Parks— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct repetition and tense consistency, and add a linking phrase and a specific detail. Use past tense consistently for childhood. Avoid filler words and reduce sentence count to 2–3.

Ejemplo: Yes, I did. I loved going to parks as a child because I enjoyed watching birds and squirrels, and I often played on the swings and slides at the playground.

Sugerencia: Use consistent verb tenses and vary vocabulary; avoid repeating words like “usually” and correct plural forms. Use linking phrase to connect frequency with activities and keep within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. I go to the park two or three times a week, where I usually run, play basketball, or practice badminton to stay fit.

Sugerencia: Make your main idea clear with a stronger topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g. 'picnic' and 'picnicking'), and use linking words. Provide one or two specific benefits to support your opinion.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would. Parks offer a healthy space for people to relax and exercise, for example families can have picnics and friends can meet for a walk or a game.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations (‘uh’, repeated words), use clearer sentence structure and correct grammar (e.g. 'aerobics' and 'it looks fun'). Give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit.

Ejemplo: Yes, Lumpini Park in Bangkok. I want to visit because it is very large, popular for outdoor exercise, and they have group aerobics classes in the evening which look fun to join.

× I really love them 'cause when when I go to park I like to watch some animals and there's also a playground there, so I always play there.

✓ I really loved them because when I went to the park I liked to watch some animals, and there was also a playground there, so I always played there.

Tense consistency and article use: The question asked about childhood, so past tense should be used for the student's actions (use 'loved', 'went', 'liked', 'was', 'played'). Also include the definite article 'the' before 'park' when referring to a specific place; 'because' is the standard written form instead of 'cause'. Remove duplicate word 'when'. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout responses about childhood and use 'the' before 'park'.

× I usually go there two to three days a week and I usually do many exercise like running or playing basketball or maybe playing badmintons.

✓ I usually go there two or three days a week and I usually do a lot of exercise, like running, playing basketball, or maybe playing badminton.

Quantifier and countable noun use and word choice: Use 'two or three' instead of 'two to three' for spoken frequency, and 'a lot of exercise' is more natural than 'many exercise' because 'exercise' is uncountable. 'Badminton' is an uncountable sport name (not 'badmintons'). Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a lot of' with uncountable nouns and singular sport names.

× I really enjoyed them.

✓ I really enjoy it.

Tense and pronoun reference: The student had been describing current habitual activities, so present tense 'I really enjoy it' fits better than past 'enjoyed'. Also use 'it' to refer to going to parks in general rather than 'them' which is vague. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with surrounding sentences and use clear pronouns.

× I feel like the park is a place that people can enjoy the time.

✓ I feel like parks are places where people can enjoy their time.

Article and noun number: Using 'parks are places' generalizes the idea, which fits the context. 'The park' implies a specific park; 'enjoy their time' uses possessive pronoun for clarity. Also 'where' is more natural than 'that' in this clause. Suggestion: use plural or definite article appropriately and match pronouns ('their time').

× They can spend their free time there and they can do whatever they want, like exercising or picnic, picnicking or meet meeting someone.

✓ They can spend their free time there and they can do whatever they want, like exercising, having a picnic, or meeting someone.

Verb form and word choice: Use gerunds consistently after 'like' ('exercising', 'having a picnic', 'meeting someone'). 'Picnic' as a verb is fine but 'having a picnic' is more natural; 'meet meeting' is incorrect duplication. Suggestion: use parallel gerund forms and remove duplicates.

× Are there any parks you want to go to in the future?

✓ Are there any parks you would like to go to in the future?

Modal verb usage for polite future preference: 'Would like' is more natural and polite when expressing future desire. The original question is acceptable but 'would like' clarifies intention. Suggestion: use 'would like to' for preferences about the future.

× It's uh, Lumpini Park in Bangkok, Thailand because I saw it on social media.

✓ It's Lumpini Park in Bangkok, Thailand because I saw it on social media.

Redundant filler removal: Grammatically the sentence just needs removal of the filler comma; no article issue beyond correct proper noun usage. Keep it concise. Suggestion: avoid filler sounds when writing; proper nouns do not need articles here.

× That's the, the place is uh, so big and a lot of people go exercise there and they also have an aerobic in the evening and that's look fun.

✓ The place is very big and many people go there to exercise, and they also have aerobics in the evening, which looks fun.

Multiple errors: Remove duplicated words and fillers; use 'very big' instead of 'so big' for formality; 'a lot of people' -> 'many people' or 'a lot of people' is fine, but add 'go there to exercise' for clarity. 'Aerobic' is a noun error: use 'aerobics' (the activity) or 'an aerobics class'. 'That's look fun' incorrect - change to 'which looks fun'. Also subject-verb agreement and verb forms adjusted. Suggestion: use correct noun forms ('aerobics'), include 'to' after 'go' when followed by verb, and use 'which looks' for non-defining clause.