfortable to be outside' in past tense context. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent (past) and use correct verb patterns (prefer + -ing).

× Yes, I really I like to going to parks because it is very cleaner air and there are many trees. But I don't visit the parks rarely because I have a more projects and schooling.

✓ Yes, I really like going to parks because the air is much cleaner and there are many trees. But I don't visit the parks often because I have many projects and am studying.

Errors include verb form and adverb use. Remove the extra 'I'. Use 'like going' not 'like to going'. 'It is very cleaner air' should be 'the air is much cleaner' (comparative + article). 'Don't visit the parks rarely' is a double negative; use 'don't visit ... often' or 'rarely visit'. 'I have a more projects and schooling' should be 'I have many projects and am studying' to convey ongoing education; use correct quantifier 'many' and the progressive or present continuous for studying. Maintain present tense for current habits. Suggestion: avoid double negatives, correct verb forms and article use.

× Yes, I like to traveling and I like to park too and I want to see more parks in our city.

✓ Yes, I like traveling and I like parks too, and I want to see more parks in our city.

Use of 'to traveling' is incorrect; after 'like' you can use the gerund 'traveling' or the infinitive 'to travel' but not 'to traveling'. 'I like to park' is unclear; use 'I like parks' to express preference. Combine clauses with commas. Suggestion: choose correct verb pattern (like + -ing or like + to + base verb) and use plural nouns for general preferences.

× Yes my home is have very beautiful parks and I didn't go there anytime so I want to go my near perks as I was ordered.

✓ Yes, near my home there are very beautiful parks, but I haven't gone there yet, so I want to visit the nearby parks when I get the chance.

'My home is have' mixes verbs; use 'there are' for existence/placement. 'Didn't go there anytime' is incorrect; use present perfect 'haven't gone there yet' to indicate up to now. 'Go my near perks' contains wrong word choice and order: 'nearby parks' is correct. 'As I was ordered' is unclear and likely wrong phrasing; use 'when I get the chance' or 'sometime in the future'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage. Suggestion: use 'there are' for locations, present perfect for actions up to now, correct vocabulary ('parks') and natural time expressions.