Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct minor vocabulary/grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief specific supporting details, using linking words. Avoid listing too many activities without connectors and correct words (e.g., 'tag' not 'tech').

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my friends and I often played tag and hide-and-seek, and we spent hours on the swings and climbing frames. Those carefree afternoons created some of my fondest childhood memories.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and cohesion: use correct tense and combine ideas with linking words. Provide one clear topic sentence, then specific detail about routine and effect, using connectors like 'so' or 'which'. Avoid repetition ('feel fresh' twice).

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park. I walk there every day and usually complete about 10,000 steps, which is excellent exercise and leaves me feeling energetic. Moreover, the peaceful scenery helps me relax after work.

Sugerencia: Be precise and avoid vague concluding sentences. Use linking words to show reason and give one concrete example with benefit. Replace vague phrase 'it is more important for people' with a clear outcome.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like more parks because they improve air quality and provide safe spaces for exercise. For instance, a new park with a paved walking path and benches would benefit families and older residents by encouraging daily walks and social interaction.

Sugerencia: Correct grammar and sentence structure, be specific about which park and plans. Use linking words and avoid sentence fragments. Mention one or two activities and time frame clearly.

Ejemplo: Yes — I hope to visit a large national park with mountains and forests next year. I want to go because it is peaceful, and I enjoy hiking and taking photographs of wildlife and landscapes, so I plan to spend several days exploring the trails.

× I used to play games with my friends like tech and hide and seek, jumping, swing and so many activities.

✓ I used to play games with my friends like tag and hide-and-seek, jump on swings, and do many other activities.

The original mixes gerund forms and nouns incorrectly. 'jumping, swing' should be parallel actions: use base verbs or gerunds consistently. Also 'tech' is likely 'tag' and 'hide and seek' should be hyphenated as 'hide-and-seek'. Ensure parallel structure when listing activities.

× We enjoyed a lot and it was a great memory from my childhood.

✓ We enjoyed ourselves a lot, and those were great memories from my childhood.

'Enjoyed a lot' lacks an object; use 'enjoyed ourselves' or 'had a lot of fun'. 'It was a great memory' is singular and mismatches plural experiences; use 'those were great memories' to match meaning and number.

× I work there every day and usually completed about 10,000 steps which is excellent exercise and make me feel fresh and energetic.

✓ I walk there every day and usually complete about 10,000 steps, which is excellent exercise and makes me feel fresh and energetic.

Mixed tenses: 'work' and 'completed' conflict. The intended habitual action needs present simple: 'walk' or 'go' and 'complete'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'which ... makes' not 'make'. 'Walk' fits context better than 'work'.

× And the park environment is so beautiful and calm that helped me to feel fresh.

✓ And the park environment is so beautiful and calm that it helps me feel refreshed.

The original mixes present ('is') with past ('helped'). Use present tense 'helps' for a general truth. Also 'feel fresh' is better phrased as 'feel refreshed' and omit unnecessary 'to'.

× So it is more important for people.

✓ So they are important for people.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'parks' (plural). Use 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Also 'more important' is odd without comparison; 'important' suffices.

× Yes, of course I would like to visit a big National Park in the future, such a place with mountains and forest.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to visit a big national park in the future, a place with mountains and forests.

Use lowercase 'national park' unless it's a proper name. 'such a place' is awkward; 'a place' is clearer. 'forest' should be plural 'forests' to match 'mountains' or use 'a forest'.

× I want to go because it peaceful and calm.

✓ I want to go because it is peaceful and calm.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' between subject 'it' and adjectives 'peaceful and calm'. Include 'is' to form a complete predicate.

× I like to hiking and taking photo of nature.

✓ I like hiking and taking photos of nature.

After 'like' use either the gerund ('hiking') or 'to' plus base verb ('to hike'), but not 'to hiking'. 'photo' should be plural 'photos' to match general activity.

× So I plan for the next year with my.

✓ So I plan to go next year with my family.

The original is incomplete and missing an object. 'plan for the next year with my' lacks 'family' or 'friends' and incorrect preposition 'for'. Use 'plan to go next year with my family' to express intention and include the companion.