Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Correct grammar, reduce redundancy and tighten phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Fix verb forms and articles (e.g., "I'd love to" → "I loved" or "I used to love").

Ejemplo: I used to love going to parks as a child. I spent many afternoons there with my friends and siblings, eating snacks and playing on the swings, which made those times very memorable.

Sugerencia: Good direct response and clear reasons. Make sentences more natural: use concise phrasing, correct word order, and simpler expressions (e.g., "I don't go to parks much now"; "I have a busy schedule and household chores"). Use one linking word for coherence.

Ejemplo: I don't go to parks much now because I have a busy schedule and many household chores. Also, there aren't any parks near my home, so it feels inconvenient to travel just to relax outdoors.

Sugerencia: Answer is positive but has grammar and phrasing problems. Avoid filler words like "Or" and awkward structures. State your opinion clearly, give one specific reason, and use correct tense and collocation (e.g., "There is high demand," "the government should/has planned").

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there is a high demand from residents for outdoor spaces. I hope the local government will plan new park projects to meet this need.

Sugerencia: Good content and enthusiasm. Make the response more concise and natural: use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitive adverbs (definitely) and adjectives (beautiful, well known) unless specific. Add a brief detail about which park or an activity you plan to do.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit some famous parks in our city with my family, especially my two young daughters. For example, I plan to take them to the central park so they can try the playground and have a picnic together.

× Definitely I'd love to going to parks.

✓ Definitely I'd love to go to parks.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the base form of a verb (infinitive without 'to' after 'would') or the full infinitive 'to go' after 'I'd love'. 'Going' is a gerund and creates an incorrect structure here. Use 'I'd love to go to parks' to be grammatically correct and natural. Suggestion: Use 'I'd love to go' or 'I loved going' depending on tense.

× As a child I spent many afternoons and evenings there with my friend and siblings while eating snacks and playing on the swings, which made those days really enjoyable and memorable for me.

✓ As a child I spent many afternoons and evenings there with my friends and siblings, eating snacks and playing on the swings, which made those days really enjoyable and memorable for me.

When referring to more than one companion, use the plural 'friends' rather than 'friend'. Also the phrase 'while eating snacks and playing on the swings' is wordy; using a participle clause 'eating snacks and playing on the swings' is more natural. Suggestion: Use plural 'friends' if you mean multiple friends.

× To be honest, I don't go to parks much anymore because I have a very busy routine and household chores which I have to perform on my time.

✓ To be honest, I don't go to parks much anymore because I have a very busy routine and household chores which I have to do in my own time.

The verb 'perform' is formal and unusual with 'household chores'; 'do' is more natural. The phrase 'on my time' is incorrect; the idiomatic expression is 'in my own time' or 'in my free time'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations: 'do household chores in my free time'.

× Also, there are not any parks near my home so it feels inconvenient to travel just to relax outdoors.

✓ Also, there are no parks near my home, so it feels inconvenient to travel just to relax outdoors.

The phrase 'there are not any parks' is grammatically understandable but non-idiomatic; 'there are no parks' is preferred. Also a comma is needed before 'so' when joining two independent clauses. Suggestion: Use 'there are no parks near my home' and include the comma.

× Or without any doubt, I can see that there must be more parks in our city because the demand of the people is about the park is really high.

✓ Without any doubt, I think there should be more parks in our city because the demand for parks is really high.

Beginning with 'Or' is incorrect here; use 'Without any doubt' or 'Without a doubt'. 'I can see that there must be' is wordy; 'I think there should be' is more natural. 'The demand of the people is about the park' is incorrect phraseology; use 'the demand for parks'. Suggestion: Simplify the clause and use correct preposition 'for' with 'demand'.

× So government is going to align new projects in our city for parks.

✓ So the government is going to launch new park projects in our city.

'So government' needs the definite article 'the government'. 'Align new projects' is incorrect collocation; 'launch new projects' or 'implement new projects' is appropriate. Also specify 'park projects' or 'parks' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'the government is going to launch/implement new park projects'.

× There are some famous and well known parks in our city.

✓ There are some famous and well-known parks in our city.

'Well known' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun: 'well-known'. Suggestion: Use hyphenated compound adjectives: 'well-known parks'.

× I really want to go and enjoy with my family, especially with my two beautiful young daughters.

✓ I really want to go and enjoy it with my family, especially my two young daughters.

The verb 'enjoy' usually takes an object; here 'enjoy it' or 'enjoy the park' clarifies the object. 'With' before 'my two beautiful young daughters' is redundant after 'especially'; also 'beautiful' is unnecessary in this context. Suggestion: Use 'enjoy it with my family, especially my two young daughters.'

× They are really enthusiastic to play in the park, so I definitely want to go there.

✓ They are really enthusiastic about playing in the park, so I definitely want to go there.

The adjective 'enthusiastic' is followed by the preposition 'about' and then a gerund ('playing'), not an infinitive 'to play'. Suggestion: Use 'enthusiastic about doing something' or 'eager to do something'.