Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I loved going to parks as a child), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words and repetition, correct basic grammar (past tense, articles), and keep to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, so, because) to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my friends and I often played cricket there for three to four hours after school, which was the best part of my day. Because the park was close to my house, we went almost every afternoon and made many fun memories.

Sugerencia: Clarify your meaning and use correct tense. Begin with a direct reply (Yes or No and why). Use linking words to explain routine and purpose, and avoid awkward phrasing. Replace informal or unclear phrases like "quiet fitness freak" with clearer expressions.

Ejemplo: Yes, I still like going to parks. I go most days to walk and reach my goal of 10,000 steps because I enjoy staying fit. In addition, the fresh air and quiet atmosphere help me relax after a busy day.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and give a specific reason. Use proper grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Use linking phrases like "because" or "so" to connect cause and effect. Keep sentences short and precise, and give an example of how more parks would help.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because there are very few green spaces now. More parks would give people places to relax and exercise, and they would improve air quality in busy neighbourhoods.

Sugerencia: Be specific and avoid confusing phrasing. Start with a clear statement about the park you want to visit. Give a concise reason and an example or source (e.g. friends' recommendations). Correct grammar (articles, verb forms) and remove repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would like to visit the amusement parks in Dubai in the future. My friends who have been there described the exciting rides and spectacular shows, so I think it would be a very enjoyable visit.

× I guess of course I do.

✓ I guess, of course, I did.

The question asks about liking parks as a child (past time), so the verb should be in past tense. Use 'did' to match the past-time reference. Also add commas for clarity.

× When I was a child I used to play outside 'cause because it was the best feeling for the me in the part of my day and we were and are.

✓ When I was a child, I used to play outside because it was the best part of my day.

The original contains redundancy (''cause because'), unnecessary words ('the me', 'in the part of'), and an unclear clause 'we were and are'. Simplify to a single clear past-tense sentence, removing extra pronouns and redundant words.

× My group of my friends used to play cricket outside in the park and we enjoy a lot.

✓ My group of friends used to play cricket outside in the park, and we enjoyed it a lot.

The time frame is past, so verbs must be past tense ('enjoyed' not 'enjoy'). Also 'group of my friends' is wordy; 'group of friends' is more natural. Add 'it' as the object of 'enjoyed'.

× We play about 3 to 4 hours consistent.

✓ We used to play for about three to four hours consistently.

Past habit requires past construction 'used to'. Use 'for' with a duration and 'consistently' as the adverb. Spell out numbers in writing for clarity.

× As the time buying grew, I used to go park now for my 10K steps.

✓ As I got older, I now go to the park to get my 10,000 steps.

The phrase 'time buying grew' is incorrect. Use 'as I got older'. 'Go park' needs the preposition 'to' and '10K' is better written '10,000'. Match present habit with 'now' and infinitive purpose 'to get'.

× Really because I am a quiet fitness freak.

✓ It's true because I am quite a fitness freak.

'Quiet' is an adjective meaning silent; the adverb 'quite' is intended here to modify 'a fitness freak'. Also add a subject 'It's true' to make a complete sentence.

× I love to do fitness and in today's time I regularly go to park for my 10K daily steps only.

✓ I love to exercise, and these days I regularly go to the park to complete my 10,000 daily steps.

Use 'exercise' instead of 'do fitness'. 'These days' fits the present habit. Include 'to the park' and 'to complete' to show purpose; write '10,000' and place 'daily' before 'steps' for clarity.

× Yes I would love to see the more parks in my city because the city I live in have very less parks but I am very person who loves soothing time experience so the park plays a good role in it and I love to spending my time in parks as well.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because the city I live in has very few parks. I am a person who enjoys peaceful experiences, so parks play a good role in that, and I love spending my time in parks as well.

Remove the unnecessary 'the' before 'more parks'. Use 'has' for subject-verb agreement with 'the city'. 'Very less' is incorrect; use 'very few' or 'few'. Add articles 'a person' and correct 'soothing time experience' to 'enjoys peaceful experiences'. Use 'spending' not 'to spending'. Split into clearer sentences.

× Well, I if I get the opportunity to move to any park I would love.

✓ Well, if I get the opportunity to go to a park, I would love to.

Remove the extra 'I' after 'Well,' and use 'go to a park' rather than 'move to any park'. Keep the conditional structure clear.

× So I may select a amusement park in Dubai because I have listened many, many experience, so many experiences of my friends who have visited there and they explain me something like that.

✓ So I might choose an amusement park in Dubai because I have heard many stories from friends who have visited there and they described it to me.

Use 'an' before a vowel sound in 'amusement', and 'might' is more natural than 'may' in this context. 'Listened many, many experience' is incorrect; use 'heard many stories' or 'many experiences'. 'They explain me' is incorrect: use 'they described it to me' or 'they told me about it'.

× It's very enjoyable and I love to visit there.

✓ It sounds very enjoyable, and I would love to visit there.

Use 'sounds' to report others' descriptions and 'would love' to express a conditional future desire. 'Love to visit there' is acceptable but 'would love to visit there' matches the conditional tone.