Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and use plural/singular consistently. Provide one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, replace hesitations (‘uh’) with a short pause, change “going to park” to “going to parks,” and correct verb agreement (“there are a lot of parks that are connected”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I grew up surrounded by green spaces in my neighborhood. For example, there was a large park with walking paths and a small lake, so I often went there to play and explore nature.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence and clarify plans using correct tense and fewer repetitions. Use a linking word to connect the reason. For instance, say you still enjoy parks and explain why – perhaps for exercise or relaxation – and mention future planning in correct future tense.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are peaceful and good for exercise. When I plan to move to another area, I will definitely consider how many parks are nearby so I can maintain that lifestyle.

Sugerencia: Correct word choice and sentence structure: use ‘city’ instead of ‘stadium’, fix articles and agreement, and finish the idea. Provide a clear reason and one specific effect. Avoid vague phrasing like ‘it's sometimes feels a little bit sad.’

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few green spaces available. As a result, residents have limited places to relax or exercise, which makes the urban area feel crowded and less healthy.

Sugerencia: Avoid confusion and incorrect words (e.g., ‘parties’ → ‘parks’). Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two specific examples (cities or countries), and explain why you want to visit them. Use correct plural and prepositions (‘from other countries’).

Ejemplo: Yes, there are several parks I want to visit in the future, such as Hyde Park in London and Central Park in New York. I want to see them because they are famous, large urban parks with many attractions and a unique atmosphere.

× Yes, I liked, uh, going to park as a child because I really like, love nature and in my neighborhood there are a lot of parks that is really connected with nature and have a cool urbanistic area at the same time.

✓ Yes, I liked, uh, going to parks as a child because I really love nature, and in my neighborhood there are a lot of parks that are really connected with nature and have a cool urban design at the same time.

Errors: 'going to park' should be 'going to parks' (article/plural issue) and 'that is really connected' should be 'that are really connected' (subject-verb agreement). Suggestions: Use plural 'parks' when speaking generally; ensure verb agrees with plural subject 'parks' by using 'are'. Remove redundant words ('like, love' -> keep 'love'). Use clearer noun 'urban design' instead of 'urbanistic area.'

× Yes, of course I do. You like going to parks right now And, uh, when I'm planning, when I will plan to move to another, uh, place, I will definitely consider the parks nearby.

✓ Yes, of course I do. I like going to parks right now, and when I plan to move to another place, I will definitely consider the parks nearby.

Errors: 'You like' is incorrect pronoun and tense for talking about self; should be 'I like' (pronoun error). 'When I'm planning, when I will plan' is redundant and incorrect: use simple present 'when I plan' to refer to a future time clause. Suggestions: Use 'I' for self-reference and use 'when I plan' for planned future events; remove filler words and extra commas.

× Of course I would like to see more parks in my stadium because I think they have such a small amount of parks in our city and it's sometimes feels a little bit sad that you can just visit park while you are in the.

✓ Of course I would like to see more parks in my city because I think we have so few parks in our city, and sometimes it feels a little sad that you can just visit a park while you are here.

Errors: 'in my stadium' wrong preposition/noun; likely 'in my city'. 'They have such a small amount of parks' incorrect pronoun and quantifier: use 'we have so few parks' or 'there are so few parks'. 'it's sometimes feels' has extra 'it's' causing verb error. 'visit park while you are in the.' is incomplete and missing article: 'visit a park while you are here.' Suggestions: Use correct place noun, use 'few' for countable nouns, ensure subject-verb agreement and complete the clause.

× Uh, yes, I have some parties that I want to visit in the future. I don't have like, I don't know the names of the parks because, uh, these parks that I want to, that I want to visit is from another countries and I don't know how to say it in, in other language.

✓ Uh, yes, I have some parks that I want to visit in the future. I don't know the names of the parks because these parks that I want to visit are in other countries, and I don't know how to say them in other languages.

Errors: 'some parties' is wrong word choice; should be 'some parks'. 'these parks ... is from another countries' has subject-verb agreement and article errors: use plural verb 'are' and 'other countries' without 'another'. 'in, in other language' should be 'in other languages' and 'say them' to refer to names. Suggestions: Use correct nouns, ensure verb agrees with plural subject, use plural 'languages' when referring generally, and use 'them' to refer back to 'names'.