Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct with a clear topic sentence, reduce filler phrases and correct grammar (tense and agreement). Add one specific detail or brief reason and use a linking word to make it coherent. Limit your answer to 2–3 concise sentences.

Ejemplo: Not really. When I was a child I lived in a high-rise building and there were many children in the block, so I usually played at their apartments instead of going to parks.

Sugerencia: Start with a clear direct answer, avoid repetition and filler (e.g., "umm"). Fix grammar (subject–verb agreement) and combine sentences with a linking word. Add a brief specific example of what you enjoy in parks.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I find parks very relaxing because the green space and fresh air help me unwind, and for example I often sit by a pond to read or take a short walk to clear my mind.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and avoid fillers. Use one or two supporting reasons with specific details and a linking word. Correct minor grammar and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Ejemplo: Yes. Because my city is very busy and dominated by skyscrapers, we have few green spaces, so more parks would give residents places to relax and exercise, for instance weekend family picnics or morning jogs.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer, remove awkward phrasing, and provide one or two specific activities you plan to do there. Use a linking word to connect idea and keep sentences natural and concise.

Ejemplo: Yes. I want to go to the park near our building because it has many recreational facilities, and for example I plan to use the outdoor gym and try the walking trail with my friends.

× there are a lot of children there that I can play with

✓ there were a lot of children there whom I could play with

Original uses present 'are' and 'can' while the context is past; also 'that' is acceptable but 'whom' is more formal for people as objects. Change to past tense 'were' and 'could' for consistency. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with surrounding past narrative and use appropriate relative pronoun for clarity.

× so most of the time I go to their house to play with them

✓ so most of the time I went to their houses to play with them

The speaker is describing past habitual action; use past tense 'went' not present 'go'. Also 'their house' implies one house; better 'their houses' if referring to several different friends. Suggestion: use past habitual form to match 'when I was a child I used to live'.

× As I grew older and older I realized how parks makes people more relaxed and how others are really into going to parks.

✓ As I grew older I realized how parks make people more relaxed and how others are really into going to parks.

Subject 'parks' is plural, so verb should be 'make' not 'makes'. Also 'grew older and older' is redundant; 'grew older' is sufficient. Keep past tense 'realized' as in original. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× you can connect to the nature

✓ you can connect with nature

English commonly uses 'connect with' or 'connect to' without 'the' when speaking about nature in general. 'the nature' is incorrect here. Suggestion: use 'connect with nature' for natural, idiomatic phrasing.

× as the city where I live in right now is a very bustling city

✓ as the city where I live right now is very bustling

Redundant preposition 'in' after 'where' is unnecessary ('where I live' already contains location). Also avoid repeating 'city'. Suggestion: remove extra 'in' and repetition for concise phrasing.

× there are many high umm skyscrapers which is why there are umm only a few parks here

✓ there are many tall skyscrapers, which is why there are only a few parks here

Subject 'skyscrapers' is plural so the relative clause should use 'are' or be rephrased; original used 'is' which is incorrect. Also 'high' is acceptable but 'tall' is more natural with 'skyscrapers'. Suggestion: ensure agreement between plural noun and verb in relative clause and choose idiomatic adjective.

× so that people can enjoy the nature

✓ so that people can enjoy nature

Same issue as before: 'the nature' is not idiomatic when referring to nature generally. Drop the article. Suggestion: use 'enjoy nature' or 'enjoy the natural surroundings' if specific.

× I would be interested to go to a park near our home down downstairs because it is full of recreational activities

✓ I would be interested in going to the park downstairs near our home because it is full of recreational activities

After 'interested' the correct construction is 'interested in doing' not 'interested to do'. Also 'home down downstairs' is redundant and awkward; 'the park downstairs near our home' is clearer. Use singular 'the park' if referring to a specific nearby park. Suggestion: use 'interested in going' and simplify location phrase.

× and there are many exercises and activities that you can enjoy doing there

✓ and there are many exercise areas and activities that you can enjoy there

'many exercises' sounds like a list of exercises; 'exercise areas' or 'fitness facilities' fits better for a park. Also 'enjoy doing there' is wordy; 'enjoy there' or 'enjoy doing' is acceptable but simpler to say 'activities that you can enjoy there'. Suggestion: choose appropriate noun collocations and simplify phrasing.