Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần nói rõ hơn và sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản. Tránh lặp từ và đưa câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ. Chú ý thì động từ và trật tự từ (ví dụ: 'When I was a child, I liked going to parks because...').

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I liked going to parks because they made me feel both excited and relaxed. For example, I enjoyed playing on the swings and exploring the trees with my friends.

Sugerencia: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và giải thích lý do cụ thể. Tránh từ mâu thuẫn (ví dụ 'stressed' và 'funny') và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Nên nói 'walking' thay vì 'wake walking' và giải thích cảm giác tiêu cực/ tích cực rõ ràng.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks when I feel stressed because walking there helps me relax and clear my mind. For instance, a 20-minute walk among trees usually lifts my mood and reduces my anxiety.

Sugerencia: Cần cấu trúc rõ ràng: bắt đầu với quan điểm của bạn, rồi nêu lý do và ví dụ. Tránh câu bị ngắt quãng và lặp từ. Dùng từ đúng (e.g. 'parks are popular', 'events are organized').

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks because they are popular and help reduce stress for many people. For example, new parks could host community events like outdoor concerts and weekend markets that attract families.

Sugerencia: Cần nêu rõ địa điểm và lý do một cách trôi chảy, sửa đại từ và từ vựng ('it is famous for its extreme sports', 'fun' thay vì 'funny'). Dùng câu chủ đề và bổ sung một chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động bạn muốn thử.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit Halong Park in the future because it is famous for its extreme sports and beautiful scenery. I plan to try rock climbing there, which sounds exciting and challenging.

× Just when I was I, I like went to the went to the park where make me feel really stressed and happy.

✓ When I was a child, I liked going to the park because it made me feel both relaxed and happy.

This sentence has multiple structural and tense issues: incorrect word order, redundant words, wrong tense forms, and incorrect verb use. Use past simple for childhood habits (liked, made). Use 'a child' to specify age period. Replace 'like went to the went to' with 'liked going to' and 'where make me feel' with 'because it made me feel'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into clear subject + past-tense verb + reason, e.g. 'When I was a child, I liked going to the park because it made me feel relaxed and happy.'

× Yes, I often go to the park when I feel stressed because wake walking can make me feel really stressed and funny.

✓ Yes, I often go to the park when I feel stressed because walking can make me feel less stressed and amused.

The phrase 'wake walking' is incorrect; likely meant 'walking'. The sentence mixes meanings: 'make me feel really stressed and funny' is contradictory. Use present simple for habits (I often go, I feel). Use 'walking can make me feel less stressed and amused' or 'cheerful' to convey positive effect. Suggestion: use correct gerund 'walking' and choose appropriate adjectives ('relaxed', 'cheerful').

× Just in my city, park is very famous.

✓ In my city, the park is very famous.

Missing definite article 'the' before a noun when referencing a known park. Use 'the park' or 'parks' depending on meaning. Also 'Just in my city' is unnecessary; 'In my city' is sufficient. Suggestion: include appropriate articles: 'the park' for a specific park, or 'parks are' for general statement.

× Many people go to park for reduced stress or entertainment.

✓ Many people go to the park to reduce stress or for entertainment.

Missing article 'the' and incorrect phrase 'for reduced stress'. Use infinitive 'to reduce stress' or 'to relieve stress'. Also add 'for' before 'entertainment'. Suggestion: 'go to the park to reduce stress or for entertainment.'

× In addition, many people. Create create every more event.

✓ In addition, many people organize more events frequently.

Fragmented sentence and repeated words 'Create create every more event' are incorrect. Use a complete clause with subject and verb: 'many people organize more events' and add adverb 'frequently' or 'every year' as needed. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure subject-verb-object order.

× Yes, in the future I will go to Halong Park because he here is famous about.

✓ Yes, in the future I will go to Halong Park because it is famous here.

Incorrect pronoun 'he' used for a park; use 'it' for inanimate objects. 'is famous about' is ungrammatical; use 'is famous' or 'is known for' followed by the reason (e.g. 'is known for its extreme spots'). Suggestion: use 'it is famous' or 'it is known for its ...'. Also keep future tense 'I will go' which is appropriate.

× Extreme spot and it's very funny.

✓ It has extreme attractions and is a lot of fun.

'Extreme spot' is unidiomatic; use 'extreme attractions' or 'extreme sports'. 'It's very funny' is wrong contextually—'funny' means humorous; use 'fun' or 'exciting'. Suggestion: choose appropriate nouns/adjectives: 'extreme sports' and 'fun' or 'exciting'.