Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct grammar: begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use one or two supporting details with linking words. Correct verb tense and singular/plural forms (e.g., “I loved going to parks when I was a child”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and gave me a chance to play outside. For example, I used to climb trees and play games with neighbors, which helped me relax and make friends.

Sugerencia: Start with a direct topic sentence and use natural phrasing. Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “I don’t play games as much anymore”). Add a brief supporting detail introduced by a linking word.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I don’t play games as much anymore. Instead, I go to unwind and spend time with my family or friends, which helps me de-stress after a busy week.

Sugerencia: Avoid filler phrases like “you know,” correct plural and word choice errors (children’s → children; sparks → parks). Use one reason and a specific example, linked by a cohesive connector (e.g., “because” / “for example”).

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. More parks would improve people’s wellbeing because they provide space for exercise and relaxation. For example, parents could take children to play safely while adults meet friends or exercise.

Sugerencia: Give a precise answer with correct grammar and add a specific reason or detail. Use linking words to expand briefly (e.g., “because” or “for instance”) and avoid repeating phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit parks in South Korea because many of them combine nature with modern design. For instance, I’d love to see Seonyudo Park in Seoul, which is known for its gardens and riverside paths where I could relax and take photos.

× Yes, I love to go to the parks.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks.

The question asked about liking parks as a child (past). The verb should be in the past tense to match the time frame. Change 'love to go' (present) to 'loved going' (past continuous preference). Use 'parks' without 'the' for general meaning.

× Before when I was a child and up until now, I still love going to parks and it helps me relieve my stress and that's why I love going to park.

✓ When I was a child and even until now, I have still loved going to parks because it helps me relieve stress, and that's why I love going to parks.

The original mixes past and present awkwardly and repeats phrases. Use 'When I was a child' to set past context, 'have still loved' or 'have always loved' to show continuous preference to present. Use 'parks' consistently and remove redundant 'my'. 'Relieve my stress' can be 'relieve stress' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I still love going to parks, but this time I'm not engaging into games anymore and I'm there to unwind, relax with my family and friends.

✓ Yes, I still love going to parks, but these days I'm not engaging in games anymore; I'm there to unwind and relax with my family and friends.

Use 'engaging in' not 'engaging into'. Also 'this time' is unnatural for habitual present; 'these days' is better. Add 'and' between 'unwind' and 'relax' and use a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses.

× Yes, I would love to because, you know, it really helps people relieve their stress, especially for adults and for children's.

✓ Yes, I would love to because, you know, it really helps people relieve stress, especially adults and children.

Do not use possessive 'children's' here; use plural noun 'children'. 'Relieve their stress' is acceptable, but 'relieve stress' is more natural. Remove 'for' before 'adults' and 'children' when listing groups.

× So it would be a privilege if we would see lots of sparks in our city.

✓ So it would be a privilege if we could see lots of parks in our city.

The word 'sparks' is a typo for 'parks'. Use 'could see' rather than repeated 'would' for a polite conditional; both are possible but 'could' is more natural here.

× Yes, but it would be in other country like South Korea.

✓ Yes, but it would be in another country, like South Korea.

Use 'another' before singular 'country', not 'other'. Add a comma before 'like' when giving an example.

× I would love to visit one of their parks and I would love to unwind there.

✓ I would love to visit one of their parks and unwind there.

The repetition 'I would love' is redundant; combine phrases. 'Their parks' is acceptable to refer to parks in that country. The sentence is otherwise grammatically fine.