Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details without repetition. Avoid filler words (uh) and repetitive adjectives. Use linking words like "because" or "and" correctly and provide a brief example to make the answer vivid.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because they were fun places to play with my friends and family. For example, we used to play hide-and-seek among the trees and sit on benches to admire the flowers, which made those afternoons memorable.

Sugerencia: Make your sentences grammatically correct and clearer. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific reason and an example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "modern" or "well-designed" instead of "fashionable parts") and correct verb forms.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and I like seeing new flowers. For example, modern urban parks in my city have comfortable seating and well-designed walking paths, which make them pleasant places to relax.

Sugerencia: Be clear and avoid contradictory sentences. Give one clear opinion with a brief reason, and if you accept more parks, explain why. Remove hesitations and use linking words like "however" or "although" to contrast ideas.

Ejemplo: I think my city already has many good parks, so we have enough for now. However, I would welcome new parks in growing neighborhoods because they provide green space for residents and encourage outdoor activities.

Sugerencia: Be accurate and specific. Name the place correctly (Times Square is not a park; perhaps you mean Central Park) and give a clear reason why you want to visit. Avoid vague phrases like "I like to export." Use one or two supporting details and a linking word like "because."

Ejemplo: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it is a famous urban park in the city center with lakes, walking trails, and cultural events. For example, I want to see the Bow Bridge and take a relaxing boat ride on the lake.

× Yes, I did because it's a really fun place, really look good looking place when you can play with your friends, uh, play with family to see some flowers and enjoy time.

✓ Yes, I did because it was a really fun place; it looked very nice when you could play with your friends, spend time with family, see flowers, and enjoy yourself.

The student used awkward adjective/adverb combinations and incorrect verb forms for past description. 'It's' should match past context 'I did' so use 'it was'. 'Look good looking' is incorrect; use 'looked very nice'. Also list actions parallelly with correct verbs ('play', 'spend', 'see', 'enjoy yourself'). Improve by choosing appropriate adjective/adverb forms and keeping tense consistent.

× Of course I do, I really enjoy the time going to parks and see some new flowers.

✓ Of course I do; I really enjoy going to parks and seeing new flowers.

The sentence mixes 'enjoy' with an incorrect structure 'enjoy the time going'. With 'enjoy' use a gerund: 'enjoy going' and parallel verbs must be in gerund form: 'seeing'. Remove unnecessary 'the time'. Improve by using verb + -ing after 'enjoy' and keeping parallel forms.

× Also I think a new fashionable parts that really suits and have really comfortable place, for example in a big city is a really good place.

✓ Also I think new, fashionable parks that really suit people and have comfortable areas, for example those in a big city, are very good.

Multiple issues: wrong plural/singular forms and adjective placement. 'parts' should be 'parks'; 'a new fashionable parts' is incorrect article and number. 'Suits' should agree with plural 'parks' so use 'suit'. 'Have really comfortable place' should be 'have comfortable areas'. Keep consistent plural nouns and correct adjective order ('new, fashionable parks').

× I think my city has a lot of good parks, so I think in this time, uh, it's enough.

✓ I think my city has a lot of good parks, so I think for now it's enough.

'In this time' is awkward and unidiomatic; use 'for now'. The rest is fine. Improve by using natural time expressions.

× But I also think every year they build, uh, there became more, more parks and they really like to explore it.

✓ But I also think that every year they build more parks, and people really like to explore them.

Multiple verb/form errors: 'there became' is past and ungrammatical here; use 'they build more parks' or 'more parks are built'. 'They really like to explore it' uses wrong pronoun for 'parks' (plural) so use 'them'. Ensure subject clarity: 'people' instead of ambiguous 'they'. Use consistent tense for recurring events (present simple).

× Yes, I do. I heard a lot about Times Square, New York Park.

✓ Yes, I do. I have heard a lot about Times Square and New York parks.

'I heard a lot about' is acceptable but present perfect 'I have heard' is more natural when referring to general knowledge. Also 'Times Square, New York Park' is incorrect naming; refer to 'Times Square and New York parks' or 'Central Park, New York'. Use correct place names and pluralization as needed.

× I think it's the most popular park in the world because it's located in the center in a big city center and I like to export.

✓ I think it's one of the most popular parks in the world because it's located in the center of a big city, and I would like to visit it.

Several problems: 'the most popular park' is too absolute; say 'one of the most popular parks' unless certain. 'Located in the center in a big city center' is repetitive; use 'located in the center of a big city'. 'I like to export' is incorrect; likely meant 'explore' or 'visit'. Use 'would like to visit' or 'would like to explore'. Ensure clear sentence structure and appropriate verb choice.