Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t enjoy parks as a child.”), avoid fillers (uh, um), reduce repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

Ejemplo: No, I didn’t enjoy going to parks as a child. My father often made me draw trees in my notebook, which felt like a chore. I preferred hanging out with my friends where we could play games and be carefree.

Sugerencia: Good direct answer and relevant details. Improve coherence by using linking words (for example, “so” or “which”) and avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (“enhance our performance Deal”). Use one concise reason with a clear result.

Ejemplo: Yes, I’m fond of going to parks with my husband. We often go on weekends, buy ice cream, and talk about work challenges, which helps us relax and recharge. As a result, we return to work feeling more focused and productive.

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, “because” and “also”). Avoid vague phrases and hesitations; use precise vocabulary like “promote exercise” and “community space.”

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. I’d like more parks because they promote exercise and healthy lifestyles. Also, parks provide community spaces where people can meet, relax, and socialize.

Sugerencia: Good specific example. Improve naturalness by removing filler words and tightening sentences. Briefly explain why the park appeals to you with one or two concrete details (e.g. attractions you want to try).

Ejemplo: Yes. For example, I’d love to visit Disneyland with my husband because it has many attractions and thrilling rides. I’m especially excited to try the roller coaster and experience the themed areas together.

× To be honest with you, uh, I dislike going to parks, uh, because, uh, my father was retired and he took me there and he forced me to draw the, uh, trees, uh, in my notebook.

✓ To be honest with you, I disliked going to parks because my father had retired and he took me there and forced me to draw the trees in my notebook.

The student mixes present 'dislike' with past events. Use past tense 'disliked' to match 'took' and 'forced'. Also 'my father was retired' is passive and awkward; 'my father had retired' indicates his retirement occurred before he took the student to parks. Remove filler 'uh' and redundant articles for clarity.

× And, uh, I didn't like to do that.

✓ And I didn't like doing that.

After 'didn't like' the verb should be in -ing form (gerund) rather than infinitive. Use 'doing' to express dislike of an activity in the past.

× Uh, I just like to hang out with my friends.

✓ I just liked hanging out with my friends.

The speaker is describing childhood preference, so past tense 'liked' is appropriate. Also use 'hanging out' (gerund) after 'like' when talking about general habits.

× Yes, I'm fond of going to parks with my husband.

✓ Yes, I'm fond of going to parks with my husband.

This sentence is correct in present tense expressing a current preference; no change needed.

× Uh, sometimes on weekends we go there and have fun.

✓ Sometimes on weekends we go there and have fun.

Sentence is correct in present habitual tense; removed filler 'uh' for clarity.

× We buy ice cream and talk about our challenges at work and, uh, it helps us to be relaxed and fresh and, uh, enhance our performance Deal.

✓ We buy ice cream and talk about our challenges at work, and it helps us feel relaxed and refreshed and enhances our performance.

Use 'helps us feel' instead of 'helps us to be relaxed' for natural collocation; 'fresh' should be 'refreshed' (adjective after feel); 'enhance' must agree with singular subject 'it', so use 'enhances'. Remove 'Deal' which is unclear.

× Sure, definitely. I'd like to see more parks because I think it's important for people, some of the people, uh, become motivated and to go to new places and parks, uh, places in crucial role to encourage people to do exercises and gather together and hang out there.

✓ Sure, definitely. I'd like to see more parks because I think they're important for people; some people become motivated to visit new places. Parks play a crucial role in encouraging people to exercise, gather together, and hang out.

Sentence has article and structure problems. Use 'they're' to refer to parks. Remove redundant 'the' before 'people' and 'places'. 'In crucial role' should be 'play a crucial role'. Use parallel verbs 'encouraging... and' and correct infinitive 'to visit'. Break into two sentences for clarity.

× Yes, actually I have short list of some interesting parks that I like to go.

✓ Yes, actually I have a short list of some interesting parks that I would like to visit.

Missing article 'a' before 'short list'. Use 'would like to visit' or 'like to go to' for future intention; 'like to go' is incomplete without 'to' and 'visit' is more natural. 'Parks that I like to go' is ungrammatical.

× For instance, I like to go to Disneyland with my husband.

✓ For instance, I'd like to go to Disneyland with my husband.

Context asks about future parks to visit; use conditional/future 'I'd like' to express desire rather than simple present 'I like'.

× Uh, I think it's full of attractions and I like to try a roller coaster.

✓ I think it's full of attractions and I'd like to try a roller coaster.

To express desire to try something in the future, use 'I'd like to' or 'I would like to' rather than present 'I like to'.

× It will be great if I could go there.

✓ It would be great if I could go there.

Use 'would' in the conditional clause to express hypothetical or desired future events. 'It will be great if I could go' mixes future 'will' with past modal 'could'; 'It would be great if I could go' is correct.