Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and repeating words. Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. For coherence, use a linking phrase to add a detail (e.g., “for example” or “often”).

Ejemplo: Yes. I loved going to parks with my family when I was a child. For example, we visited every weekend and I often played on the swings and slides with my friends, which made me feel happy and excited when we went home.

Sugerencia: Use correct grammar and clearer sentence structure: say ‘I still like going to parks’ and avoid unnecessary words. Limit to one or two supporting details and use linking words (e.g., ‘nowadays’ or ‘usually’). Be specific about activities and frequency but avoid contradictions (every day may be unrealistic—state truthfully).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Nowadays I usually take my children there twice a week, and they play with their friends on the swings and slides while I relax and watch them.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler sounds. Use plural/singular correctly (parks are/park is). Give one or two concrete benefits (e.g., green space, exercise, community events).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would provide green space for exercise and relaxation, and they give children safe places to play. For example, new small parks near housing areas would encourage families to spend time outdoors on weekends.

Sugerencia: Be specific about places and reasons, and use correct grammar. If naming attractions, place them clearly (e.g., ‘Waterworld, Ferrari World’). Explain why you want to visit one or two places using linking words (e.g., ‘because’ or ‘for example’). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. In the future I would like to visit Waterworld and Ferrari World because they have exciting rides and activities for families. I also hope to visit a park in my hometown to show my children the place I remember from my childhood.

× Yes, I like going to the park, uh, and with my family every week and uh, I went to the park and play with my friend and, and see so and slide, uh, and when return home, I feel very happy and excited.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park with my family every week. I went to the park and played with my friends, went on the seesaw and slide, and when I returned home I felt very happy and excited.

The student mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about childhood (past), so actions should be in the past tense (liked, went, played, returned, felt). Also fix verb forms for past (play -> played) and plural for friend (friend -> friends) to match context. Suggestions: use past simple consistently for past habits ('I liked', 'I went', 'I played').

× Yes, I'm still like to go to the park with my kids Every day we go to the park and my kids play uh, in with the uh, her friend and umm, Billy with my kids.

✓ Yes, I still like to go to the park with my kids. Every day we go to the park and my kids play with their friends, and they enjoy playing together.

The student uses incorrect verb forms and pronouns. 'I'm still like' should be 'I still like' (present simple). 'Her friend' is wrong pronoun; use 'their friends' to agree with 'my kids' plural. Remove filler words and unclear phrase 'Billy with my kids'. Suggestions: use present simple for habitual actions ('I still like', 'we go', 'my kids play') and ensure pronoun agreement ('their').

× Yes, I like, uh, see more parks in, in my city because uh, park is very comfortable place and children, uh, love go to the park. Uh, and I love uh, every weekend, uh, go with my family to the park and uh, play in the park and park make me relax.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because the park is a very comfortable place and children love to go to the park. I like to go with my family every weekend to play in the park because the park helps me relax.

Errors with articles and infinitive forms. Use 'the park' or 'a very comfortable place' for correct article usage. 'Love go' needs 'love to go'. Use 'park make me relax' -> 'the park helps me relax' or 'the park makes me feel relaxed'. Also use conditional/modal 'would like' to express preference. Suggestions: include correct articles ('the', 'a'), use 'to' with verbs after 'love' when appropriate (love to go), and choose a correct verb for effect ('helps me relax').

× Yes, they are many park. I want to go in the future like I want to go to the yes water world and the Ferrari world and I want to go to the park in my country. Uh, because I remember it, my uh child.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I want to visit in the future, such as Water World and Ferrari World, and I also want to visit parks in my country because I remember them from my childhood.

'They are many park' has wrong subject pronoun and singular/plural form; correct structure is 'there are many parks'. Use plural 'parks' to match 'many'. 'Water World' and 'Ferrari World' are proper nouns and should be named clearly. 'I remember it, my child' is unclear; intended meaning is remembering parks from childhood, so use 'I remember them from my childhood.' Suggestions: use 'there is/there are' correctly for existence and match singular/plural, and replace unclear pronouns with explicit nouns ('them', 'my childhood').